Talk:Adventure Time - Jake/@comment-25625305-20150506004151

This creepypasta sounds like it must be one of your first... It embraces many of the clichés that plague most "Lost Episode" creepypastas: Title sequence is messed up, story begins with characters crying, and suicide. Also, there were quite a bit of errors in grammar and capitalization that I went and fixed. One thing I didn't bother to fix though was the strange paragraph format. Two sentences don't really equal a paragraph... As for the story itself, it wasn't the least bit scary and the ending (Finn's suicide and Jake's evil laughter) could be seen from miles away. Anyway, my advice would be to try your very best to avoid so many clichés the next time you write one of these AND remember to proofread your work.