Talk:Carrie.JPEG/@comment-11079349-20131202151752

so, this is decent, though a little too quick for its own good. and now I'll go into my list of things that caught my eye.

1. I like how sceamin' sam wasn't the bad guy, just a guy that like heavy metal ... and can't take horror.

2. The title is accurate, but i honestly came into this expecting a sonic.EXE fan CP. you might want to think up another name because sonic.EXE is terrible.

3. "the blood looked like it was dripping down my screen. i wiped it away..." CUASE THAT NORMAL! i would have freaked out the moment I touched the blood. I would have been horrified. I'm sorry, but Mason sounds like a massive derp. he is scared by the bloody image on his computer, but not the fact that he literally just wiped blood off of it?

4. So carrie killed herself and blamed Mason? that's ... reasonable.

5. Ok for the last time, if your computer wont shut off, tear the cord out. if that doesn't work, shutgun the possessed piece of garbage. I understand this was used to add to the creepyness, but it didnt exactly work the way you wanted it to, mainly because there is no empathy built for the main character, Mason.

6. the blood was a little over the top with this. I'm not saying it was bad, I'm just also not saying it was good. At least you managed to keep in that middle ground.

7. I'm going to be honest, the amount of times a character escapes a game/movie is astronomical any more. it was used ... well, it was definitely used here. i can't say it was used badly or well, but it just happens so much that it could almost be called another cliche.

so, i have to give this a 5/10 for general lack of ... well, anything eventful. everything sounded casual and kinda boring on the way. Probably just limitations of your current writing style, but it needs to be said. For what it's worth, it was alright. it just felt un-important. except for the scene where he's watching the movie.