Talk:The Monster/@comment-26480939-20160808204556

Euhhh... just what Pokémon is this supposed to be about? It kind of sounds like it's describing an Aggron, but I'm not sure.

Also, one minor spelling error near the start:

I noticed the ever darkening, hazy sky begging to fall into onix black.

Are you sure you don't mean onyx black instead? Also, fix that begging into beginning. That looks pretty bad. There's also some capitalization problems that need fixing.

I'm sorry but the cliché blood and gore really ruins this. 3/10 Desperately needs major improvement.