Talk:Time's End/@comment-5346853-20130407230939

Okay! That just refreshened me! It was a good creepypasta! Most parts though I didn't get but I'm saying it's good based on my knowledge of the scary elements and the references to the actual game. Let's start with cliches, shall we?

There were no cliches according to my vision so good job! Blood... Blood placement was appropriate and it didn't scare me but at least it was proper. I'll give you that.

I don't know if it was just me but some parts were hard for me to comprehend so could you clarify who's speaking a little better? There were some parts that made no sense to me but it still sounded scary and I bet it'd sound even more scarier with the Final Hours music accompanying it.

In general, I'd say this was a well-done creepypasta. I apologize if I couldn't understand the whole concept but hey, at least I found it scary! :D It was very good and I liked how you made this creepypasta inside the actual world of Termina!

Overall, I'd say you deserve an 8/10. It was good and I enjoyed reading it and finding MM references. Some parts like I said, were not understandable for me but it could be JUST me so don't worry about it. ;) Nice work!