Talk:Little Big Planet: Littlest Planet/@comment-26395089-20150516192321

This Creepypasta was short and sweet, maybe a little too short for my taste. It starts you off with buying games and the protagonist being interested in the Little Big Planet series, waiting for it to download, somehow play the level ( out of 100,000 of levels in the game ) and ending the level with an empty feeling. As a player who has played and gained a popularity in creating levels, I see many unusual things in what people create.

I feel as though this story wasn't leading anywhere in particular, but explaining a moral story of life and death. I will say that the Creepypasta itself has a lot of potential of becoming something if there's things added, such as how you found the level, where did the lore and mysteries of that level come from, a more in-depth detail of the level. Relations between the author/protagonist and the level/game itself.

What really got me interested is the chatroom itself. There appears to be a hidden picture in it which is something I really would like to see. Also, you can try to make the level's lore more believable, like pictures, evidence or even make the level to make it seem real, like urban legends. People love looking things up. I don't see many disturbing pictures out there in LBP because they usually become "good grief", due to mature content. So that's something that would be great to see. Grammar is no problem, only 2 mistakes from what I've seen.

Overall 6/10 nice start, just add more. I would love to see this come to life.