Talk:Lust/@comment-6418997-20140226051112

Lust I do agree is much more serious than what we give it credit for. The poem felt more like wiseman talk rather than a poem, to be honest the story is a bit generic don't get me wrong its a good message but its a message we have heard since childhood, and since you didn't add to many things new it felt kinda pointless. The story itself was well written but I prefer longer but I'm not one to talk because almost all of my stories are short, not to bad :) it needs work though