Talk:Pokemon OBSIDIAN Black/@comment-69.35.168.121-20140118174125

Player referenced numerous times music and ideas that, according to the story's setting, did not exist or that he couldn't have known. Immersion broken, story ruined. Seriously, though, this was obviously created to drum up traffic to your fanfic, and I really hate that kind of cheap ploy. It changes it from a creepy story about pokemon to a lost chapter of your Terminator story. Also, sometimes you went into too much detail. For example, we didn't need Pokemon lists for your Elite Four, we didn't need to know their levels, and we definitely didn't need to know their genders.