Talk:Training (A Pokemon Creepypasta)/@comment-26395089-20150609044847

Can't really say this is a Creepypasta more than it is a fan-fiction. Our protagonist, or antagonist feels like Silver, from the Pokémon manga and game.

The story starts in a middle of a climax, getting literally straight to the point. Some stories does this, to me, it isn't too bad, but because of it, it lacks character development on why, when and how the main character turned out to be this way.

Another thing I'd like to point out is that I can't tell whether or not if this universe, or story takes place in a video game, or a fan-fiction story/anime. If it's in the video game, then the ending would feel all too unrealistic. but as a fan fiction, it fits okay. This story though feels undeveloped and missing a lot of pieces that could become a great story itself. Maybe not as much as a creepypasta, but more like a good story.

If you are intended it to be a creepypasta, you might want to put some elements that makes a story creepy instead of the main character getting his bit of Karma by being brutally beaten up. Think of it this way, Team rocket, in the anime almost always suffer in that way. So it wouldn't be creepy, try to put creepy elements if that's where you're going. maybe include the main character's past.