Talk:Unknown Text/@comment-5346853-20140312051247

Wow, what a story. Okay, let me get straight to the review. This pasta was...how should I put it...It was generic. Like seriously, downloading an emulator and ROM online and then playing only to find stuff going wrong and glitches occuring. That's a standard creepypasta. Cliché. One thing I also noticed... Blood! Let me tell you this... Blood is hard to work with. Put it in the wrong spot, and the whole scariness factor is gone. You're just left with, "What the hell... That's disgusting."

This is all cliché. If you want to make your creepypasta stand out, you've got to take it to the next level. Instead of blood, jumbled-up text, and glitches, you could've written something regarding the website you downloaded the software from or a little history having to do with someone or something. Although, instead, you chose the generic events that unfold in a generic creepypasta which will repel people from reading it. There are just so many creepypastas out there and all of them are the same. What would make yours so different?

I'm really sorry but this creepypasta bores me and is no different from the rest. Although, just because I'm giving such harsh criticism, doesn't mean I'm being mean to you. I'm doing this so you can learn what the problem is and so you'll be able to improve. Even I don't write decent creepypastas but at least I try to separate mine from the rest. And so you should too. If you do just that, I'm sure your creepypastas will be much more enjoyable for others.

I'm giving this creepypasta a grand total of 4/10. Like I said, it was generic, yet, it was good enough for me to give the whole story a read. Keep making stories and I look forward to your next creepypasta! (By the way, I love Pokémon, xD )