Talk:Herobrine - is he real?/@comment-6794436-20150408191803

MINECRAFT PASTAS NEVER WORK...This is a prime example of that statement...

Good: Well, as you said, this isn't a wall of text, and there's categories. This also has mediocre length, but that's better than some of the other shit we get around here.

Bad: First of all, no, you didn't fix up the grammar as it is still terrible here. Sure, there aren't too many mispellings, but there are numerous run on sentences and capitals where they aren't needed such as after commas. Speaking of commas, you used way too many, which as I said before caused a multitude of run on sentences. This pasta is really vapid (boring if you didn't know, as judging from how you didn't even know how to spell "terrifying" I thought I should clarify) as really no action takes place until the final paragraph, and that final paragraph wasn't even creepy in the slightest. The pasta is very confusing in the way you worded it, thus making whatever semblence of creepiness actually there get thrown out the window. Also, as I said before, Minecraft pastas just don't work except for those oddities where it is made into a mindfuck, although that isn't saying much as mindfucks can make anything good.

Verdict: 2/10- You definitely have to read the New Writer Guidelines as this truly was an abysmal effort. Just because there aren't too many mispellings doesn't mean that the grammar is fixed, and you should watch your usage of commas too.

-Incorrect3