Talk:Enter Ye the Palace of Pain/@comment-29502200-20160823223356

My review on this poem

YES, YES, YOU MOTHER FUCKER I LIKE THIS POEM

The rhyming is great, the rhythm is on point. I noticed a few spelling and grammar errors, but every story has that.

My favorite part of this poem is: " With an elongated head and skeletal back - You shall be frozen if he chooses to attack-  If you happen to avoid his sense -  Keep calm, carry on and hence -  Four More Creatures to go…"  The rhythm skip with "four more creatures to go" was done FLAWLESSLY. It took me off guard and that's what makes it unique.

The only big issue I have with the story is the ending. I understand it's suppose to symbolize something, or have a deeper meaning; but, I didn't catch it. I'd recommend making it more cuturally understandable.

Overall Review: 7.5/10 Interesting peom, amazing rhyme and rhythm. Some spelling/grammar mistakes, and a basic ending.