Talk:Revolution/@comment-9281274-20140205080654

Since everyone has been commenting on this pasta I think I should throw in my two cents as well.

For starters congrats on getting the pasta of the month award. That's pretty cool in my eyes.

The story itself is nicely set up with a couple clues as to what's going on but not too many at a time. I especially like the 1984 set up what with the mind control and suppression going on.

However, at times it feels like the story was too inpsired by 1984. I mean the opressive government and revolutionary protagonist is one thing, but to have an intimidating figure that's rarely seen by everyone, police who attack idependant thinkers, and an ending where the protagonist is forced to become an avid supporter of the opressive world?

That wasn't even original when 1984 did it! XD

Also the world doesn't feel developed enough. There was a lot of potential to incoporate other famous doctor Seuss stories into this. Hopefully if you make a sequel, you'll be able to develop the world more.

All in all, I give this story a 7/10. It was brilliantly set up, had an engaging protagonist, not to mention having a rather shocking ending, but was bogged down by being very heavily inspired by 1984 and not developing the world enough.