Talk:The Ghost of My Dead Girlfriend/@comment-25645041-20141112171936

This was a great concept, but I can't help feeling it could have had a lot more heart and soul poured into it. In its current state it isn't written very well, there are many areas you could have phrased some sentences a lot better. For instance 'when some robber came up' you could have said 'when suddenly a man dressed in a hood holding a gun appeared in front of us'. Not everyone is a literary master, lord knows I'm not, but this just seems like it is lackin in quality. But once again, great concept :)