Talk:Touhou: Curse of the Blossom tree/@comment-24082398-20160815222715

I don't have any prior experience playing Touhou, and I don't really like the genre it's from. Therefore I don't really know the whole mythos behind the game, like who the characters are or who has relationships with who. I don't know if everyone hates one another or if everyone loves one another. Anyways, into the review.

What was good? Well, I suppose it's good that it's not a wall of text or anything. It's also a pasta about an unusual game; when I think 'creepypasta' I don't think Touhou. I have to give you props there. Unfortunately, that's all the good I can find.

Onto the bad. Oh, onto the bad. Where to begin? The grammar was atrocious. Some things were capitalized when they didn't need to, some things weren't capitalized when they needed to be... punctuation was almost nonexistent, sentence fragments were everywhere... The word choice was also really odd. Some words felt like they weren't in the right tense, and that really shatters immersion. If only the grammar was horrible, this story might be passable, but that's not all. Cliches were everywhere. A friend giving you a weird download link, a creepy startup, the game crashing by itself, blood rivers, characters crying and screaming in pain... in the first half of the story alone I counted over 15 cliches. Seriously. I went back to tally them up, and I got well over 15. That's unacceptable, especially for a story as short as this. There wasn't a single original thing I could find here. It relied on overused, tired, run-down cliches that are more laughable than scary anymore and even then didn't succeed with a generous crutch.

All in all this story merits a 2. Bad writing, bad story choices, horrible cliches, and an odd subject matter make this a magnificent flop in my opinion. This story is in serious need of some cleanup.