Talk:Power Outage/@comment-4332975-20130526215508

It wasn't bad, though I found the description of the monster to be a little lackluster. My general rule for showing the monster is the "all or nothing" approach. Either going over the top in using as much sickening detail as possible, or being deliberately vauge, and instead putting detail into how the character seeing the creature reacts to it. Here, the reactions didn't really get much if any attention, and the creature wasn't really described in such unnecessary detail that I could really believe that it had permanently ingrained its appearance into the narrator's mind.

However, a pretty solid story overall.