Talk:The Eagle/@comment-25021327-20150118160221

Period pieces sometimes provide obstacles for me while reading, but this was pretty much able to keep my attention throughout. This here is a fairly standard ghost story, or maybe a legend, and that's okay.

The pacing here was in good shape. Things were steady throughout, and didn't feel too much like they were dragging at any point. A had a little trouble distinguishing the characters aside from the Captain (bad man) and Oliver (well intentioned in spite of circumstance). And that's alright I suppose. The others need to be there in order to flesh out the troop, and serve to deliver a little exposition.

One thing I guess I would say is that I had hoped for a little bit more of a payoff in the end. The story establishes the characters in such a way that we pretty much know they're goners, and that some of them 'deserve' it. After the entire build of the story though, the ending felt a little abrupt to me. Not that I mind leving the details up to the reader, but I felt that maybe a little closing action would have helped.

Another od thing for me about the ending was how the narrative switched. I mean, I know that the last part appears to be from the point of view of an outsider, "'' The details of these men’s deaths are unknown still, to this day."  I get what the author is going for, but... well, the details aren't'' unknown to the readers. We just heard all about them XD a crazy guy with a bird on his head slaughtered everybody! :3

I guess I would have liked more... I don't know if resolution is the right word, but I felt like something was missing from the ending. I was hoping maybe for a follow up on why the one man was found dead with no apparent bodily harm.

But in any case, this is a pretty enjoyable story. The dialogue is pretty well done, which can be difficult sometimes. As I was reading I tweaked some spelling and grammar, but they weren't in too bad shape, nothing really distracting. There is some interesting vocabulary in the piece as well. In all, It's a pretty well done little story, and others will likely dig it more than I did :)