Talk:The Gronahs/@comment-11366536-20150708062835

Oh god why, another absymal creepypasta.

Plot - The Creepypasta's plot is very blank and iscrutable, as the story begins with a Random "Main Character" we get thrown at us by the name of Turner Westen with no backstory or Character Details given about his personality whatsoever, a HUGE waste of writing.

Then suddenly, while he's talking to his "Dad", his eyes turn and SO BEGINS THE RUSHED WRITING! The Climax is once again thrown into our faces in a blur of a rushed plot. This is also when a huge shitload of cliche's begin popping up in the story. I also noticed a lot of grammar errors by this point (Yours's? Are you fucking kidding me?) and that's when I gave up my attempt to decipher the plot; It's that bad.

Scare Factor - Needless to say, since all the scares are literally thrown at us out of complete nowhere, there is more laughability to this creepypasta than there is anything scary about it.

Originality - This story is a huge shame to me because it personally had some potential. I've read many creepypastas about Shapeshifting Beings that are written really well. Sadly, due to all the firsthand issues in the story, I can't rate Originality at all.

Overall, this is an extremely bad creepypasta, and I suggest that you work on it or read thisbefore you begin writing creepypastas again.

Verdict - 2.5 (Horrifying Quality)