Talk:The Man in Black (Poem of a Creepypasta in Progress)/@comment-8470110-20131028232554

Like dreams, I find it hard to review poems. But there are a few things that I was thinking about while reading this;

1. There were some words I found that didn't work in the poem. They didn't rhyme with anything such as 'Never'd return' and 'both you and her'. Those lines didn't follow the rhyme scheme, but maybe that was the point.

2. Why is the letter seem like it was written by a psychopathic Dr. Seuss? There's nothing wrong with that, but that's just my opinion. Maybe tone down that part so we don't see a children's book author in that position.

3. If I had to guess, I'd say this is will be a 'Slenderman' Creepypasta once it's done. Or the Grinch, who knows?

With all that said, I'd have to give this a 7/10. A well written poem for sure, but the visions of Dr. Seuss took away from the scariness. I couldn't take it seriously after that.

-Sshakenbakee (Cameron S.)