Talk:Wii are Twisted/@comment-6470295-20130216015021

Oh god, that intro.

"I'M  A BIG FAN OF THESE KINDS OF GAMES, BUT NOW I'M NOT."

That hatred-filled intro.

I'm just saying this as i read the first line: I hope this won't be the typical stupid creepypasta that i am predicting from the intro..

So, after all, this wasn't..too bad.

Not as bad as i was expecting, at least. I was expecting FUCKBLOODAAAAAHI'MDEADNOWMEH. Seriously, though, onto the review.

I'll do something different than my normal reviews--I'll evaluate four core points of a Creepypasta;

Creepiness, Cliché-avoiding, General Storyline, and finally,  Build-up.

Let us start with the Build-up.

Now, this story is somewhat long, but still pretty long. It was rather..confusing at times, but i do like how it only starts as something you'd see in a typical SSB Game, except, of course, the depressed Mario guy. It starts up with very minor aspects, and builds up to something that i'll admit made me cringe. By which i mean the man shoving a knife into his arm. It's just a childhood thing i'll discuss in the creepiness segment.

You earn a 7.5/10 in on Build-up. A lot better than most stuff here--Good job.

Next up, Cliché-avoiding.

I..Have nothing to say here. There was a bit of blood here and there, but nothing too bad.

8.5 Here, because while there were some minor clichés, it was nothing too bad.

Here we go, into General Storytelling.

Again, there's nothing really wrong to point out here. The story is, all in all, told pretty well even if the occasional hiccup in the story quality does take some of the immersion out.

Have another 7.5 here as well.

And, finally, unto Creepiness.

I have to admit this story chilled me a bit, when i read it through the first time. Especially the ending. Just getting really bad cuts in general is a childhood fear of mine, because of events i won't point out here, as they're a  bit personal. But yes. Because of this, i have to say.. The ending made me cringe, even if the story, for the most part, wasn't the creepiest thing i've ever read. You could have definitely used some more detail in the happenings, but it doesn't take away that much. Just a few minor things, once again, that managed to take away a single point from this sweet bowl of creepyrigatoni.

You get a 9 out of me here. Mostly because of personal childhood fears.

So, in total, we have 7.5 in Build-up, 8.5 in cliché-avoiding, 7.5 in General Storytelling, and 9 in Creepiness, which adds up to 8.125 out of 10. Good job on this. I'll be looking forwards to your next tales of the creepies.