Talk:BedTime/@comment-7706473-20130424001427

This was fantastic. The way you used perspective and the feeling of being young and feeling powerless to make the reader feel terror was great. The ending was both a vindication for the young narrator - and a subtle reinforcing that, whatever the events of that room were, something happened. Fantastic horror, fantastic story; and I'm very glad to have discovered that you write more through a little name-stalking.

Literally the only complaint I could possibly think of is that the title feels a little stilted in comparison to the piece proper, and that might be the intension you had - so that isn't even a complaint that holds water. Your use of hiding details (and keeping them hidden through the nervousness and fear of the narrator) was simply sublime. I think it is doubly appropriate that you have a morning glory given the nature of your story. I hope you decide to post more, but I'll be keeping tabs on you here, or elsewhere.

I'll be finding the time (and looking forward to!) to read On a Hill, later. Thank you for sharing your work with us!