Talk:Shadowman on the wall/@comment-25021327-20160820230104

I feel like there really isnt much meat to this one. It isn;t really much of a ritual at all, just a guy telling what happened to him and how to deal with the circumstances if they happen to the reader. What makes the Shadow man come? What does he do? Just makes you afraid? When? and for how long? It seems like a lot of details are just glossed over.

This one also goes off the deep end pretty quickly at the end ._.' Suddenly we've gone from talking about a shadowy figure that scares you, to talking about your soul travelling to Hell and killing demons? I can;t tell exactly what the tone here is supposed to be. It seems to go from a standard, spooky, grounded in reality bit of lore about a shadow creature, to something... quite different right toward the end.

Anyway, the writing here wasn;t too bad, spelling and grammar were okay. I just felt like the content here went from one extreme to another without any kind of warning, and niether extreme worked very well for me. Sorry, if this comes across harsh or discouraging.