Talk:Who Could Love an "It"?/@comment-5675310-20140427040154

Who Could Love An "It"? Well, maybe I don't love it, but it's good none the less.

Description: 5.0/10 - I've said many times in the past that your choice in words are usually great, but are often soiled by how it feels like you don't know what kind of poem you want to make. It's the same problem here. Often times I noticed a rhyme come out of nowhere when the rest of the poem seemed like it wanted nothing to do with rhymes. This just feels misplaced and doens't necessarily feel smooth compared to the rest of the story. Poor grammar doesn't help either, and will probably turn people off a few lines in.

Plot: 8.5/10 - It's a great idea, really. You took something as basic as a story of a mother who hated her child, and made it your own by cloaking it in different, smaller ideas. That's a really good thing, because it proves that you don't need to make something as ludicrously hard to understand as something like "Inception," to make it interesting and thought provoking. Also, the ending was great for and can really strike a nerve I imagine. Great job!

Entertainment: 7.5/10 - It doesn't quite over stay its welcome, but some lines feel excessive. Still, it held my attention long enough to finish.

Pros and Cons:

+ Great plot

+ Not too short, not too long

+ Great ending

- Some poor writing desicions

- Grammatical errors

Overall: 7.0/10 - Okay

"Scary's poems have had their ups and downs. Some are quite good, some not so much. Fortunately this is one of the better ones, and if you can ignore the poor grammar, then you might just find a bit of a gem."

- Marcus