Talk:Orphaned Donkey Kong Jr./@comment-25021327-20150823224003

This was a quick read, and I think it pretty much does what it sets out to do. It does have its cliché elements throughout (hacked-used game, dark title, pixelated gore), but that didn't bother me to much while I was reading. And I can appreciate how this was attempted to be grounded in reality and was a tale that isn't too far beyond belief.

The choice of game here does help this story from being totally lost in the mix of gaming pastas. I haven;t ever read a DK jr. pasta, so that's kind of neat. Aside from that and the PETA theed ending, this one didn;t stand out too much to me. I can totally see how the ending works with this story, but for e personally, it felt a little forced or unnatural or something. I'm not exactly sure why, because it isn;t a bad plot device, it just didn't jive with me at the time I read this.

Spelling and grammar seemed fine, and the style was pretty good (though sometimes I find it annoying when I'm reading a pasta, and the narrator feels compelled to tell me that this story isn't like all those other creepypastas you've read!). But for what this was, I think it worked. Nothing revolutionary, but It was a quick read and felt focused to me.