Talk:A Heart's Desire/@comment-6418997-20140427034332

THis is a well written pasta that I quite enjoyed. It seemed a bit random and sudden when you first started though. I would prefer more of an intro. The thoughts were simply amazing and as was the detail. You made a bunch of ideas in one though, I would like to see the ideas a bit longer. Especially since this one of your shorter stories but its good, short and sweet.