Talk:Metroid: Mother?/@comment-25029585-20140722055010

''Steel gazes at the CPotM page, and realizes... He has to choose between these 5 lucky contenders. Let's start off this Exhilarating ride... Yaaaaaaaaaaay.... :/''

Hmm... It's good. First off, I have to get off a gripe I had coming into this pasta. It uses a lot of tropes (clichés?) in the beginning, like how the narrator keeps playing knowing that this game is glitched & how it was glitched. Stuff like that, but recovers about the moment the narrator tells that she/he/it is woosy from anesthetics, which explains one of my gripes from earlier. (I did skim, so I may have missed in the beginning that the narrator was on anesthetics.)

As for the ending, I could see where you were going with it, and it was hinted near the end with all the fetuses and babies. But, it was maybe a bit too shocking for it to fit with the rest of the story.

And one last gripe, this was tedious to read. Maybe it's just me, but I just found myself dosing off watching videos and writing, just didn't draw my attention. But that's probably me.

Pros: Interesting concept.

Cons: Ending was a bit jarring, Didn't draw my attention.

Overall, 7.875/10, I like the concept, just was a bit tedious to read.

P.S. - "Meat-roid", XD Love it!

Steelwingred (talk) 05:50, July 22, 2014 (UTC)