Talk:The Grin.exe/@comment-25021327-20140910025208

Well, I read through this despite the formatting. So that's something. And that will unfortunately be the first thing I'll mention, you should try to break this up into paragraphs to make it easier on the eyes. Most people will see the wall of text and just disregard the story.

That said, this isn't too bad. It seems to follow a standard formula, which I feel makes it get a little lost in the gaming creepypastas. This is puncuated by the fact that the narrator starts off by essentially telling us that this story isn't like all the other haunted/possessed/weird game stories, then proceeds to tell a story similar to many other gaming pastas.

I must confess, when I saw the wall of unformatted text, I was expecting the writing to be bad, or in some form of broken english. However, I was pleasantly surprised that it seemed pretty well written. The descriptions were pretty good, and for the most part the narrative was clear. Spelling and grammar seemed fine.

As I said, this isn't a bad pasta, I just feel like it treads a lot of familiar ground. And maybe if I were familiar with the game, I would have gotten more into it.