Talk:Super Smash Bros. Ultimate Torture/@comment-26480939-20190126044423

This isn't really that scary, as you pointed out, as well as your first work on here, but it is (I believe) the first Smash Ultimate pasta I've seen on this site so far. Plus, you get major points from me for having Isaac as a playable character. Even though this is a fictional story, I've wanted him playable since Brawl. ^_^

Unfortunately, this hits a good number of clichés for gamingpastas: game somehow knows your IRL name, gratuitous deaths/violence, jumpscares, game crashing at the end, and whatnot. But at least you didn't have the whole Number of the Beast (AKA 666/616), HYPERREALISTIC BLOOD, the "I didn't stop playing even though the game was messed up" reasoning, and other overused clichés like that.

DAE Rating: 7/10 Needs a bit more work, but somewhat entertaining to read as-is.

Just try to not use as many clichés, and maybe build up better to the scares/flesh the scary part out more, and you should be good. :) And 7 out of 10 isn't a bad score on my rating scale, just the opposite, it's actually on the better end, actually. If I gave this, say, a 3/10, that would be very bad. So don't take my 7/10 score as me not liking it. It just needs a little more refining to really get the extra points on my scale. Trust me, I've had to give out a few bad scores on here in rating pastas. (Yes, even a 0/10 for a truly abysmal pasta.) You just need a bit more practice and writing, but I think you can be a good author of creepypastas someday.