Talk:Peripheral Vision/@comment-7706473-20130723141111/@comment-5245439-20130723143255

Thanks for your review again Storm :)

What you said is exactly what I was aiming for with this pasta. I was trying to make the paranoia seem natural, whereas other pastas make it appear out of nowhere. I wanted it to be a lot more about that aspect than the sudden killing at the end.

My personal favorite line is at the very end, with the Game Over. I know lots of pastas use the Game Over as a cliche, but I wanted to make it meld somehow without seeming too out of place. The protagonist's death was the perfect place for it imo.

I also feel as though there's a hidden story to this pasta, although maybe that's because I wrote it, from the killer's perspective. After the killer enters the house with closed blinds, thinking nobody is home, he hears a door slam shut. The killer also gets paranoid at this point, and it's cat-and-mouse from there. But that's a hidden story, and I'm not sure if many will catch it, as the entire pasta is from the young man's POV.

Sorry about the lamp D:

I'm happy you enjoyed the story! Again, thanks for your review :)