Talk:You Are in a Room 2/@comment-24181739-20140703030738

Hmm... interesting read.

A few problems - This isn't scary. Honestly, this is nowhere near scary. I imagined this happening in my head, and it wasn't a scary thought. I'm pretty immune to this kind of thing by now!

This pasta... there isn't enough. I would like to see more pasta on my plate next time; but not too much. You could stretch the moment a while. That would make this Pasta better.

Also, the "Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyy?" is a bit long, and stretched. It can't really work here~

A few good things - This has potential. It's a very sub-scary pasta, but with a few tweaks and lengthening, it'd be good.

4.93 / 7.22, 68.29%, or a D.