Talk:You are Heartless/@comment-24240632-20130726014951

First let me say that you've got some good ideas here. With that said let's begin.

Description: 7.5/10 - It was fairly decent and only has a handful of grammar or spelling errors.

Plot: 7/10 - It was actually a really good idea that just wasn't executed quite perfect. The way the game was introduced was new and not cliched and the ending was interesting. On the other hand a bit in it gets pretty bad with the realistic pictures and blood. It also felt like you were building up to something as small as being arrested.

Entertainment: 7/10 - I was really into this pasta at the beginning and I wanted to know if something happened yet it surmounted into something so small that I felt like it was unfinished.

Overall: 7.25/10 - Good. Not bad, but it does have it's flaws and they do show unfortanutley.

"A pasta I really wanted to love, but I just couldn't because of the way it was all pieced together."

- Marcus