Talk:City Typing Adventure/@comment-24685180-20141231052720

Thus was pretty good King, for a Pasta about a typing it had a dark atmosphere. I like how you added a phrase from the end of the story to the first line I kind if did that in my pasta too I think its a good way to hook someones attention,

There were a few clichés like when it says "Beat the Game or else". But that didn't ruin the story at all. I didn't find any grammar issues so kudos for that. I like the choice of game,  I have never heard of the game which made me feel closer to the protagonist like we were learning the game together. Great Job I rate it 8/10

-Rev