Talk:All in My Head/@comment-25021327-20140817235948

I wasn't sure exactly what was going on as I was reaing this but, for me anyway, the conclusion was a nice way to tie things together. This type of story has been done before, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. (let's be honest, at this point, practically every story has been done before :P)

As I said, I pretty much enjoyed the story, and was pleased that it didn't go the typical haunting spirit route, opting for a slightly more grounded in reality twist. The journal format worked alright, sometimes it's hit or miss whether I enjoy that or not.

I do wish that there were some more detailed descriptions at some point. I didn't get the impression that the narrator was as freaked out, or baffled by what was happening to him. I didn't relate to some of his reactions. But everyone responds differently to these odd occurrences. The pacing was fairly consistent, although I would have liked to see a slower pace, maybe with (like I mentioned) more details about the events of the recorded days. All that said, I think the lenght is pretty good for the story as it is.

Aside from that, and a few spelling/grammar, and style/clarity bits, I pretty much enjoyed this.