Talk:What Happened?/@comment-6794436-20150102014400

Well, it isn't a terrible mindfuck...

The good of the pasta: The pasta is written fairly well, say for a few small grammar errors here and there. The plot is a decent idea, although done many times before. This pasta is more or less saddening, and not very creepy, but still it has an unnerving tone.

Now the bad: This pasta fails as a mindfuck. After reading the first few lines, and before noticing the cats I said, "I really hope it doesn't end like I think it will" and of course, it did. The story wasn't very vague with the buildup leading up to the 'shocking' ending, and the story was fairly predictable.

My only other real problem with the story is the rather strange wording of some sentances, and a few instances where two sentences could be melded together to become one.

Verdict: 6/10- Great story, great, albeit overused, idea, but not a very good mindfuck.

-Incorrect3