Talk:Dover Demon/@comment-8198649-20140716235259

First off, you repeat a lot of stuff. That and grammar problems (and spelling errors) just makes it more confusing and redundant.

As for the story: while the story of it is cliched, its based off of real life events. Most so called monster sightings have some stupid kids getting themselves in trouble. But the ending? The shotgun isnt really neccissary. It takes away a horror that something could be out there and just makes it feel stale.

Over all this needs work. While the real life occurance is a plus, that doesnt take it out of the 4/10 im giving it.

I might revisit it and rerate it if you improve on it, but otherwise there isnt much else to say.