Talk:Kraken/@comment-24841964-20150716015749

If I had to say one thing about this story.

It would "Tentacles. Tentacles grabbed Tanya. Tanya got raped by tentacles. The End."

What ending is that? That's an ending that really isn't working for this story. As infinite cycles go, this just ruins it.

This story has a lot of potential, I would suggest try to refine the story a little bit more, give an atmosphere. Make the reader feel inside. That ending is perfect, but the way the whole story is, it's just not a good story for that ending.

Hero of Time 01:57, July 16, 2015 (UTC)