Talk:C10H15N/@comment-29502200-20160829032511

OH BOY REVIEW NUMBER 3

Title: C10H15N... I like what you did there

Introduction: It's VERY very generic, but it works. Most stories I read that have a generic intro make me sigh, but this one caught my attention.

The story itself: I like how you slowly but surely make a gradual buildup to the very end. What I don't like about it is the fact that nowhere in the story did I see anything like "I took my medication" or "I smoked a handmade cigar" to point out that he was doing a unknown drug; it, was very "by the way he's a druggy." I saw a few spelling/grammar mistakes, so please keep that in mind when editing.

Ending: It's a satisfying ending, but it's too short. In my opinion, Todd should have searched the house more, had more emotion behind him during the event. Maybe throw up one more time losing another tooth, had another flash of anger; sort of as a reference to what happened earlier in the story.

Overall Review: 8/10 - Short, Sweet, and Satisfying.