Talk:Nostalgia Crushed! (Sega Genesis Creepypasta)/@comment-25021327-20150121235255

Alright well, let's see. I read this through as I was proofreading and separating it into paragraphs. Having seen this as an enormous wall of text had me thinking that this was going to be a horrifically bad pasta.

The writing here isn't really that bad, and I can tell that there was some effort put into this story. The pacing is actually pretty consistent, and the narrative does build to a suiting conclusion.

Spelling ang grammar aren't in terrible shape either. There are some spots where things were misspelled, or worded strangely, but it wasn't worse than a lot of pastas I've read here. It makes me wonder how the author didn't break this into readable paragraphs. Maybe some kind of formatting error? I dunno.

The real downfall of this story is that it reads like a shopping list of Gaming pasta clichés. So many tired elements are tapped here, weird, evil man with unmarked games, games do strange things, and mesh with other games, game talks to player, player talks to game, real life people appear in game, music slowed down and reversed, characters beaten and bloody, game hurts player in real life, news report about evil man from the begining. Those are just the ones off the top of my head.

The thing is, if this story were written a few years ago, before so many other gaing pastas had treaded the same ground, this story would probably go over a lot better. As far as writing goes, it't not too far below par for gaming pastas. The descriptions weren't great, but they were good enough to follow along, and like I said, the pacing was okay, and worked with the length.

This story mostly suffers from being posted now instead of a couple of years ago. Even if the author has not read a lot of gaming pastas aand feels they came up with a lot of this stuff without outside influence, it's a moot point because so many of us have read stories just like this. And nowadays, it comes off as a smorgasboard of familiar elements.

It's kind of a shame, since I feel like some effort likely did go into this piece. But some folks will probably like this, and to a person who isn't cynical or jaded yet regarding Gaming Creepypastas, it's probably quite enjoyable.