Talk:It Has a Rather Lovely Ending/@comment-4332975-20130226175342/@comment-6761334-20130227185519

Oh, okay. you were talking about the telling it is scary part. Yeah it goes against the show/tell rule. I wanted to be subtle but there were moments where i was afraid that it I was too subtle the reader might miss what was going on. I didn't want to directly say anything like "At this point I was terrfied." But, I thought if it was restricted to mostly dialog between characrers or moments when the narrator was trying to reason/problem solve aloud that it wouldn't feel too out of place.

Still, if it could be made more subtle I think it would probably improve it overall. I don't generally write/read things that are meant to be creepy or scary. So this is a little out of my wheelhouse. Most of my writing practice is from journalism. And so I was trained to state facts, which is the opposite of what works for being creepy.