Talk:I Need to Stop the Knocking/@comment-25021327-20160816023723

To be honest, I'm not a huge fan of this one. I can tell that the author has some writing chops, but I feel like this one is another case of style over content. I like the concept here, the slow reveal that mixes physical sensations with less tangible ones. And some of the descriptions are nice and interesting (I liked vomiting through the skin, for example). However on the whole, (and this is simply my own opinion) a lot of this feels unnecessarilly overwritten.

Some of the wordings and descriptions kind of took me out of the pasta, and with something like this, I feel like I would want maximum immersion in the narrative. By the time I got to the end, I felt a little let down by the way the piece had gone, and resolved itself.

All that said, I don't think it's a bad piece, and I think that a lot of readers will enjoy it. I hope this review didn;t come across harsh or anything, this one just wasn't done in a style that I could fully appreciate. I'm glad to have given this a review though, and am interested to see more stuff from you :)