Talk:Special (Alternate Mindfuck Comp. Entry)/@comment-24082398-20150423023847

Alrighty, another review for another esteemed member of the wiki! I must be getting around!

What was good? To be honest, the whole premise was pretty cool. The idea of a post-apocalyptic war wiping out most of the world barring a few 'hotspots' is a very interesting concept. I feel as if this idea could be expanded on so that this story could have a few sequels that builds up the world into an incredible universe brimming with fresh ideas. There were a few grammatical errors but not enough to kill the whole story. The vocabulary was great, as well, and it flowed very well.

Now, onto the bad. Really, the only bad things I could pick apart was the absence of anything typically creepy--to me, it was more intriguing than creepy--and the very few grammatical and formatting errors. This story had a great mindfuck and all, but it wasn't all too creepy, which, I believe, is this story's biggest drawback. Maybe if the idea was a bit darker and more grim, it could make this story both interesting and creepy.

Overall, I give this story 7.5. It was a great concept and great execution, but it lacked the creep factor and so it cost the story a few points. It would be a great idea to expand on if you want to though, and if you do, I would love to read the installments! Good job!