Talk:Going Beyond Hell Valley/@comment-5346853-20130408000956

Whoa, good job, friend! It certainly seemed fake to me but WOW did it bring me some scares! But, we always need to start off with the cliches! (If there are any.)

One obvious remark my caught was the curiosity of the victim. That's a common cliche in video games where they get the curiosity to play. You could've made it so peer pressure tempted him to play it the next day or something like that. Other than that, the other cliches are in hiding. :D Now for blood... In terms of my vision, I could NOT find any blood in your creepypasta. It's still good though even without the lack of blood. Lots of creepypastas are good without blood like BEN. There were some parts that were a little... much... Like the bones breaking part. I didn't like that part, sorry.

In general, the creepypasta was great! I like how you took a scary easter egg and made it into a creepypasta. That is GENIUS spelled out for you. I think you're a great creepypasta writer and that you really took your time on this one. I even liked part of the investigation at the end. That just gives the story more realism to it which could pay for the bad bones breaking part.

Overall, I think you'd deserve a whopping 8/10 for your great creativity! Nice work, pal!