Talk:The Painter/@comment-25021327-20141104223043

Haha, yes lots of "fast readers" today ... hhhmmm....

Anyway, I think this was a well crafted and well executed story. Nice descriptions, pretty good characters, nice even pacing (except at the end, but that is done by design, and works), well formatted dialogue (yay!), easy to follow style and formatting.

This reads quite well and keeps the reader interested throughout. Well, it kept me interested anyway. It is longer than a lot of pastas I've seen, but I didn't feel that it was dragging on at any point. We're given enough information about the characters to make them relateable, without getting a lot of unnecessary details. I think that works better for the short fiction format.

The story itself was pretty good. I admit that I could tell where this was going from pretty early on, but that didn't spoil anything for me. I still enjoyed seeing how we were goig to get to the finish I was expecting. It is a plot that has been done before, but the narrator's characterization makes this feel a little more personal. I cared about, and felt sorry for John being unaware of his blackouts and fugues. Perhaps moreso because I could see what was unfolding, and he, sadly could not.

I think it is a relateable fear of being out of control of oneself. It is for me anyway. To awaken and slowly realize things that you have done that are out of character. Sort of like another story I love; Jekyll and Hyde, it is comparable to someone in the throes of addiction.

I didn't have any real problems with this, the gore was used in such a way that it didn;t feel too forced, and the characters weren't quite as one dimensional as they sometimes are in typical short form horror. The painting thing seemed a bit silly, and almost tacked on to me, but I think it does work to help differentiate this tale from other murder stories.

I've rambled enough. I quite liked this pasta, and would be interested to see more of your work :)