Talk:It Has a Rather Lovely Ending/@comment-4332975-20130226175342

I kind of wish I hadn't already cast a vote for best Creepypasta, now. This story had me guessing the most of anything I've read in a while. It was pretty exciting to see where you were trying to go here. The buildup was nice, and I liked the way that it lets most of the "action" happen off-screen as well. That's a nice touch you don't see to often. I will admit that I have a "kinda-sorta" problem, so as not to appear biased, though. In the end, I just don't know what that was all about. There's an unwritten rule that you can't just tell someone something is scary (well, now it's written) - but really, I can't even fault you that. It works here. It might even be the biggest strength of the story, as odd as that seems. Since you never really know what's wrong, your imagination has to pick up the slack...and the brooding sense of wrongness you built up there does a great at getting my head working on that. It very-much hints at being a "demonpasta", to coin a term, but manages to avoid clicheness just by beating around the bush. I had a much longer review in mind, but scrapped it because I was trying to work in something clever, and the formatting wouldn't cooperate. There might still be traces of that lingering, but let me just say outright instead:

It has a rather lovely ending.