Talk:This Can't Be Real/@comment-25021327-20140928023120

The style was interesting, I admit I liked the narrative mixed with the degenerating internal thoughts. The length workd for me, I feel that if it had kept up much longer with the dual narration it would have become grating. Style, format, spelling and grammar are okay, although one or two paragraphs got almost of wall of text-y, and you ought to sign your pasta and add categories like Sifen said. If you need help there are pages on the wiki with info on either doing this or contacting someone to help.

As for the story, It's okay. I can only speak for myself and say that I have a hard time imagining the Sprite from BenDrowned stalking me being terribly frightening. Well, if it were actually happening, I guess it would be scary, but I didn't find it spooky to read about it happening to someone else. That said, I can see why the concept of movies like Ringu with Ben inserted as the villain could frighten some people a lot.