Talk:C10H15N/@comment-25021327-20160829005938

I thought the writing in this one was pretty good. The style was solid and it was clear and concise as far as describing the events transpiring without dragging on at all. I felt like the writing was relatable as well. The pace was brisk and kept me interested throughout.

The story felt pretty interesting for the most part. I was interested to know where things were going and what the narrator was going to act like on each successive day. This one, in my opinion, falls into one of the traps of the mindfuck genre, that all the events are leading up to some kind of reveal, and a lot of the chips or placed on that reveal. Here it felt a little dull to me. I felt a little confused about the story as a whole after finishing it.

I mean, I get it, but I think that the intended effect for the reader was to be like "Ahhhh, I see! It all makes sense now!" But I felt like it was more of a "Oh... okay." The guy is taking methamphetamines, which does explain the erratic behaviour, but I guess I was just hoping for there to be a little more to it than that. It's entirely possible that I'm missing some points that were intended as well though. It was also a little unclear to me how the cops found out he was using, and how they even knew he was in possession of illegal substance. And the physical force that was used seemed extreme to me. I understand the reason for having it end with a violent even though, it has more of an impact than just having it end with a police officer being like "Sir, we have a warrant to search these premises." x3

So I felt like this was a little bit of a mixed bag, which I don't like saying because I liked the writing, and was interested in what was happening and where things were going up until the reveal. I'm glad to see another story from you though, and I'm glad I read this one :)