Talk:Til death do us part/@comment-32602006-20140108061705

This is good, but I can't help but feeling like it could be better. Good prologue entries, but the rest of it could have been expanded more. I think it would be creepier if the madness of the thing inhabiting the wife's body was revealed gradually over four or five entires rather than she comes back, has purple eyes, and next thing the husband knows she's killing a bunch of people.

Writing quality: 08/10 believable for journal entries except should be expanded

Entertainment value: 07.5/10 Good concept and it held my interest, but could use more suspense and tension

Creepyness: 07/10 the reveal was kind of sudden with not much build up, but even so the whole concept itself is pretty creepy. Not something I'm likely to have nighmares over, but still pretty good.

Realism: 08/10 Actually resurrecting the dead using occult methods is something I am highly skeptical of, mainly due to my religious beliefs, but reanimating the dead is a different story and something I find more beleivable.

Emotional Impact: 07/10 You did a good job building up optimism in the beginning only to have it crushed in the end to make us feel sorry for the protagonist, but it could use a little more build-up to show just how desperate he is. Maybe show him going through the five grief stages or something

Final verdict: 7.5 Good job but I wish it was longer.