Talk:Why Me? (Five Night's At Freddy's Creepypasta)/@comment-6794436-20150218170436

Goddamnit... I thought we were done with the shitty FNAF pastas...

Good: Well, I've certainly read worse FNAF pastas, and the grammar in this isn't too atrocious. Also the way you integrated the "It's me" part at the end was kinda cool. Other than that, the only real good thing about this pasta is the fact that it isn't a wall of text.

Bad: FNAF pastas NEVER work. You can't make a creepypasta about a horror game, it just doesn't work. Therefore, this pasta is just like literally every  other FNAF pasta in the aspect that it is utterly uncreepy. The writing in this piece is quite boring too, with no real vocabulary words and just choppy writing all around. Also, this pasta is incredibly confusing at times, with names being pulled out randomly, and never mentioned again or prior to their appearance. One such example being the Jenny character, randomly mentioned once, and never seen from again. Also, this pasta is basically just a retelling of the minigames in FNAF 2 but with added backstory and some fluff...

Verdict: 2/10- FNAF pastas just don't work. Ever. This is another uncreepy, badly written, mess of a gaming pasta. However, this isn't as bad of a pasta as I've seen, and judging by your previous comments, you seemingly want to improve as a writer, so if you truly want to improve, I'd reccomend reading the Writer Guidelines, as they will certainly improve your writing skills by a lot.

-Incorrect3