Talk:Meat.../@comment-25021327-20141111040421

There are some technical issues with this, things like spelling and grammar. The format is spaced out somewhat oddly, but that isn;t really a big deal because the story is short. And that's not necessarily a bad thing either. It sould use some work, and tweaking. One thing that I definitely think could be improved was how the character was referred to as "Ryan" in every instance. It became quite repetative and a bit distracting when I was reading. Maybe go through, and replace "Ryan" with "He" in some of the instances.

With that all said, i have to say that I pretty much liked the story. It's vague, and bizarre... maybe even underdeveloped. But in this instance, those qualities worked for me. It is just such an oddball little tale, that I find it kind of intriguing, and a bit endearing. I liked the strange doglike creature, and the implications of occult activity that were never elaborated upon, and left up to the reader. Short and weird, which was okay with me.

So I guess in all, I'll say, that I don't know if it's a good pasta, but I know I enoyed it.