Talk:A visit to a house/@comment-25481598-20160425022100

Let me try to say this respectfully. It takes more than blood and gore to make a story creepy. One thing I have learned from listening to Mutahar is that build up is key. This story had none what so ever, it just happened. Also the cliche of the character doing something that is clearly a bad idea isn't done well. Another offence is the 'it's time for me to die' parts. Why do these people have to die? It feels like a quick attempt to make the story creepy and it falls on its face.

2.5/10

If you still enjoy the idea and want to make this a better creepypasta, go into more detail about the events and give some reasoning as to why this all happened. If these events happened a bit more realisticly and we we're just given them, we could have some potential here.