Talk:TOB Private Games/@comment-11366536-20150705214827

This is pure fucking garbage.

I'm not literally joking when I say that this story is really terrible. The Plot isn't understandable at ALL. There's just zero explanation as to what the hell is going on, and starting off the story with an Overly-Long Monologue just confused the hell out of me even more. The ending of this catastrophe was so abrupt and so bad that it's easily comparable to the ending of the "Twilight" Saga. Also, the title has NOTHING to do with the story that I could find. What the literal FUCK?!

AND THEN THERE'S THE GRAMMAR. Holy lord, it's fucking terrible even for a Chatroom Creepypasta. The Grammar alone is what made me cringe at this creepypasta aside from it's main problems. It makes it look like a third grader wrote this!

But that's not the worst part of this travesty of a story; The Worst part would be the Scariness Factor. There is NONE. NADA. There is more laughability to this creepypasta than watching shitty McDonald's Advertisements than there is scariness.

The ONLY two redeemable qualities I could find were that the story had Categories, and that it doesn't have a Gigantic Wall of Text. That's it. Other than that, this story is garbage.

Verdict - 1.2/10 (Horrifying)

For the love of god, read THIS before you even think about writing a Creepypasta, as it will help you in future attempts.