Talk:The Game Nobody Asked For/@comment-11366536-20160608182742

Oh lord, here we go again.

I had a very difficult time attempting to understand the story due to the messy Google-Translate-esque Grammar & the lack of spacing between certain paragraphs, resulting in a cluster of two paragraphs sometimes in the story.

From what I could try to understand however, I guess this is supposed to be a mindfuck creepypasta, but the lack of understanding makes it incredibly messy & poorly executed. The plot takes these weird twists and turns, often emphasizing details that serve no purpose later onwards in the story, and there was nothing I could find interesting or remotely scary about the story at all (Mainly due to the Grammar & Spacing I mentioned earlier.)

Overall, serious improvements could be made to this story.

Verdict - 2/10 (Awful)

If you're new at writing Creepy Pastas, I'd suggest reading this so that it may aid you in all future writing attempts.