Talk:Sorrow/@comment-24181739-20150531030006

Pasta Re-Visit No. 1: Sorrow

This Pasta is highly mediocre, if not good. But there are a few things that hold it back.

Problem 1: The name is HYPER clichè at this point in time.

The title isn't an issue. The name of the MAIN CHARACTER is the problem. But hey, nitpicking is nitpicking.

Problem 2: Whenever there is an attempt to take attention away from Toku. This takes away ALL SYMPATHY I could have for Nika/Sorrow. This isn't a nitpick, that fucking messes with the idea to be on Nika/Sorrow's side of things!

Problem 3: The tears may be a symbol of some kind, but it's trying to regain sympathy for a character who deserves the opposite.

'''Good things are: Grammar is sound, plot is partially sound, and the characters are believable. That is all.'''

'''Final Rating: 3.40 / 5. 68%, D-.'''