Talk:Dark Emotions/@comment-5675310-20131219035804

Dark Emotions are what make this story interesting.

Description: 9.3/10 -  Definetely well written and described. Your word choice was great, and I couldn't spot out any grammatical errors. However, it would seem that you were trying to make the reader feel remorse for the charcter, but I felt more anger than sadness, which I suppose isn't a con. If you were trying to make the reader feel sad for the charcter though, it didn't really work for me.

Plot: 7.5/10 - It's an interesting suicide story that stands out because of how it's described, but the base premise isn't a new concept here. I also would have liked for the girl he was talking about to be fleshed out a little more, because without her being fleshed out it doesn't feel like she could be a person's savior in a time of distress.

Entertainment: 8.0/10 - An enjoyable little story that I can't call a creepypasta.

Pros and Cons:

+ Well written

+ Short and sweet

- Smaller charcter could be fleshed out more

- Done before many times

Overall: 8.5/10 - Great.

"A story that knows when to stop and end, but one that could use some more meat to cover the bare bones."

- Marcus