Talk:Its Gone Too Far./@comment-25021327-20160829020723

28-August-2016- I'm going to add a Needs work tag to this one. The story here feels a little stale to me. It just kind of reads like a laundry list of strange, violent events happenin in a Sonic game. I feel like it treads a lot of ground that has been covered in many other Sonic pastas. A lot of elements like the bloody and violent imagery, the strange music cues, and the game character communicating a cryptic message to the player are things that have been done a lot before.

I also had some trouble understanding certain parts here. I still don't really understand the significance of "It's gone too far." What went too far? Who did it? Why are the characters so angry at each other and the player? I was also a little confuzzled by the part where the note appears on the kid's doorstep. I don't really get that.

There are also a few spelling/grammar/format issues here that could be touched up as well. I hope you don't take this review too harshly, I don't intend to discourage you.

As this is now a Needs work page, it will face deletion after about 9 days if it has not been deemed adequately improved following another review.