Talk:My Sweet Empress/@comment-5998610-20140829004217/@comment-4611825-20140908203331

Thank you for the citicism! I assure you, this wasn't meant as a trollpasta, I'm just not very experienced with this genre.

I thought I did seperate the paragraphs, but I suppose I didn't seperate them enough. I'm not entirely sure how to write a plot any more serious than your average JRPG, mostly because I lack experience with drama and horror. As for the music, I felt it built atmosphere when I envisioned it in my head, but I guess it doesn't carry over very well to text.

I'll make one or two minor tweaks and hope it doesn't get taken down. (I'd happily accept a position on sh*tpastas, if it meant being featured.)