Talk:Reflections of a Wanderer/@comment-25021327-20160511014230

This one felt a little lacking to me. I'm not familiar with FFV, I only played through a small portion of the game and that was a few years ago. I think that even if I knew the story, I'd still be wanting a little more from this one.

The main issue I have is that this is pretty transparent and really telegraphs the whole mindfuck/reveal thing. In reading this, there are so many details that are blatantly omitted that one can;t help but see that some big reveal is on its way. I feel like a twist should enhance the story, not necessarily define it. The plot should work without the big final reveal, and here there isn;t really much story given.

That said, the writing is okay. Spelling, grammar, and format are all in pretty good shape. I think this one would have benefitted from being drawn out a bit more, and letting the story unfold more organically, not relying so heavily on the bait-and-switch formula which just strings the reader along until the reveal.