Talk:Welcome to the Family/@comment-25021327-20150117211501

Not too bad. I was expecting a kind of FunnyMouth-ish story without much substance, but I got something a little less derivative than I imagined.

The story is pretty standard, with the weird guy messaging the narrator increasingly bizarre text, phishing his info and contacting him in real life. But I kind of enjoyed the way it was presented here. I like stories thatconsciously keep things vague, which I feel this one did effectively. We never know exactly what is going on, and can't be sure what the antagonist's intention is.

It's also a nice touch that the narrator actually does take measured to protect himself, contacting websites, making new accounts, and ultimately getting law enforcement involved. I like reading about a protagonist who doesn't just "shrug off" every single strange occurrence.

The ending implies that there may be an element of mind control or mental deterioration linked to the Jack in the box, which may come off as funnymouth-ish. I suppose some folks might see this as borrowing too heavily from the aforementioned pasta, but I still pretty much enjoyed it.