Talk:Campfire Incident/@comment-25021327-20140622214853

When I started reading this, I really had no clue as to where it was going, but I knew I was enjoying the ride. I hadn't checked any of the categories, or if there were any comments, so I came in without any frame of reference. (I like to know if I'm reading a game related pasta, but sometimes the categories act as little spoilers)

I have only played TF2 a handful of times with friends, so you can imagine that it took me quite a while to figure out what was going on. I got the impression that the story was leading somewhere specific, but I honestly didn't know where until the man in the ski mask showed up. So up until that point I was able to read and enjoy this as its own little stand alone tale, as which it worked.

I have to say that after the big reveal, I felt like the meaning of everything was hammered in a bit hard, but it still fit with the narrative of the story. Just a man telling what happened, and how things are now. Since it really does give enough info to the reader to figure out who the narrator is, I would like to have seen a more vague, or ambiguous ending, but as it is, I think it's solid. The narrative and pacing got a tiny bit jumpy at times, but just barely. I liked the writing style, and there were only a few spelling ad grammar issues. I think it's a very nice pasta, good work.