Talk:The Video Game Suit/@comment-14341590-20140929132508

Similar to FunnyMouth (the style you went for) I presume. Anyway, I thought it was decent. I wouldn't give it a (10/10) due to it being full of common grammatical errors. Although, I still liked the story. It wasn't the best but for a first, I'd have to say you are doing the right thing.

I'd Rate it a:

4.5/10

Sorry. But it is missing a lot of detail and skips a lot of the development/build-up.