Talk:Lost Reality/@comment-6794436-20150107221501

Hey, a decent pasta for once!

Good: This pasta has primarily good grammar, other than a few lowercase Is here and there. The story itself is simplistic, but you executed it in the best way possible. There weren't many cliches, and the only ones that were prevalent didn't detract too much from the story.

Bad: This pasta is a bit short for my taste, and I really think it could benefit from being a bit longer. The pasta also is a bit too simplistic, you made it work to its best aptitude, but even still it drags the pasta down a bit for me.

Verdict: 6/10- This pasta could benefit from a bit more "meat" added to it, and the pasta itself is a bit too simple for my liking. Since I haven't seen many of your stories, and I'm not sure if this is your first or not, you should probably read the New Writer Guidelines, as they should aid you in all of your future writing endeavors.

-Incorrect3