Talk:The House/@comment-7706473-20130930120256

Not a bad little story. I think there are a few things that could be switched up a bit, but given that I enjoy the genre of 'rural horror', also known as 'every day real life'... ; )

I think the first line by Kyle - "Hey, guys, look at this!" Should be "Hey, John, look at this!" And then something indicating the rest of the posse took a look. That'd make the ending a bit more sensical. Secondarily, did you mean the bodies were heavily mutilated or heavily mutated, which is what you put? Both work, and I actually prefer heavily mutated - it has a bizarre surreality to it that fits the nature of the house.

Monkshood to imply a lurking evil, and again - quite enjoyable!