Talk:The Mountain Man/@comment-25021327-20150103000356

Well, as I mentioned several times, I'm unfamiliar with the source material but you said you wanted a review so...

To someone who hasn't played SPOILER[Portal  ]SPOILER I can only say that this makes no sense. I have no idea what is going on or why. I cacn only venture to guess that something is happening involving some sort of hallucination, or something the like. But without knowing more than that, it all reads like nonsense.

The narrative seems to jump around quite a bit, and the headings are not uniform. The story ought to be proofread as there are several issues with capitalization, and one or two grammar flubs I noticed. It feels pretty rushed to me, and like others have said, maybe it would benefit from being longer.

Aside from that, I can't give a very effective critique... sorry...