Talk:Legend of Zelda: The White Key/@comment-25021327-20141208160034

Well, I actually enjoyed reading this one! Sorry to sound so surprised, but I kind of just thought at the beginning that it was going to be a standard haunted game pasta. Then, following the bit with the brother, i thought it was going to be a sappy feelpasta.

But I feel like what I actually got was a fairly good representation of both genres. The strange behavior of the game isn't really scary, but combined with the emotions of the narrator, it creates a surreal feeling which is definitely odd, but not to the point of being ridiculous.

The melancholy, sad, and emotional bits, I felt, were pretty well done. I never felt like the story was overbearing in its depression, nor did it really try to pile the pity upon the narrator. We as readers are simply told about the events, and how they make everyone feel. And what they feel isn't overblown despair, it's real grief, and confusion. I never felt like the story was trying to kick puppies to make me feel sad, it was more natural than that.

There were some things that I could have done without, The introduction paragraph about how this story isn;t like other CP's and how the narrator "loved" games, emphasis on the past tense, had me rolling my eyes, and had me thinking that the story would be more of a standard ghost story.

The spelling and grammar were a bit distracting, so I just decided to edit things as I read them. I had assumed that English was not the authors native language, and with that in mind, the story still read better than a lot of stuff i've read from folks who have written/spoken English their whole lives.

So yeah, I enjoyed this more than I anticipated I would. Maybe it's not the most original story, I've read some others about family ghosts communicating through games, but I felt like this one did a good job at what it set out to accomplish. The author shown a genuine knowledge of the game in question, and paces the story evenly. I thought the references to the locked back alley door throughout were nice, they kept me wanting to read and see it finally be opened.

Nice pasta, one i'm glad to have stumbled across :)