Talk:Betrayal/@comment-25021327-20141007142353

This was a pretty good continuation/companion piece for your Reunion story. I liked getting to know a little more about the way Takashi viewed his friendship with Kiyoshi. I this first piece, you don't exactly get to know if Takashi shares the warm feelings Kiyoshi has for him, and their history together.

Spelling, grammar, style, clarity, all that good stuff seems to be in order. The two stories are quite short, which isn't really a bad thing. The narrative could be expanded upon, but it's not necessary as the writings seems to work well as they are. I like the stand-alone quality of these pieces which are both brief and to the point, sticking to bare facts without dealing with a ton of backstory. Things are still vague enough that the reader can sort of fill in any gaps they feel need it.

A short, but enjoyable read. I'm glad I read it/them