Talk:The Mother/@comment-25021327-20140924130707

I'm glad to see that you're an entusiastic writer. I would say to maybe take more time with your stories, at least to proofred them before posting them.

This one has spelling and punctuation errors that somewhat distract from the story, and although it's not  a "Wall of Text"-proper, it ought to be broken up into more paragraphs. The story itself isn't too bad, but it's kind of standard "Evil Stepmother" type stuff, with some unanswered questons.

Like I said, my advice would be to take a bit more time with your stories, read them through a few times before posting to check spelling and clarity.