Talk:Frozen in Time/@comment-24240632-20131104014640

Frozen in time reading another good pasta from, CT.

Description: 8.0/10 - I'm not going to say it couldn't have been better, because I do feel like you need to expand your vocabulary when writing a little bit. That's not to say that using simple, but effective words don't work, however I feel like the way things were described was a little dissapointing. There were a few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that ruined the experience in the slightest.

Plot: 7.6/10 - It was a very simplistic plot that didn't really present anything remotely new, but like most of your other stories it didn't hold back on being creepy. The whole story was rather short, but I suppose that's a good thing just as much as it's a bad thing. While it might be a con, because you could've added some meet to the bare bones it is also a good thing because it makes it an, easy to grasp story that you can read anytime.

Entertainment: 8.5/10 - As I said before it was creepy, but simplistic and everything was detailed well. It was an entertaining read!

Pros and Cons:

+ Described Well

+ Creepy

+ Easy To Grasp

+ Only A Few Grammatical Mistakes

- Nothing New

- Needs Some Better Word Choice

Overall: 8.0/10 - Great.

" Creepy, but simplistic. Short, but easy to grasp. There are some problems here that could be fixed, but as it stands this is a rather good pasta!"

- Marcus