Talk:Goodbye/@comment-6418997-20131103180759

I know this is annoying but you need to add catgories before someone notices. The emotion in this wasn't that good, if you lose someone I would expect someone to be hit with all the emotions I will now list

Anger

lost

denial

hate

sadness

you don't have to but it just makes it seem more realistic. It was kinda of like hes gone oh no. You need to take out the blood cliche. Good idea though. 6/10 not bad for your first pasta.