Talk:Special (Alternate Mindfuck Comp. Entry)/@comment-6794436-20150426013712

Oh boy do I love me some old, post-apocalyptic creepypastas!

Good: The premise of this pasta is great, as the idea of nuclear wars and apocalypses in creepypastas are really intriguing. This pasta was also very engaging and mysterious, which left me wondering what was going on with the world that Isaac lived in. Hell, I actually thought he lived on an alien planet for a while! There aren't too many grammatical errors, and there aren't too many cliches that I can see. As I said before, the buildup in this was also quite excellent. The idea of being restricted to one area as the result of a nuclear war is quite unnerving, and it really leaves you thinking about what could happen someday.

Bad: The whole idea of people's memories being erased I felt just made things confusing and didn't really add anything. I feel as though it would've been a better mindfuck if instead of how this one went, that it was just that his parents knew the truth but were just hiding it from Isaac, as that would make things even creepier as it enhances the thought that everything that Isaac knew was just a lie and him being lied to. Also, maybe I'm just not getting this, but doesn't it say that everyone got their memory erased of the war? If so, then it really wouldn't make sense for there to be announcements of areas cleared for human life on the radio, as that would kind of reveal the lie. On a final note, the mindfuck wasn't really jaw dropping, as there were so many hints of a post apocalyptic situation in the pasta that it really was predictable.

Verdict: 6.5/10- Although the plot was quite intriguing, and this was written quite well, there were a few plotholes I came across and the mindfuck was pretty predictable, at least to me that is. Overall, this was still a joy to read, and another great mindfuck for your "career"!

-Incorrect3