Talk:As I Stand Here/@comment-6418997-20140113042645

This is a okay pasta. I think it has an interesting concept. I agree with Marcus that you really dont need much details in this. Maybe show more examples of his rage instead of showing that one death scene. i also think its cliched i kinda saw that ending. it also kinda left a cliffhanger. that cliffhanger didnt leave us enough clues to say what would happen. I would like more emotion.

Characters- had an interesting theme and concept but I kinda felt no emotion. It felt like he didnt mean it. I just feel you should make me worry if you should see a doctor unforuntaly i didnt get this feeling it felt really fake. 5.5/10

Concept- was cliched but I see many possiblties as to what you can do with your story. I feel if given more emotion and better characters I would have enjoyed this 6/10.

interest-  i was interested but i was kinda dissappointed of all the possiblites i saw with this. i felt so much more could have made this awesome. also less cliched so we wont see the ending coming

overall- 5.5/10 average not bad ^^