Talk:Spooky Tellie/@comment-25021327-20150202164536

I'm not sure exactly the tone this story was going for. The title "spooky tellie" either seems inadvertantly silly, or like it is intentionally using an unassuming title to disarm the reader. As I read, I still wasn't sure which it was.

There are some spelling and grammar issues here, but nothing bad, and the format is okay. The pcing is a bit jumpy, and I had trouble following at times what exactly was going on, however it seemed like the main narrative of the story was something like, "I didn't notice the TV, I did notice the TV, I did something, I noticed the TV do something weird, repeat"

That was my main gripe with the story, it felt very repetitive to me. That coupled with the silly ending in this one had me scratching my head a bit. I know the wist at the end makes it so that nothing really supernatural actually happened, it was just a bird being a jerk. But That didn't explain the gory images on the TV. I also found it odd that while looking for the remote, the narrator didn't see it on top of the set, or notice a bird sitting there. Again, I thought, maybe this was meant to be a comic story, which is fine.

This isn;t too bad, I just did't know exactly what I was reading at first. Maybe I'll go and reread it knowing what I now know about the ending and see how it goes.