Talk:He, an Almost Real Creepypasta/@comment-24582398-20140228172012

What did I just read? I feel like this was inflated with the rambling style, which doesn't really work in text. Realistic speech doesn't usually work in fiction, because of all sorts of reasons. Look up "Realistic Diction is Unrealistic" on TvTropes. The one time where things can sound more realistic without sounding bad is the Joss Whedon style, known as Buffy Speak, and there's a good reason a lot of fiction these days emulates it.