Talk:Belief in Oneself/@comment-1810325-20130417224138

I gotta say, there were a lot of elements of this story that impressed me. I liked the concept; I really did enjoy the idea of the character never really being sure if what he saw was real or not. And it wasn't just some thing you threw in last minute, it was an crucial part of the narrative. The character's self hate was also very compelling, it helped create a story that was more about an internal struggle than an external one.

Now I can't say it was perfect. Some of the dialog comes off as odd, and there's confusion over what game the character is playing at certain times (sometimes he's playing Smash Brothers again, other times it is Mario Sunshine or pokemon or something, and the transitions are weak), but overall, I'd give this story a 7/10.

It's a good concept that's shown well enough, but has a few issues.