Talk:The Sewer's Secrets/@comment-7706473-20140611113031

Hmn, I'm not entirely sure who the villain is here? They sound just lovely to me. I for one welcome our subterranean overlords! Let's go over this together, and tell me if you think this sounds like some things to keep with you. The pasta is still rather short, and you have a 'vacant' image link that can't be accessed. I'm assuming there's an image meant to link there? Well, for whatever reason, it isn't showing up.

Secondarily, as Cosmic suggested, it's a bit short. That's not necessarily a bad thing - but you generally want to try to have a short and sharp horror in such a story. The narrative feels a bit confused. Let me put it like this - from what I read above, it was hard to tell whether we were supposed to fear or leave the sewer-dwellers in peace, and weirdos like me probably wouldn't mind such sewer-dwellers in the slightest, ahaha. Moss and lichen can be delicious, by the way, though some aren't good for consumption and must be prepared correctly.

My questions to you would be - what is the 'scary' part of the story for you? Either in this pasta, or another one, try focusing on bringing that out and exploring it more.