Talk:Sour Cola/@comment-25021327-20140907001608

I confess, I like stories like this. Stories of a normal person who is trying to deal with what is at first a normal problem, but later a continually evolving, and bizarre one. It's a nice formula for short stories, since you can pick up right at the action, and you don't necessarily need to resolve anything by the end.

The plot was fairly familiar, and that's okay, but I thought the end got a tad cliché, just the last few sentences. And I, for one never 'forgot about the one' the narrator swallowed. It was in fact in the forefront of my mind for most of the story, and I was wondering if we were going to find out what became of it. Presumably he either passed it already, or it is a foot long writhing in his stomach... somehow unnoticed.

For what it is, I like this one alright :)