Talk:The Man in the Black Suit/@comment-25021327-20150107021341

Hmmmm, I can see what the author is going for, but I can't help but feel that it's a little tired. I feel as though I've seen and read this shadow-of-death type of story quite a few times in my life, in fact I'm currently nearing the end of King's IT  and there is a kind of similar theme in that, and some other works of his. It's not that this is a bad topic for a short tale, in fact I think it's quite the opposite, which is why it's done so often. But that fact also makes it difficult to make a story like this unique.

The pasta is quite short, not giving a lot of time to get the reader invested, and I don't think the subject has enough weight here, or is presented strongly enough to have a short pasta work in its favor. I guess I would like to have seen a litle bit more in the way of description, or maybe interpretation of the man in the suit.

There are some odd wordings, and a few typographical errors that could be cleaned up here, but nothing awful. And I think that maybe if someone isn;t familiar with this type of story, they may quite like a pasta like this. But, for me, I guess it felt a little lacking.