Talk:The Man in the Black Suit/@comment-24685180-20150107052418

This was good and bad.

It was nothing special and I have certainly read pastas with this idea. It was similar to Slenderman in a wat that when he appears something bad is certain to happen.

A few things I liked about this...the picture was pretty creepy it's got a lot of ambiguity to it. As I mentioned this is like Slenderman which is cool but pretty cliché. Especially with the idea that he just stands there its cliché but I think you pulled it off okay. It had good grammar so kudos for that.

A few things I didn't like was it was pretty cliché...As I said you pulled a few of them off but most of them not. The Slenderman like storyline was good but also bad. It just gets old and doesn't work well at some parts. Another thing I didn't like was how short it was..there wasn't much details something you should work on, maybe add if he is dead or maybe he is a long lost relative.

This wasn't bad but it wasn't to bad. Keep on reading good quality pastas and don't overlook details. By the way good job on the grammar there has been alot of pastas with horrid grammar and capitalization. Again good work

-Rev