Talk:Pokemon, Willow Town/@comment-26480939-20160808223646

This actually isn't too bad. A lot better than most of the other Poképastas I've read (and I've read a lot of them).

That being said, some things do require some fixing. One, the whole 'cover Legendary using its cry upon pressing Start' thing started in Platinum version. DP didn't have that. There's also some slight spelling errors that need fixing (butt instead of but), but those are rather minor.

What I really liked was the whole 'ritual' thing you had going. Even if that's not the kind of thing you'd expect from a Pokémon game. And that crack about the male trainer named Vivian made me laugh and remember Magma Admin Tabitha in ORAS. I like the whole concept of some evil trainers trying to call up some dark force via a ritual, as it feels like something out of a Zelda game.

And I didn't mind the ending at all. Makes it more satisfying and mysterious if we don't get solid answers as to why the events happened.

Rating: 9.5/10 Very excellent, little to no improvements needed.