Talk:The Monsters You've Created/@comment-26241989-20150517143146

I'll be honest here. I didn't really like this story. I feel like you tried to write a FNAF pasta for the sake of it being an FNAF pasta that was actually good. And that's the only thing it really had going for it. Now I'd be hypocritical if I harped on you holding onto one particular detail and riding on it for the whole story, because I did a similar thing with "Hair." However in that story, we were able to give a lot more details about the character it was about, without giving away the actual character. Which I feel made it even more jaw-dropping as you realize all of the hints, subtle or otherwise, after reading it again. This pasta however felt vague in it's essence, and obvious with it's clues. Up until the fourth paragraph, the story could have been about almost any killer. These kinds of pastas just don't really work, and in my opinion, this felt like some sort of challenge to try to pull off an FNAF pasta.

Sorry for the harsh review, but this wasn't really my cup of tea. 5/10