Talk:Team Fortress 2 Creepypasta: The Spy/@comment-11366536-20170407155349

Well, nice to see we have another TF2 enthusiast in the community!

The story actually isn't too bad, structure-wise. The story is written pretty well, with only few visible grammar errors that I could spot, and it paces itself in a way that paves the way for build-up, which you took advantage of and inserted. Nice job!

Now, my real complaint with the story is that most of the actual scares are pretty cliche' going on to the end. Likewise, the ending absolutely killed it for me, as it was just laughably cliche'd. There's also a few unexplained actions throughout the story. For example, in the beginning, the author explicitly states that he plans to head to a party to his head only to suddenly change his mind and play TF2 because why not. There's also the unsolved mystery of who or what exactly the "Spy" character is, which is a shame as there was much room for logistics such as an estranged F2P player or even an eerie server-mod.

Overall, it feels like you were trying to attempt something similar to Team Fortress 2: Play-Dead, which began very pleasantly, but didn't quite end on the same note.

Verdict: 6.5/10 (Okay)