Talk:Perfect Game/@comment-68.40.83.235-20140710042849

My first real problem with it. "I played half the night, getting all the way to Hydrocity, then went to bed."

That is the SECOND zone in the game. She should have been well past that.

There was also a bit of unnecessary detail.

Also, I highly agree with Mutahar. I feel like the readers aren't told WHY the game is perfect. We aren't drawn into it as much as we should have been.

5/10