Talk:Achievement Unlocked: Steam/@comment-14000207-20140102045431

I think my biggest problem with this is the lack of a good intro. I agree with the others, the sentances run on, a bit of an overuse of commas. I think it has the potential to be great, but it needs more structure and some use of better storylining. I feel that it needs more connection with the player's emotions as well.

6.5/10