Talk:Repeat/@comment-25021327-20150125230036

I've read stories with this sort of concept before, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. The idea of waking nightmares, night-terrors, and the like are great for spooky stories. I feel like this one would be more effective if it were a bit longer and more detailed.

I can see what's going on here, but things are moving very quickly, and feel jumpy. Maybe if the pace were slowed down, and more even this would read better. This could use a little proofreading, as there are some spots where additional punctuation feels warranted.

As it is, this could use some work. It's short and though I feel the tone is supposed to be confusing as we are dealing with nightmares, this seems a bit too jumpy.