Talk:Sonic ROM Hack/@comment-25021327-20160102052327

Well... I think there are some good things here and some not so good things. I feel like there is a degree of ambition here, but it's not executed with the time and care that it could be. The story is kind of short, and The ending feels really thrown together, "a girl" went missing? She looked like your girlfriend... was it her? Why wouldn't he either know if it was her, or if she was missing? Is it meant to make us think it was her?

Also, I think that the girlfriend making a rom hack is kind of interesting and I don't think I've really seen that before. But the entire hack seems kind of arbitrary and odd. Just a bunch of sort of strange, somewhat cliche things happen with no real narrative or story. That's fine if the rest of the pasta can carry the story and keep our attention, but I didn't feel that this one did.

Kudos for working up some screenshots, The tears looked a little out of place with the palettes used in the normal graphics, but on the whole they worked well for helping describe what was happening. In the future when you ppost a story, please remember to add your signature, and some appropriate, pre-existing categories (creepypasta, video game, Sonic the Hedgehog, etc)