Talk:What a Waste/@comment-5245439-20130729090215

First off, this pasta gets points for being disturbing. It's not very creepy, but it's twisted, yet this could very well be a real situation, and one we're warned about all too well as youngsters.

However, the characters are how old? 5, right? Why are they thinking about swearing at such a young age? Honestly, I never swore until I was 10, so that breaks the realism for me. The kid's reactions are more adult than, well, kiddish.

Now, the gunshot at the end was a bit... out-of-nowhere. I know the cops were around but how did they find the kid? These two men had hidden up pretty safely in a cave, and were actively hiding from the police. What leads did they get to find them? This isn't like Night of the Living Dead, where you see the police actively killing zombies in other scenes. I don't like that out-of-nowhere part, it seems too abrupt.

The rest of the ending is spectacular. It leaves you wanting more, but shows you that there should've been nothing to want in the first place at the same time. The whole string of events was a waste, just like many strings of events in real life ARE.

All of these factors combined makes me rate the pasta a 6/10.

P.S. Fix the black text. Other colors besides white are against the rules.