Talk:Sohot.com/@comment-11366536-20160424015625

Okay well, congratulations for being one of my first reviews in a looong time. (This won't get you any happy-points from me, though.)

NSFW pastas are a rarity on here, so I have to admit that this one really captured my interest when I first saw it. As I read the story, it was a pretty decent read overall, but it slowly started to degrade as the story began to continue onwards to the point where it felt like it was just being blatantly rushed into completion.

The first problem I had with the story was the slow decline of suspense and mystery. I'll admit, the beginning of the story started off pretty mysterious, especially with the mysterious download and how it gets onto the narrator's USB. Sadly, past that the story begins to degrade to the point of lackluster-quality pastas. So then suddenly the file is playable and the narrator suddenly discovers an untold backstory? The pacing helped to kill the mood as the story progressed.

Secondly, the "big revelation" at the end just felt like a mess. As forementioned, the author just suddenly inexplicably gets suspicious about how the video could relate to his mother and how it affected his life somehow. I guess it was supposed to come off as "shocking", but it mainly felt disappointing due to the buildup crashing down from the bad pacing.

As for positives, the story seems like you put a decent amount of detail and time into it, there's a minor amount of grammar errors, and it's fairly enjoyable but nothing too out of the ordinary for a standard creepypasta.

Final Verdict - 7/10 (Decent)