Talk:Number 128, Copperhead Drive (Short story)/@comment-25021327-20150313210208

I enjoyed this one, it's a pretty quick read and features an abandoned setting, which I like. The pace felt pretty consistent, didn;t seem to jump around, or lag at all (to me anyway). Typographically, there are only a few little issues here and there, nothing distracting. (I usually have a few in anything I write, I rely on wiki folks to catch what I miss XD)

The story is a pretty nice twist on a haunted house tale. The protagonist going back to the spooky place he remembers as a child, only to find out that it may actually be more than meets the eye. I was at first taken aback a bit by the way the tone went, I was expecting a more atmospheric slow moving story at first, but it quickly picked up with some action and quick scares (and a rather trigger happy narrator :3). Once I realized the tone, I felt that it worked.

I felt that the descriptions here were done pretty well, they helped set the mood without slowing down the action too much (Something that seems to escape me in my writing x3). So this was a pretty enjoyable read for me. I tend to like more drawn out and slower paced pieces (which I felt could have worked for this piece as well), but for a change, a quick, ore action oriented story is good now and again.