Talk:The Battle of Flight/@comment-25021327-20150520021701

Sorry it took me a bit to get around to reviewing this. First off, congrats on winning the Mindfuck competition! Now onto the review.

I liked this one a lot when I read it the first time, And I went back and read it again before writing this, and I still like it just as much! I think that the reason this one did so well in the contest is that it is a completely self contained and interesting story even without the twist/reveal at the end. This one was just fun to read, and didn;t feel like the typical bait and switch style mindfuck.

Going back and rereading this was fun, as I noticed more details that hand;t registered the first time. The fact that the stars are described as being multicolored instead of white, the offhand comments about the creatures in the ocean, the silly uniforms, these work as clues to the nature of the story, or simply as intriguing visual descriptions.

I felt like this one was paced very well, and it kept me wanting to read. I think that the flashbacks were used effectively to build on the main characters and their background together. My only real complaint here would be the final line. It felt kind of cheesey to me, but I'm honestly not sure how else you could have ended this and made an effective reveal.

So yeah, I like this one, I feel like it deserved to win the first ever Mindfuck Competition :)