Talk:"I uh... I guess hello..."/@comment-28259364-20160124184000/@comment-25021327-20160124232515

I understand about having loose grammar, since this is in the form of an informal, personal journal. However, I think some more spelling and grammar fixes would help the way this reads. I think an unintended consequence of the loose grammar here is that it might make the reader think that the character isn't intelligent, which is not the vibe I got from him.

Anyway, the story is okay. The descent-into-madness type of story is usually kind of interesting. Between 25/9/2015 and 10/10/2015, the entries appear to be mixed up. I imagine this may have been intentional, but I couldn't tell and it was a bit confusing to read. Some more consistent formatting here would also help, I think. Some entries have spaces between them, and others don't. Also, please sign your work so we know who you are :)