Talk:Superbia/@comment-25298353-20140817024357

After finally finishing this story, I now realize what it's like to stay awake for 3 days straight.

Joking aside, this story was FAR too long. I feel like it could've been condensed to maybe half its length and still carry as much impact. It does carry impact, and it managed to keep my interest throughout (which is saying a lot), but it's spread out so thin that it almost got boring towards the end. Almost.

I'd give it a 6/10, it established the characters well, but it overexplained a lot of things that didn't need to be overexplained.