Thread:Sshakenbakee/@comment-25478504-20141002004427

Hey, I was wondering if you could help me with my pasta. I've asked people before, but they've just been ignoring me :/ anyway, this is it http://someordinarygamers.wikia.com/wiki/The_Video_Game_Suit and I recently fixed up the paragraphing (which was previously "walls of text") and the grammar and I wanted to know if I did a good job with it, are the paragraphs done correctly? Thank you :) 