Talk:A Fixin' Young Family/@comment-6794436-20150626162712

Alright, time for that review I promised...

Good: The pasta obviously had a great deal of effort put into it, and it definitely has a cohesive, dark, and overall engaging plot. The pasta has decent length, not too short that it feels rushed, but at the same time not too long that it feels overly drawn out or boring. This pasta feels quite realistic, and there really aren't any cases where anything seems too far fetched to occur. I can't really judge it on grammar because it is, well, abysmal, but that was done on purpose to fit the style of writing.

Bad: My biggest gripe with this pasta is the writing style, that really was offputting to me. I can see how the slang can add to the scenery and set a tone, but to me, it just made things more confusing than they had to and made the pasta itself more tedious to read. If you really wanted to set a tone like what you did here, you could just state where they live and the reader can just imagine their accents for themselves. If that's a bit too upfront, you could just make some words have southern slang or abbreviations but they should be few and far between, not every other word. This pasta really wasn't all that creepy and like I said before, the writing style made a few parts confusing to read.

Verdict: 5.5/10- The writing style, at least in my opinion, really tainted the pasta a bit, making it confusing, tedious to read, and overall annoying. The pasta also really wasn't all that creepy. That being said, the pasta was very realistic, obviously had a great deal of effort put into it, and definitely has a cohesive, dark plotline. I think this could've been an excellent pasta if it was just written normally instead of with that "heavy accent".

-Incorrect3