Talk:Fairy Odd Parents: They're Gone/@comment-4332975-20140211171702

The intro was a new twist on an old theme, which I appreciated. Having shopped at the Salvation Army before, this part felt very plausible. Prices there are dirt cheap, and quality control often slips on things like DVDs and games that get donated, so cases with the wrong disk aren't uncommon.

Unfortunately, from there it doesn't deviate too much from the standard Lost Episode formula. Aside from some minor editing concerns, it's competently written. It's just not very imaginative. Considering the source material, that's even more disappointing. With Timmy's wishes, there was a lot of room for an Unforseen Concequences angle. The story could have also dealt with the loss of a different character, and possibly the realization of how important they truly were.

Moreover, though, the story of the episode feels a trifle rushed. The montage sounds questionable on how long it could be, and doesn't add that much. It mostly just sounds like a framing device for the ending, and I'm sorry to say, not a particularly good one. Not terrible either, but very dull. It doesn't add much, and I'm not certain that anything would be lost be cutting out the bit about it looping entirely, other than to make the episode sound less boring.

All in all, it was just a little too predictable, and the dialogue didn't sound very natural. You were off to a fairly good start, but I don't think you took enough risks. I enjoyed it somewhat, but not as much as I think I could have.