Talk:You Failed (Dark Cloud/Chronicle 2)/@comment-25021327-20140713030855/@comment-17737991-20140713124024

Sounds like my mission was accomplished then xD When I wrote this, I heard pretty much the same story for every pasta, but written... so badly. I figured I'd write that kind of story, but just put in enough effort not to make it painful to read.

As for tense issues, if you mean something like this "I played through the beginning of the game with no problems..." where it's suddenly past tense, that was intentional. I guess in hindsight it's jarring and incorrect. Meh .-. My idea was: "Finally I get to play this!" < Present "*some shit happened in game, who cares*" < Past. This is just to transition to the next part of the story in present tense. The events aren't important, but it's there to explain what happened before the next present tense, instead of just skipping to the next relevant part of the story and disregarding a small chunk of gameplay. I figured glancing over it quickly in present tense wouldn't work since the present happens real time, and can't be summed up quickly. "I watch Max do blah blah" < Back in the present, with real time. So it's basically "I get to play this" (cut forward to the future of playing it) "I watch Max do whatever" is now the present. Between getting to play it and watching Max, the past happens.

Anyway, I agree with you, it is technically incorrect to write that way. So... I don't know why I typed that explanation for choosing to abuse English rules xD

If you want to see more of my work, the only other story I have so far is this http://someordinarygamers.wikia.com/wiki/What_You_Deserve and you get to know the protagonist much more in that one. It's a much different story than this one though, and it's also eight pages so it could take some time if you choose to read it xD And thank you for the comment =D