Talk:OCARINA OF IIII/@comment-11079349-20131123034530

... so, this doesnt make much sense, now that i read it again. it's well executed in such a way that most of it i can ignore, but it felt a bit rushed. not a lot, just a little. i like how only lines from the actualy game are used besides the "..." line. saria, however, seems a bit out of place most of the time, as well as the whole bursting into flame thing. bursting into flame was something BEN did, so it feels a bit tacked on, but that's just creepypasta experience talking. to someone that has read very few creepypastas, this is pretty good, but to me now, it has less of an impact. Also, this is trying to be both a creepy story and a sad story using the same character for both plots. this honestly takes away a bit as you can't grow too attached to the very thing killing you over and over again.

I'd give a 6.6/10 now. still good, but not as good as i once thought.