Talk:Monstrum intrinsecus/@comment-6794436-20150105194715

This is pretty bad...

Good: The premise of the story is alright I guess, although a bit cliched. Oh yes, and this isn't the worst grammar I've seen on a pasta by a new user, but there are still a few instances of grammar errors.

Bad: This story is pretty cliched, and it truly is a shame as I really like the concept. It feels as though a lot of the story was left out, as I really am a bit confused right now. Also, reading your previous comment, why the hell would you post without thought? You're only supposed to post if you put a lot of thought and effort into your pasta in an attempt to genuinely scare people! But, I digress...

It is annoying when people use latin in their pastas, as it truly doesn't make anything creepier, and all in all drags the story down as a cliche.

Verdict: 4/10- This story is a bit confusing, not creepy, and there are a few grammar errors. Also, you stated before that you posted this without thought, making it seem as though you lacked in effort. I would reccomend you check out the New Writer Guidelines, as reading them will definitely help you with writing future pastas.

-Incorrect3