Talk:Through the Eyes of Oblivion/@comment-25021327-20141109151036

I think this was good, nothing revolutionary, as far as the story goes, but still kind of interesting. The spelling, grammar, format, and clarity were all in pretty good shape, which is always nice. I felt the descriptions were pretty well done as well.

The story had a pretty standard haunted video game plot, recouning the creepy behaviour of a game though. With a bit of suspension of disbelief, this felt like it could almost be be possible wit the conflicts of mods and such.

Though I admit I had to groan a bit when the game adressed the player by name, although thinking about it, I don't know if that was the player's name, or their character's name. And I guess it is at least conceivable that the game could have retrieved that info from the user's personal computer file. And at least this was done in text and not audio, which would be far less plausible.

I did like the wordplay with the title, with regard to the events in the story, seeing into this guy's eye sockets. I'm not sure if there was any subtext to what was going on in the story, or if it was just a recounting of bizarre events, I'm not very familiar with the Elder Scrolls series.

So in all, this was a fairly standard haunted game story, nothing mind blowing. It had its cliché moments, for sure, (a lot of pastas do) but I don't feel it did anything awfully egregious in my opinion.

Don't forget to sign your story and add it to the listing :)