Talk:Death Dance Revolution/@comment-8485155-20151021024752

...Do even have to point out everything that's wrong with this? Clichés everywhere, spelling and grammer have been completely disregarded, the story's a wall of text, and the amount of space between the..."story" and your little disclaimer is completely unnecessary. By the way, whether or not it's your first story doesn't fucking matter. You're still expected to make some kind of effort on a story, and with this one, you *clearly* didn't. You want a rating? You don't get one. This one's so bad that it doesn't even deserve a rating.