Talk:I Am the Crippler/@comment-25021327-20150707130836

I was interested to see this one. I've not read many Pro Wrestling related pastas, however it is a subject ripe for the picking as far as creepypasta, and horror writing goes, as so many Pre Wrestlers lives outside the ring have been ravaged by death and despair.

I could tell where this one was going pretty early on, but I still felt like reading through to see how we got there. Having just read through this story once, I'm still unsure how to feel about certain aspects of it One one hand it's a creepy premise, that a game would give a player a peek into the final night of the life of Chris Benoit, and I think it's cool how these events only occurred to the player because he happened to be playing on the night of the tragedy, in story mode, as Chris Benot at the World Title level of the game. That lends an interesting air to the events for me, and explains why no other (or very few) players would have experienced this phenomenon (This point is driven home by the other player relaying his experiences with Eddie Guerrero in the same game)

That said, While reading this, I couldn't help but feel that it was a bit silly, and I'm not even sure why. Perhaps it is because I am so familiar with wrestling games, and imagining what was being described had a strange surreal vibe to it. There were also a few things that I wasn;t sure about here, mainly, when Benoit attacks Lita in this story, was the player in control of him, or was it part of a kind of cut scene? Same with Rey Misterio Jr.

And imagining Kane chokeslamming Benoit into "Hell" though I know it would be legitimately unsettling to experience, again seemed a little too silly to creep me out. Which is a shame because it could be effective, but it just didn;t work for me personally.

Anyhow, I thought that the writing was fair here, and the pacing worked well enough (My only complaint being the way the story slows down to explain gameplay elements, but again, for someone who has never played a modern wrestling game, these are important details). This story could use another run of proofreading as there were a few typos, nothing too major. In all, I appreciate this story for what it tries to do, and I'm very glad to have read it, though some of the creepy elements may have been lost on a jaded wrestling fan like myself, I think some people will enjoy this one :)