Talk:Memories of my Mother/@comment-25021327-20141101020052

For me, this reads as pretty standard ghost story fare. Somewhat spooky, and a little bit emotional. Since your edit stated that you would appreciate, and I actually have read this twice, pre, and post edit, I'll give a few thoughts.

I personally don't typically find ghost stories to be particularly frightening, I tend to like scares that are more tangible. And I don't dislike this story, it just isn't exactly my thing.

As I said, I did read the older one, and this edit, and I thinkt hat this version is a bit better. I feel like the narrator is a little underdeveloped, but it is a rather short story, so there isn;t much time for in depth development. I feel like the reader is just kind of told that they ought to feel badly for the narrator without much background aside from the brief mentions of the Mother having been a good woman who died young, and the Father being an abusive husband.

The moisture on the tombstone and apartment floor work alright, and set up the reappearance of the mother toward the end, if a little predictably. But predictability isn't automatically a bad thing. I guess I just had a hard time connecting with the mother and son characters and their motivations.

One thing that I found a bit silly was the son going to the cemetary and digging up the grave on a whim, like it's no big thing. That's hard work XD I was glad to see another odd bit edited out of this version though. I believe in the original, the News report is implied to have shown a close up of the washed up corpse to the viewing public for ID purposes. I imagine that sort of content from a Local news station would disturb and upset a lot of folks! So the description works fine since the reader already knows who it is.

The spelling, grammar, and format are all in pretty good shape, and It's a quick read. As I said, I just had trouble relating to, and sympathizing with the characters and their actions, and this probably works better for a fan of more overtly supernatural stuff. But, not too bad :)