Talk:The Slipgate Complex/@comment-24082398-20170308203053

3/8/2017

Adding Needs Work here. The story was pretty sloppy, the buildup was nonexistent, and the mythos is confusing to anyone who hasn't delved into the worlds of Doom and Quake. I myself enjoy these games incredibly, so I could follow what was happening, but the detail wasn't enough for people who don't know anything about the series. What's a Fiend? What's a Shambler? There needs to be some description. The main protagonist was also pretty unlikeable, and I was pretty glad to see him die. What an insufferable jerk, sneaking into a place that obviously isn't meant to be touched... The grammar and punctuation was pretty dodgy, too. Please clean this up.

You have a week to get this up to snuff or I'll have to tag it 48 Hours to Deletion. Please bring it up to speed before then.