Talk:Pokemon Lavender Red/@comment-24056710-20140604204412

There's a good central idea here, but none of the story really backs it up. Everything seems really rushed and crammed into one section to the point that it's hard to tell what's going on. A little spacing between the events and maybe some build up, rather than everything just falling apart, would have really helped. I also think that since the player is this great musician and into video game music that you could have used that to put a nice spin on it. The idea of the Charmander slowly decaying throughout the story was pretty cool though, almost like the player's love for the game.