Talk:A Great Time/@comment-7027372-20130520200026

Well good job! It seems to me, and this is probably unrelated, but I see some similaritites to The Socialist. Not accusing you or anything but I think the elements really make this story great. My complaint lies within the blood. You can drive pain, anger, and gore without having to describe it entirely. To give an example "He became very angry." or "A white hot ball of energy fueled him to rage." My only personal complaint is Jamie. Who names a boy Jamie? I just think it's a girl name. Sorry to anyone who that offends. 6 Pi (18.84) out of 20