Talk:Her Final Wish/@comment-11366536-20141210195142

Well, at first it started off fairly straightfoward. A Haunted Game, Game Speaks to you, and blah blah. However, near the end of the story, I was impressed by how you changed the story from a Haunted Game to a Real Life Creepypasta.

Some Problems in this story include the Long and Lengthy story (Which would be fine if it added up to anything), The Moderate amount of cliche's, and like incorrect3 said, the Walls of Text that you should seperate further.

Aside from your story not being entirely scary, but more eerie, it's still better than most people's creepypastas.

So my Final Verdict is 7.5/10.

Anyways, keep my criticism in mind, and try to improve your writing skills so you can make better creepypastas in the future.