Thread:Kaptain DTSW/@comment-28916908-20161023155239/@comment-29502200-20161023200143

You only spent an hour? A creepypasta at minimum should take a few days to create. The issue is you rushed with your story, therefore it lead to it being a failure. Take time when you write it, revise it, stay away from cliches, yaddy yaddy yadda. With experience and practice, you can write something great.