Talk:Memories Never Die/@comment-25021327-20151014220703

Not bad, It's good to see you writing again :) I thought that this one was pretty enjoyable, mysterious enough to keep me wanting to read, and the pacing felt pretty even to me.

The plot felt pretty fresh to me, and I wasn't entirey sure where the story was going, which was kind of nice. There were afew parts that gelt odd to me, The way that Joseph turned sort of malicious and suicidal at the end felt a bit abrupt, and though he says he doesn't have the immortality that Daniel now has,  was wondering what could have made him so miserable as to want Daniel to shoot him, and why he was unwilling to shoot himself. He seems to have animosity towards Daniel's parents for what they did, but, I didn;t get the ipression through reading that he was gainst the process to the extent of making someone else kill him to escape his 'grandfather."

I was also wndering if there was a significance to the Grandother's floor/room. I felt like something was going to be revealed up there, but wasn't, unless I missed something. But the description worked well, and most of the descriptions here felt good, I felt mostly able to imagining everything that was being written about.

I enjoyed the feel of this one, and I thought it was fairly well written, a few wordings that felt odd to me, but nothing that was too distracting. This is a somewhat intriguing concept, and it could be further explored, but for the length and pace of this story, I thought it did a fine job. I'm glad that you didnt feel the need to shoehorn your writing into the 'mindfuck' realm again. I'm gad I gave this a read.