Talk:The Man In The Corner/@comment-24747574-20140822081401

Idk whether it was intended, but the first thing that is rather strange is, that you name 4:30 AM twice in one night. Was the first time he got up just a dream?

Also, killing 5 people with a knife is a pretty difficult task, unless he received extended military training, and even then getting 5 people, without them screaming, running out or brawling him down...the demon told them they had to suffer and there is no way to cattle up 5 people in broad daylight to torture them, in an open restaraunt with visitors at that.

Also, the wave of anger, as you described it, comes pretty sudden and is rather unexplained.

A nice idea, but feels a little rushed. Such stories are most often betting on the feeling of menace and oppression - a stalker pushing down on you, lurking behind the corner, slowly degrading your psyche until nothing is left and you give in to his bidding. In this story is was more like "There is that guy...total blackness, white eyes...name's Peter...we watch TV on satursday together"

Just my humble opinion though :3