Talk:A "Personality Test"/@comment-25021327-20141119014924

Not a bad little story. Facing our true selves may be one of the most frightening subjects for a lot of people, and it is ripe for horror fiction. The concept is kind of cool, the personality quiz that is almost antagonistic. I like thinking about whether the test actually had some way of knowing what the user would eventually choose, or if it just had some sort of algorhithm or random generator, and Jacob was just suffering from a guilty conscience.

Pacing here was pretty consistent, grammar, clarity, and spelling and all that jazz were all in pretty good order. There were a few word choices I found a bit odd. The program says that it will download "discrepant" information to Jacob's PC. I imagine this is intended to be some kind of incriminating/illegal content. And when it says the questions "relented on" I think maybe it ought to be that the questions were unrelenting, or something like that. But These were just little details I noticed, nothing really distracting.

The story is fairly cohesive, and flows well. I liked the ending, although it was thoroughly dismal, It is kind of telling about the character, making him a less likeable, and thus more interesting. He could conceivably be someone you know. I think the story would have worked with a happy ending as well, but the ending as it is works and fits with the dark tone I think you were going for. I didn't find this to be as much a mindfuck as just a kind of thought provoking story, and thus, didn;t feel gimmicky to me.

So, yeah I enjoyed this read. It was short, and pretty concise, and  Kind of a neat little Twilight (sparkle) Zone feel to it. And that's okay with me :)