Talk:Addiction Virus/@comment-6794436-20141207032723

This has an ok idea, but the pasta itself is just terrible. There are a plethora of spelling and grammar issues that  draw away from the story. Secondly, the buildup is terrible as is the execution and how you wrote it. Also, the ending itself was a huge letdown. Another gripe I have with the end of the pasta is the "Final Notes". These are shown in a lot of pastas by beginners and it draws away from whatever semblence of creepiness there was, thus ruining the experience. If there's a final note you want to add, write the pasta first, and then later reference it in a blog post.

Verdict: 4/10- This pasta is pretty bad and needs a touch up in the spelling/grammar