Talk:Five Nights at Freddy's - Not/@comment-25021327-20151207230725

I think there was some good stuff going on here, but as a whole it felt a little lacking to me. The writing felt pretty competant, and this reads better than a lot of other first pastas. The screenshots and images were a nice touch, and I think added a little more to the story. The descriptions could have been a little ore detailed I thought, but they were adequate, and to someone who has played/watched more FNAF than me, the descriptions are probably fine.

The concept here could be interseting, but the whole story feels a little sparse to me. It feels like a bit of a jump for the narrator to go from being kind of confused by the gameplay to being fairly certain that the game is a suicide note. To me, the game seems more like something that was trying to be an edgy mod, but doesn't go very far than an actual confession, or cry for attention. That's just me though, others might get more of a sense of the mtivation of the mod maker.

But it's not a bad little pasta, I just think it could have been expanded on a little more :)