Talk:Checkmate/@comment-5675310-20140801005353

Checkmate, you have intrigued me.

Description: 5.5/10 - You've most certainly gotten better in this regard, but I still feel like this is your weakest story-telling aspect in many cases. While I didn't expect you to describe anything in super amazing glossy detail considering it's more of a theory than anything else, the grammar was still a bit off at times and could use some polishing. However, you've obviously learned from earlier criticism.

Plot: 8.5/10 - It was honestly just quite intriguing to me. That's all I really have to say.

Entertainment: 7.0/10 - These are some very interesting thoughts, and because I tend to enjoy bits of philisophical reasoning in the form of something different, I fancied this story. However, something like this may bore other people to death, even if it is this short.

(Pros and Cons disabled due to it being a theory and the short length.)

Overall: 7.0/10 - Good.

"It's really quite an interesting topic to handle, and a hard one at thatut with the way it's presented, you may notice it getting to your head."

Death Lives (talk) 00:53, August 1, 2014 (UTC)