Talk:Cr@SH B@nd1c00t/@comment-8485155-20161211223002

Everything Wrong With: Cr@SH B@nd1c00t

-Reading. [+1]

-The title. Seriously. CratSH Batndoneczerozerot? What the fuck is that? Yeah, I know it's just supposed to be 'Crash Bandicoot', but the point is that's how it actually should be pronounced. So now in addition to looking stupid, it also sounds stupid. Good job. Have 10 sins. [+10]

-The wall of text. [+1]

And now to actually get into the story itself. Oh boy.

" From as early as i can remember i always loved the playstation, my favorite game growing up was the infamous Crash Bandicoot." - 'The author's favorite game' clichè. [+1]

Bonus Round - Have an additional 5 sins for every error in this sentence: two lower-case 'I's [+10], no comma between 'remember' and the second I [+5], 'playstation' should be capitalized [+5], the use of a comma instead of a semicolon in between 'playstation' and 'my' [+5], and finally, incorrect use of the word 'infamous' [+5]. Total: +30 sins.

" as i was driving along the road i saw a garage sale happening" - Garage sale cliché. [+1]

-As a side note, if I do a bonus round for every other technical error in this story, I'll be here all day. Just have an additional thousand sins. [+1000]

"I looked around but nothing caught my eye that is until i saw what seemed to be an old PS1 SLIM, i asked him how much he wanted for it and he said NO, this is very valuable to me and my family so you can't have it" - Why the fuck does he even have the console and the games out there if he isn't planning on selling them? [+1]

" i saw he had the original Crash trilogy and i said ill give you 100 bucks and in 0.1 seconds he replied with sold." - *sigh* [+10]

" I don't mean to brag but i was pretty good so i didn't die for a good few levels" - I call bullshit. Now you're just telling lies, author. 25 sins for dishonesty. [+25]

"I returned to the game the next day and again the loading screen was again, very long and eerie." Okay, first of all, it's a PS1 game, so of course the load time is really long. Secondly, what's so damn eerie about it? Furthermore, you didn't even mention that before so how is it eerie again? Details, man. They are important. [+2]

" I hit my control pad out of rage and suddenly it went to static but this time for about 2 seconds." - The control pad went to static? What the fuck? [+1]

"I still have nightmares to this day..." - 'Neverending nightmares' clichè. [+1]

Sin Count: 1084

Sentence: HELL

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