Talk:Echoes/@comment-25021327-20150927143642

I thought that this was a pretty good little story. The pacing seemed to work for the most part, and though I personally would have liked to see a slower, more even pace up to the conclusion, I can see why it was sped up when it was.

The style here seems fairly competant and pretty well done, aside fro a few typos and wordings that I found a bit strange. I think I noticed a few tense changes here and there in the narrative, I was more lenient on the written letter portions, since such things can add to the character of the writer.

I appreciate the format here, using letters tell a story, while interspersing bits of first person narration. I think that it worked in some parts, but not so well in others. When I first started reading this, I thought it would be entirely comprised of letters, so it felt a little jarring when it switched to first person. Maybe some formatting, or the use of italics would help with this.

The plot seemed fine to me, tying the police reports to the odor in the kitchen and turning them into an overarching and sinister tale with the inclusion of the final letter. I think that we get just enough information about what has been happening to satisfy us, but not so much that it feels heavy handed.

So, this one felt pretty good to me :)