Talk:The Broom Cupboard/@comment-25021327-20160822222951

This one was kind of a mixed bag for me. There were some parts in it that I liked, and some parts that I thought didn't quite fit. It seemed to me like this one kind of straddled the line of realism and supernatural. I liked the communication between the narrator and Nankens, or whoever it was using the Nankens account at the various times they interacted. I felt like that was the strong part of this one for me.

Although the video game descriptions were pretty good, I thought that they contrasted a little with the tone of the rest of the story. We don't really know how the Broom Cupboard came to be opened or programmed to be seen. Usually that stuff doesn't bother me, but here it was kind of nagging at me a little. How a doewnloaded save file could manipulate a physical game copy. I don't know, I just felt like it streched my suspension of disbelief.

Anyway, the writing here was okay, a few typos here and there, but nothing too bad. The formatting is a bit screwy, I think it probably has to do with the use of the greater than and less than signs (< & >) appearing as code to the page editor, and breaking the page into strange chapters. Nothing too groundbreaking here, but I liked the odd exchanges in the IRC channel.