Talk:'Happy Birthday' from Youtube/@comment-11079349-20131201035512

This is definitely an improvement from before that ending was kinda cool, and the fact that this person is insane definitely makes this whole thing more believable. I also like how in the revision you sort of used the players insanity to explain the events. So, my revised rating would be an 8/10 because this is a great pasta. the only problem I can see is that it almost implies that the protagonist died right after she blacked out. still, better than the "I put the gun to my head and killed myself." basically implying that the protagonist is speaking to us from beyond the grave. the way this is done is that it's still open for the reader to decide whether or not the person lived.