Talk:Brothers/@comment-21086298-20140517050611

It had a few gramatical and spelling errors. I think there's a missing comma in the conversation between the brothers, and the title "the adventures of Zero" should use proper title capitalization, instead of only capitalizing the name. That would make it "The Anventures of Zero." Neither of those things seriously hurt the readability, though.

As for the story, it had a good buildup, but the ending felt rushed. It started out good, with the two lonely children and depressing mood, but it escalated to murder and suicide a too quickly. I love the villian. A game that finds miserable people who are desparate for escapism, then makes them do evil things, which make people close to them miserable and in need of escapism, and moves on to the next vicitim in a cycle, sounds like the premise of something truly great.

This could use a sequel, with more subtlety, less gore, and a slower escalation from everyday life to shocking violence.