Talk:Mario's Secret/@comment-6794436-20141231020236

Wow. Just wow.

Are you fucking kidding me? This story is literally one giant cliche from start to finish. I'll keep this quick, the plot itself is a cliche, the story could use a few touch ups in the spelling and grammar department, and it could use a complete rewrite to rid it of the numerous amounts of cliches.

Verdict: 1/10- This story is just one cliche. You should check this page out, it is a page of guidelines for struggling writers. Once you read it, your pasta writing skills should improve so that you don't use as many cliches.