Talk:Umbreon/@comment-30102911-20161102012216

I have to admit that a big reason I have a problem I have in reviewing this story is the fact that the grammar makes it hard for me to understand some of what is happening. I know Arial is only 13 and it might add a sense of authenticity but it just makes the story difficult to read. For the story itself it just sounds more like Arial is going under some kind of standard mental breakdown that could easily be seen as something exclusive to the main character. There probably are pokedex entries that could contribute to Umbreon being given a dedicated creepypasta but this doesn't quite examplify that.