Talk:Victim To You/@comment-6794436-20150317014519

Fucking Christ this was dark... I like it...

Good: The word choice and flow of this piece were incredible, as are many of your other previous poems. The story has an intriguing dark overtone, which leaves many indications of heinous crimes and terrible things ocurring. I somewhat expected such dark tones both from your previous work, and from an older pasta you posted under "The mister", and I must say that your pastas always have this intriguing sense of melancholy to them that draws readers in and leaves them with a sickly feeling in their stomach. The story is devoid of any cliches, and truly is an unnerving and sickening trip into the tormented mind of an abused narrator, made all the more twisted from the usage of realistic and terrible crimes that shockingly go on all the time.

Bad: There aren't really any bad things here other than the grammar mistakes, which there are a few of such as tense changes and the wrong usage of the word "your". Other than that, this truly is an impeccable piece.

Verdict: 8.5/10- This was another incredible poem with a dark overtone from you, and it certainly was a sickening, yet enjoyable read because of the way you use such intricate wording and the way you just overall wrote it and made it creepy. I can't wait to read more of your future work as your incredible writing talent never ceases to astound me!

-Incorrect3