Talk:Nintendo's Gamer Girl/@comment-25021327-20140712033941

Not bad, I think this worked on a pretty basic level as a creepypasta. Nothing too groundbreaking, but nothing to bad either. You say that you're new to this, I think this is a fine early attempt :)

Spelling and grammar were pretty good, with only a few issues, the pacing felt fairly consistent, and despite there not being a ton of background, or explanation, I felt it seemed fairly realistic with the right level of suspension of disbelief.

A fairly solid early effort :)