Talk:HetaOni's Dark Secret/@comment-9847798-20130729042850

Well Prince, I gotta say that while this seemed to be a little bit rushed, it was still pretty well written. I understood what was going on, and while it wasn't creepy, there is still a great deal that could be added to make it creepy.

So, this is a great start to your story, keep it up because you can make it even better!