Talk:The Gatekeeper/@comment-25400723-20141231045827

Ah, good to see that some of the mistakes I pointed out previously were fixed. Well, what do I think? I think that you really have improved this since the last time I read it. Although, there is still some "problem points" (As I like to call them XD).

One thing that you should probably change here is the use of ".exe". I know it really isn't a huge deal, but how many times has .exe been used at the end of a file in a Creepypasta? Too many times to count. I'm not neccesarily saying that you have to get rid of it, but it would be good if you changed it to something else.

I did notice that there was still errors with spelling and such as well. One of the most common spelling errors I've found throughout this is the word "Of" being replaced by "If" (I know it happens sometimes. After all, the I and O buttons are right next to each other). I've also noticed that a lot of sentences start with " I " (Spaced it so you could tell that was an I). Whenever there's more than two sentences (That are one after the other) that start with I, it just starts to sound sloppy.

Now besides the grammar and spelling, there really isn't much else that needs to be worked on. There's still a bunch of cliches in this, but I guess it doesn't matter too much if they're fixed or not seeing as they aren't major cliches.

Anyways, glad to see this improved. My final verdict? 7.5/10

Keep up the good work!

~King