Talk:Cold Water/@comment-17737991-20150602140840

Why the centred text? .-.

Anyway, the idea here is good, but it's so abstract and I'm just left confused. Is this all a dream? Does he (I'm going to say "he" for the sake of laziness, as he/she requires more typing) repeatedly go to the bridge, pass out, then go back home? Where is everyone at the end? I'm guessing the bridge is just something he fantasizes about when he's in bed, and the breeze he feels is just his fan. In which case, he uses sleep as a substitution for actually dying in order to temporarily be free of pain and suffering, and he enjoys his dreams of suicide.

Unless the bridge is a place he actually physically visits, in which case, yea I'm very confused D: Anyway, I enjoyed the first half much more than the second half. The first half discusses why he feels that way and the consequences your loved ones would face if you off yourself. Those points are aren't ever mentioned in the second half though, which is a bunch of abstract bridge and waking up scenes. Basically, the first half seems like it's setting the grounds for a story, but then the second half doesn't do anything with the information in the first half. Like I said, it's so abstract and hard to follow. Maybe he already did kill himself and is in purgatory? I'm really not sure ^^'

This is by no means a shit pasta, I just found it a bit confusing, and don't think the two halves go very well together. But… but no, this is not at all a shit pasta, not even close xD