Talk:Going Beyond Hell Valley/@comment-6698442-20130327020941

This creepypasta is quite a good one, to be honest. Firstly, I have not seen a single creepypasta based on the figures from the Shiverburn Galaxy. This is the first, and it's alright.

The grammar itself is a little rough around the edges, but that isn't important. I just thought I'd bring up a few grammatical mistakes I found. Might edit if you don't mind.

The story itself is amazing, the love of creepypastas is a little bit cliché, but not entirely to give it a bad rating. I've only seen it done around 6 times.

The screams are not the high pitched screams that is completely over-cliché'd, and are not the normal Mario screams, too. Good. The bones breaking and snapping add a nice touch and adds insult to injury from what Mario has been inflicted by those figures.

I'm guessing the homicide case thing is fake, but if there is evidence, I might have a peek at it. It seems too good to be true. Nonetheless, really good.

So, 9.5/10. It's another Mariopasta, but a really good one.

-Corey