Talk:The Diner/@comment-25021327-20141118011913

I dig this pasta. It's a nice quick read that has a nice, sort of distinct feel. Sort of like you might find in one of the old horror comics of the early to mid-century. Kinda "creepshow"-ish. The tone of the narrative felt kind of silly  and light through most of it, (to me anyway) which I think worked with tthe characterization of the protagonist couple as somewhat well intentioned, but terribly misguided poeple.

For its length, the pacing worked pretty well, thoug it felt a bit jumpy to me at times. This is the sort of story I think works as a short form horror tale, but could be expanded upon also. Leaving it short like this allows for more interpretations by the reader. The twist ending was a nice way to end, and inject some morality (justice?) into the pasta, but I think the story itself is strong enough that the twist isn't simply a gimmick.

Glad i read this one :)