Talk:Undertale - No Mercy (Revised)/@comment-29502200-20160907040012

Jesus fucking christ an undertale Creepypasta... ALRIGHT REVIEW TIME

Title: It works, it's simple, I'll take it.

Intro: In my opinion (IN MY OPINION) I feel like the second sentence should be your opener. The first sentence didn't speak a lot to me, but the second setence caught my attention.

Story: I didn't like the story; BUT BUT BUT BUT, I didn't dislike it, this needs to be known. The story had a few interesting points, but that was it. To me the story was "filler-filler-interesting-filler-filler-interesting-filler-filler-interesting." The filler wasn't bad (this needs to be known) but it still felt like I was reading filler.

Ending: ....I don't know. It's a cliche ending; BUT, it works as a good cliff hanger.

Overall Score: 6/10. It's a story I wouldn't recommend reading, but at the same time I wouldn't say "don't waste your time, it's terrible." To summarize it in a sentence "it's not good, it's not bad, it's okay."