Talk:Greed/@comment-5675310-20131219032916

Greed can drive a man to insanity.

Description: 5.5/10 - I found it quite easy to feel the man's pain and anguish throughout the story due to how much focused on the sad aspect of the pasta. Other than that however, it didn't feel like anything special. The word choice could have been better, the sentences could be constructed better, and all the grammatical errors that cover the story should be fixed.

Plot: 7.0/10 - A very good mindf*ck, but it felt like there was much more to it. A simple mindf*ck with no really interesting plot points, but the ending twist equals a half decent story that is too bare. Still, the mindf*ck was very well done and deserves some recognition.

Entertainment: 7.5/10 - An enjoyable little tale, but I can't really consider it a creepypasta.

Pros and Cons:

+ Great mindf*ck

+ Easy to feel for the main charcter

- Could use better word choice

- Needs to be fleshes out more

- Grammatical errors need fixing

- Poor sentence structure

Overall: 6.8/10 - Okay.

"It has a great twist, but definetely needs some polishing."

- Marcus