Talk:April 12th Mind Story/@comment-25129966-20140712055440/@comment-8470110-20140712174240

As far as cutting the fat goes, this is unfortunately as lean as it's going to get. Some short passages and interactions between Helena and Martin are required so people care about their relationship and such.

I'll try improving the cryptic nature of this story to make it less obvious as well. I did try my best and got the one who gave me this idea to read it countless times to make sure it's up to par. However, if it can still be improved, I'll see what I can do.

As per request, the cause of diagnosis line has been cut. This story will more than likely remain in the state as it is; a short story. However, if it ever becomes more, I'll make sure to keep what you said in mind.

All in all, it's great to know you liked it a lot! A 9.5/10 is an excellent score and it being called amazing is quite the compliment too. I appreciate your kind words and criticisms!