Talk:Revolution/@comment-24240632-20130917021926

The revolution of mindf*cks!

Description: 8.5/10 - You have some sentences that weren't ended correctly like "From what I saw, everyone seemed to love that dish, so I thought I’d order it because of everyone’s reactions." This sentence could've ended at "''From what I saw, everyone seemed to love the dish, so I thought I'd order it." ''Get what I'm laying down? (Hipster, Marcus here) Some parts were also vague, but there were also parts that were described quite well, which make up for the vague moments. Overall I sort of had mixed reaction to how it was done and polished.

Plot: 9.3/10 - Well first of all the mindf*ck was exteremely well done! I had no idea that was going to be the ending! The problem, though is that the story felt odd and unfinished. Still a really good job, however!

Entertainment: 9.0/10 - I was intrigued, through most of the story, and when I started getting bored the ending came!

Overall: 8.9/10 - Great.

"You'll never see it coming!"