Talk:Metroid: Mother?/@comment-7706473-20140711112915/@comment-1196539-20140723104529

Don't misunderstand, Urkel--the issue with the ending isn't about content or about people being offended. Looking over the comments, only one person mentioned being uncomfortable with the topic of rape. It's really more about how abrupt it is. The ending doesn't feel "tacked on," nor do I think it doesn't have significance in regard to the rest of the story, because it absolutely does. It feels rushed, is all. It needs to be more gradual, and as Lilly said, I think it would benefit from being a little subtler, so the reader can draw conclusions themselves. Or at least so that they have a little time to start coming up with their own conclusions before it's explicitly stated.

I think it could be a good story made better if the last paragraph or so were just drawn out to maybe two or three; built up to more. I usually wind up tweaking/reworking my endings, personally, because by the time I've written everything up to that point I'm too eager for my own good. I just want to wrap the thing up so I can publish it and put it out there. Maybe this was something like that?