Talk:The Ice-Cream Man/@comment-5757488-20130827105747

Interesting story you have here. The concept was unsettling, to say the least. It worked well as an idea, so made for an creepy enough read. Overall though, the story requires a bit of fleshing out. The build up was a bit thin, so the creepy events came quickly. It could have done with some more atmosphere. The writing was decent, with a matter-of-fact style which was good at times. There were few spelling mistakes and grammar errors, which took away from the experience slightly. In conclusion, this was decent pasta with some flaws, but it definitely has potential. Keep it up!