Talk:Flout/@comment-26218682-20150324230458

I'm truly sad that, because of the constant influx of shitpastas, people don't get enough time to read nice creepypastas like this one.

Anywho, on to my review:

Build Up/Creepy Factor:

Bravo. The build up was somewhat off-putting at first until I grasped what was happening within the story, then it felt perfectly paced and it did creep me out a little as I tried to understand what was happening for the first 1/3 of the story or so.

Writing Style/Overall Feel:

This, for me, was the nicest part of the story. You write very similarly to me and I appreciate the fact that you have the ability to alter your storytelling to fit the mind of a character or to give an overall mood to the story. You worry about the details, which tells me you really appreciate the artform involved in all of this: ''not the potential reward for writing it. ''That's a big deal to me and I wish I could say more to commend you on that.

Spelling/Grammar:

As I had expected, aside from a few grammatical discrepencies in how I may have written it, it was flawless. But this is your artistic expression, not mine, so I can't dock any points for that, obviously.

Concept:

The concept was really nice, actually. Was it mind blowing? No, but I'm sure you didn't intend it to be. You got the very best you could have out of the concept you created, though, and that's really what I created this category for in my reviews.

Overall:

Build Up/Creepy Factor: 10/10

Honestly, I couldn't think of anything that could have been different in this category, so I couldn't really do anything but 10/10.

Writing Style/Overall Feel: 9/10

You paid attention to the details and it paid off. The mood was set, the only thing that took a point away for me was that I caught on relatively early to what was going on.

Spelling/Grammar: 10/10

I did not notice any "errors", just things I may written slightly differently.

Concept: 7/10

While you did get everything you possibly could out of the concept, the concept itself wasn't groundbreaking by any means. However, I fully enjoyed reading it and found it to be one of the best written pastas I've read.

 Final Score: 

9.0/10

You got everything you possibly could have out of this pasta. It was beautifully written and an absolute joy to read. More people should read these kinds of pastas and stop wasting their time with "The Sophia Show" crap.