Talk:Four Letters/@comment-7706473-20130910153539

How did I not hear about this one?

I *really* liked the main character. James Brown (Pvt.) was brash, unguarded, and at the same time unsure. You have a knack for writing people that seem like people and it really came through here. The entirety of the build-up walked an extremely fine line between the sort of supernatural happenings we can expect in creepypasta, and being a true to life story where an extremely unlucky vet is projecting his many problems onto the world around him...

Or both.

I don't have time to give it a once-over again before I head out, though I'd like to when I get back. A lot of the - let's call them trigger events - don't actually threaten James directly, but instead do something horrible or unpleasant to life around him. Screaming children, ungrateful civvies - low econ drama those of us who live in rural/poor areas are all very familiar with, amplified to a power of ten.

But the way you know James has some doubts, the strength of the conversation with the father (and that bonechillingly short 'welcome home') - all of these make the final scene stronger. And though I had hunch of what the four letters'd be when I started reading, it was still pleasant to see them as the finisher...

I'm guessing that it might have had a 'happier' ending if he'd gone to his psyche more/trusted her/got a better psyche... Extremely enjoyable to read, and what a way to use CoD in a pasta. Literally my only complaint is that you probably shouldn't have put 'you shouldn't have done that' due to how it is somewhat overdose'... Even though this is one of the few pastas where as an unrelated phrase it works so well. And yes, that is literally my only complaint.

A pleasant relative, the Tigerlily - for Pride, Prosperity, and a Dream Deferred.