Talk:It's just Pokémon X... right?/@comment-26480939-20190128031004

Eeh, this is ...kinda interesting, I guess? Not that great, though. Was there any significance to Rhyhorn being the starter Pokémon or was that just a red herring? Because Rhyhorn's evolved form, Rhydon, was the first Pokémon programmed into the original games. Was this trying to allude to that tidbit of info?

Aside from that, this is the whole 'cursed game somehow kills the previous owner' trope turned into a story, and that's pretty cliché for a gamepasta. Along with the whole 'previous player is somehow an important/significant character' thing, this needs a lot of work. Gratuitous blood and gore + the aforementioned clichés ≠ an effective pasta in this case. I'm sorry, but you need to do a bit more work on this for it to be truly good in my opinion. Perhaps you could elaborate a bit more on what happened to Johnathon before he put the cursed X gamecard up for sale, or explain why this gamecard was cursed to begin with.

DAE Rating: 6/10 Slightly above average, but still needs more work.