Talk:Team Fortress 2 – emhtiwyalp/@comment-5675310-20131221023016

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Description: 7.0/10 - Things were described and detailed decently, the pacing was good, and there were only a few small grammatical errors here and there. There were some parts that would've been much creepier with some better word choice and if you rolled it out more, but still not bad.

Plot: 4.0/10 - A lame idea with few to know redeeming qualities. This kind of idea has been done multiple times with the same cliches and lack of build up. I must mention as well, that the main character of your story sounds like a complete douche and didn't help at all to make him feel more realistic.

Entertainment: 3.0/10 - After the slightly promising beginning, I wanted to click away.

Pros and Cons:

+ Only a few grammatical errors

- Cliches

- Lame idea

- Boring story

Overall: 4.5/10 - Bad.

"Nothing to see here."

- Marcus