Talk:Life/@comment-24.204.196.244-20140102210441/@comment-8470110-20140103001407

In all honesty, this pasta isn't half bad. The concept was cool and the detail was fairly well done. However, there were mistakes such as pointless clichés and bad pacing. This story does need work to reach its full potential but as it is now, it's a decent pasta. In my opinion, it's a solid 5/10. Corrections can be made to make it better but it's alright the way it is now.