Talk:The Lost Child Of A Man/@comment-7706473-20140603113206

Though the sentances seem oddly disjointed and hard to read - I think it's because they're very short, kind of Hemingway-brusque - that only lends to the feel of extremely surreal unpleasantness this story has. I can't really say I liked it, but it certainly disturbed me. I'm not entirely sure what the ending implied either, and some spoilers ahead for those of you who jump straight to the comments. So - is Alex essentially a seductor of sleep, some kind of nightmare incubus that steals away the dream-children of women in labor to take to his own? That's very unnerving, though not quite as unnerving as the unpleasantness the children go through.

As a story, I don't think I can recommend it entirely; I also can't tell you what needs to be 'cleaned' up as I honestly don't know - the short sentances do enhance the horror of it, and might be less jarring to my eyes when I have less of a splitting headache. There were flaws - both (parenthetized) notes seemed silly and immersion breaking, the aforementioned oddly concise sentences... But in terms of horror, this was very effective, and was an interesting story to wake up to.

Ferns, hiding pathings less taken and symbol of a family that is truly inseperable.