Talk:The White Rose Ritual/@comment-4332975-20150711104910

I don't think this is bad, per se, but I don't particularly care for it. The instructions seem to casual and straightforward. The explanation is a little too direct. Also there's describing it as "my ritual", which implies that the OP created it, when what you really want for a ritual is to give it the sense of being ancient and powerful, not newly created and "Hey guize i came up with a magik an it totes iz real!" (no offence intended).

Also, as a nitpick, I'd say that if it were me writing it, I'd say rules about the items should be listed with the items. For one thing, in a ritual, stalling and trying to scare people off with dire warnings halfway through is pretty much expected. For instance, rather than asking for "A candle.", I would probably have listed, "A candle - this must be a plain candle, at least 9" long, undyed and unscented. Preferably tallow or beeswax, though this isn't as important, but there must be nothing mixed into the wax. Keep the candle wrapped in a sheet of wax paper until ready to use, so that no dust or debris gets into the wax." Super-specific instructions like this help add weight to the importance of each step, as well as acting as padding to stretch out the ritual. On the other hand, specific warnings should generally be kept vague as to exactly what will happen if they aren't heeded, implying consequences rather than stating them. Often, it's good to make the instructions on how to avoid those consequences puzzling or nonsensical as well, since this makes the whole thing more mysterious, and also has the benefit of drawing on the reader's own brain to suspend disbelief and fill in the gaps.