Talk:Luigi Forgotten/@comment-24240632-20130719024022

First let me say that this has pros and cons to it. With that said let's start.

Description: 6.5/10 - It was okay, but it felt vague at moments. More description could've made this way creepier. You also didn't have to many spelling and grammar errors.

Plot: 5/10 - Not awful, but it's been done before. Fortunately you added a little spice to it with the end part and the beginning was okay with me because no one just gave it to you and ran off.

Entertainment: 5.5/10 - It was sort of fun to read, but if you get far enough into the story you'll realise that the whole plot becomes boring and cliched. The only thing keeping this from being a five is the end which was anice touch.

Overall: 5.75/10 - Mediocre. I've seen this done many times and it really could've been much creepier if the detail was a little better described and the plot was more unique. Keep trying though!

"A story that has it's moments, but is nowhere near perfect. The end will creep you out though."

- Marcus