Talk:True Self/@comment-6794436-20150312212301

Okay, sorry I took so long to review this one it honestly slipped my mind...

Good: The vocabulary and flow to this piece are quite good, as are the descriptions which give it a bit of a melancholy feel. The pasta is also written so meticulously and beautifully that it somewhat reads like a poem, which is a piece of writing I know you're akin to. There aren't any real formatting errors and this is all around just a very nicely written piece of writing. Oh yes, and the plot itself is quite good, as exploring your inner self is a fear that can be built upon and that many of us truly have.

Bad: This pasta is quite short, which is a shame, because I feel as though this could have been built up or added upon a bit more, and I was really hoping for somewhat of a longer story. There are also numerous errors in grammar such as uneeded apostrophes and spontaneous tense changes that somewhat ruin the cohesiveness of this piece. Another thing that I should mention is that the story itself is a bit confusing in the way it is worded, and even after the ending I still have some confusion brewing through my brain. Although then again, maybe I'm just being an idiot and that's why I can't understand it :P

Verdict: 6/10- I've seen better, I've seen worse, and the lack of length and the grammar/tense changes sorta ruin this story a bit for me. A simple proofreading could fix the grammar aspect and maybe a few things could've been worded differently, but overall it was a decent read, and a very refreshing change from the last few pastas posted recently.

-Incorrect3