Talk:Acknowledgement/@comment-24540056-20140831162909

Sifenchar's Critique

I have no idea what show you were trying to make a creepypasta out of, but without the mindfuck, it's still pretty ominous. It reminds me of a period in my life where I was convinced that there was a person behind me, and whenever I turned around to face him, he moved just out of my field of view. After doing some research on the show, I had found out that this was a pretty good mindfuck, for what it was, although the initial reaction for me was not all that great. Everything regarding grammar, spelling and formatting is good, and I thought you nailed this pasta. What keeps this pasta from being better is the fact that I haven't seen the show beforehand, and the "Oh god! I can't believe it" Shock and awe feeling for people who have watched the show for me, was utterly lost. It did make sense after doing some research, yes, but it felt like a bit of a chore to just understand the ending.

But this still doesn't mean this pasta kicks ass.

8/10