Talk:A10ne.exe/@comment-30102911-20161021010024

Ho boy does this one need some help. First off the protaganist seems to have a weak constitution to just about anything that isn't video game related and seems to have problems recognizing some basic facts of life around him. Also as another poster pointed out, orphanage's don't house people for life so that doesn't really add up. The game itself somehow being able to link the protaganist so that the killer in the end manages to find him somehow is really questionable.

Even worse, this story ends with the protaganist being killed as we're to assume but if he was then this would mean the story wouldn't have been uploaded unless he somehow managed to hit the submit button at the last second when he was worried about being killed. Seeing as that would be very unlikely the police would probably find this on the laptop already and just confiscate it away for evidence and definitely not for public viewing. I can tell there was an attempt here and it might not need to be rewritten A to Z like some creepypastas, but this one should really find a way to lift itself beyond just a collection of farfetched cliches and a weak protaganist.