Talk:Puppet Show/@comment-29502200-20160922010837

Alright..... review time

Title: Short, sweet, to the point, I like it.

Introduction: It's simple but very catchy, and I like that.

Ending: It felt rushed. I feel like you could have used a bit more for the final paragraphs.

The Story Itself: I like it. I really, really like this story. It doesn't matter if this is your first creepypasta, or if you've been writting creepypastas for a while, this is good. What I like is you stayed completely away from the supernatural aspect of things. The scariest thing about life is other people, and you've shown that.

What I didn't like: The whole 'getting a job as an insurance agent' seems a bit unrealistic. Maybe add a few sentences saying "college flew by... got a job... became roommates..." and it would be better. The second would be hotwiring a car, that seems unrealistic as well. It would have been better if you said "i grabbed my keys and sprinted out the appartment, not even bothering to close the door behind." The whole 'hotwiring' seemed a bit edgy to me. These two are VERY minor complaints however, and I won't hold the story hostage because of it.

Overall Score: 9/10 - It's a creepypasta done right.