Talk:Pokémon FiredRed/@comment-25021327-20140919134809

For a first pasta this isn't too bad. It manges to spin a narrative without too many spellng or grammar issues. That said, it does fall into some of the cliche areas that are especially prevalent in Pokemon stories. The new pokemon appears, has a strange attack, the pokemon are mad at the player for whatever reason (usually they have feelings of abandonment) and yell at him/her.

I didn't notice a lot of original stuff in here. Also I had a hard time understanding the motives of the angry pokemon characters. Why were they upset? I didn't notice the player doing the game any wrong. I was a little fuzzy on what "memories" the player was abandoning or betraying. Truth be told, I found myself more interested in why the protagonist had ben fired from GameStop in the first place. That's a backstory all in itself.

So, for me at least, this was just standard pokepasta fare without adding much to the mix. I'd say keep on reading and keep on writing