Talk:The Fine Line/@comment-24500817-20141023225040

My FREAKING BRAIN!, This is already rivaling A crap ton of awesome Pastas in my mind right now. I've always loved the Sims Creepypastas, and this is just awesome. I couldn't find any Grammar mistakes, so I can't take off any points for that. the only real problem I could find with this was the story idea, I have seen this formula many times, and that would maybe bring it down a little bit.

The character had a very well detailed background, and the story itself was a really good

non-waste of my time, thanks for the read!

8.5/10,

Pika.