Talk:The Kanto War Diaries/@comment-67.174.183.175-20130719075718

Well, for a mindfu** creepypasta, it's not too good. Most people unfamiliarized with Pokémon will have no idea who Lt. Surge is. So my suggestion is to add detail to the war to make it scary, and take details like wanting to be a Liuetenant out. Drop subtle hints, not obvious ones. 7/10