Talk:Lobby 126/@comment-25021327-20160715230107

I thought this was a pretty good read. When I started I was just assuming it was another funnymouth knockoff, but it pulls off the chatroom format pretty well. There isn;t a whole lot of meat to this story, but I think it works with the short length of the pasta here. It doesn't drag on or string the reader along too much, and it gives the ending to the reader without giving too many obvious clues before the fact.

Again, nothing groundbreaking or mind blowing in this one, but I think it's solid and holds up pretty well. The fact that all the characters are so closely located and suddenly have this incident happen (pretty quickly, it seems) is a little rushed or simple feeling, but as I said, I think it works with the pace and length here. With just a little suspension of disbelief I think that this one gets the job done. Glad I read this one.