Talk:Why Me? (Five Night's At Freddy's Creepypasta)/@comment-25021327-20150218044851

I'm not quite sure I get this one. It starts off like a normal FNAF pasta; kid goes to Freddy's, animatronics act weird, kids get attacked, hilarity ensues. There are a few grammar issues, but nothing too bad. The main gripe I have is that the entire phone guy speech is copypasted here. It makes up 40.04954% of the story (give or take) meaning that only just over half of this is even original content.

Maybe it's a nitpick, but I kept expecting there to be different text in the phone guy speech. But it's entirely pasted with "what's your name?" tacked on the end. I don;t know how he expects to get an answer as he stated that he recorded the message and there is no actual live conversation happening (I wanted to record a message for you to help you get settled in on your first night) However, Phone Guy's recording answers Frank at the end, so... I guess that happens.

Then the last few lines happen, and  it ends. I didn't even know what happened at first, the name Frank Turner had no meaning to me. the kid's name is Noah Blackley, and it's mentioned once that the dad is named Frank, I guess I should have been paying more attention. I guess maybe he changed his name after the death of his son? Why wouldn't Freddy's know that is was the guy whose some the killed?

I assume that the last lines are Noah's spirit inside the Animatronic, and that he I guess is going to try to kill his dad (The game is about animatronics trying to kill the guard.)? The story just doesn;t make a whole lot of sense to me I guess. Sorry for the harsh critique :\