Talk:Birthday at Freddy's/@comment-25690889-20141116131318/@comment-25021327-20141116144416

It can take a little while for folks to get around to reading stories here. There isn't always much traffic on the site. Some people read stories, but don't leave comments, and a lot of people just post their own story, and never read anyone else's. You can ask other members to read and review your work, but there's no guarantee that they will. Don't get too discouraged,

I thought this story was about average. It doesn't really add much to the format of the many FNAF stories that have been submitted lately; kid goes to Freddy's, animatronics do something bad, the end.

There are some issues with spelling and clarity, as well as capitalization. The sentence ''"A place where kids and grown ups alike." '' is a fragment, and reads strangely. A place where kids and grownups alike what? Maybe you mean a place For kids and grownups alike.

n nThis pasta doesn't really do anything new or spectacular, but it's not awfulecess necessarily bad.