Talk:If Only/@comment-32602006-20140107234607

Far from perfect, but I didn't really notice any major cliches except maybe the character finding those notes.

Writing quality:06/10  Some of the sentence structures are a little awkard, but it's not a big deal.

Actual Creepyness: 06/10  Not that creepy, but it has the potential to be made creepy

Entertainment value: 06.5/10 It should be expanded and more tension and suspense added.

Realism: 04/10 It's a stretch, to say the least.

Emotional impact: 03/10 give us more reason to care about the protagonist.

Final Verdict:06/10 not bad for a first pasta.