Talk:Metroid Dark Echoes (Creepypasta)/@comment-26480939-20160827024959

This wasn't all that bad, I must say. Now, I'm almost a complete n00b to the Metroid games, and this covers one I haven't even touched. But I'm pretty sure that even with all the humanization you gave Dark Samus, she is still the villain. After all, she is a dark clone of Samus made of pure Phazon and is the main antagonist of the Prime spinoff series, I believe. I might not know a lot about the Metroid games, but that is something that I do remember reading about in articles that were in older issues of various game magazines I read.

Was that your intent, to humanize the main villain of the game? If so, you definitely succeeded, but I still see her as the villain because of her motivations.

There's several clichés I noticed as well. The 'weird shit happens, but the narrator continues in spite of it", "gratuitous blood/gore", and "improved/HYPERREALISTIC graphics" are some of the ones I spotted. I didn't notice any spelling errors or anything like that, and the sentence structure seemed fine to me, so...

DAE Rating: 8/10 Good, small improvements needed. Ease off the scattered unnecessary profanity and don't use so many clichés. Those are really the only things I'd change about this.