Talk:The Battle of Flight/@comment-24082398-20150418043035

Oh, dandy! Another review!

What's the good? Well, quite a few things. The story was fresh and original--I've never read a Balloon Fight pasta before. I don't even think there is one out there! The execution as brilliant as well. The pacing was amazing, and I didn't expect the twist. I also love how it painted the protagonist in an antagonistic light, which shows a bit of humanity. There weren't too many grammatical errors, but some were still apparent. The format was also great, switching between times as the scene got more and more intense. It also used blood very sparingly, which is good. It was still there, of course, but it wasn't virtually around every corner. The description and attention to detail was also stunning. I could picture everything going on in my head.

Now, what do I think was bad? Nothing too major. There were a few grammatical errors that stood out to me, as noted before. Sometimes the dialogue seemed a bit stilted and unnatural. However, nothing that bad was here.

Final score: 9/10 - A brilliant story with amazing execution and great pacing that brought a fresh idea to a creative wasteland, not to mention made a very mundane game creepy. It was only hampered by the grammatical errors here and there. Great job!