Talk:The Mountain Man/@comment-24685180-20150103003204

This wasn't very good....at all. The grammar was atrocious and the story was too short with little to no build up. Here are a few things I liked and didn't like.

I liked how it was a Creepypasta about Portal. Portal is a great game with creepy aspects, but not alot of people write Creepypastas about it. The end was kind of unique.........but not really.

The ending wasn't really a mindfuck as I could tell it was a Portal Pasta once you started mentioning laboratorys. It could definitely use some work especially with the grammar and you could maybe add more build up. I would rate it

4/10

-Rev