Talk:Loss of Memory (Rewritten)/@comment-6794436-20150319185212

This is mediocre I guess, but I'll take it!

Good: As Urkel said, the atmosphere in this piece is quite welll, and the descriptions were quite nice also. This pasta isn't too short or too long, and it keeps an even balance between the two that makes this pasta never feel like it's dragging on, or that there isn't enough information. I really like the plot also, as pastas about apocalypses and such really intrigue me.

Bad: For this piece, the main problem was the grammar, specifically when it has to do with tenses. This pasta switches between past and present tense an absurd amount of time, and it really detracts from the pasta a lot. The plot also, despite me loving the main idea of it, felt quite rushed and I feel as though there could have been a few things done to make the pasta seem less rushed. There are also some inconsistencies in the story, specifically with the wife as sometimes she is referred to as a wife, and others as a girlfriend, which once again got quite annoying over time.

Verdict: 4/10- There were too many grammatical errors to count, but I like the basic plot and length enough that I'd give this pasta the grade it has now.

-Incorrect3