Talk:Deep in Kanto's Waters/@comment-6794436-20150103020536

Hey, a truly great Pokepasta!

Good: The storytelling and descriptions in this were excellent, and truly made me envision all that was occuring in the pasta. I also like your take on Missingno, making him a monster of some sort is an approach I have seen seldom done. The story is fairly creepy and brings a lot to the table for a Pokepasta, one of the hardest genres to write about.

Bad: There are a few grammar errors, nothing huge, but they are still present. Another problem that I have also somewhat contradicts my first statement about Missingno. Missingno Pokepastas are a bit overdone, so that brings the story down a bit. The one fatal flaw that somewhat ruins the story for me is the rushed ending. Everything was looking so good until the end, and then it just fell flat. Don't worry buddy, one of my pastas was like that too ;)

Verdict: 7/10- The writing and storytelling were excellent, but the overdone plot focus and rushed ending bring the story down a few notches.

-Incorrect3