Talk:Mother's Revenge/@comment-7117158-20130313150508

Unfortunately this story is littered with grammar problems, missing spaces as you keep being told by Nightsbladeoftruth. Some sentences didn't make sense and were structured wrongly, and there were nasty-level cliches planted into it, the -instert player here- loved -insert franchise here- and it all ends with "now I never touch -franchise-"

I also noticed a lot of your "I"s were in lower case, that kinda bugged me..

7/10, I found this entry to be a better story overall than Dark Nightmare, it's just littered with errors.