Talk:Brother/@comment-17737991-20140207011322

Okay, first, the grammar. So many unneeded semicolons, weirdly placed periods, a few spelling errors... this was awkward and slightly painful to read because of that. There was also no reason (at least from what I can see) to tell us the protagonist has two other siblings when they have nothing to do with the plot. Getting past the grammatical issues, I like the story. The ending was interesting and I'm quite curious about this creature and how it seems to be connected to Simon...