Talk:Yu-Gi-OH/@comment-25021327-20160930233949

This one felt a little bit haphazard to me. A lot of it just read like a list of uneplainable events reactions to them. I think a little more insight into the thoughts and feelings of the narrator might have helped a bit. There were some spots I thought were a bit odd, For example, when everything starts bleeding, is it real? For instance, could other people see the blood stains from the TV if they happened to come into the house? Another thing that was kind of minor but odd to me was that the narrator and his friend watched an entire season and half of another just kind of on the fly, but wouldn;t that be several hours of tv? x3

I will say that I appreciate that this ended with the narrator needing psychiatric visits as opposed to the overused "Now I'm in a mental hospital" thing. So this one didn;t do much for me, I didn;t feel very invested in what was going on, I guess. Also, there are a ton of uncapitalized I pronouns here, which makes the writing seems a little sloppy. Anyway, sorry if this came across harsh.