Talk:The Amazing World of Gumball: The Grieving/@comment-6794436-20140722033228

Ok, so I thought this was going to be another crappy TV show pasta, but boy was I wrong! I thought the pasta was scary, well not to me, but I could see it being scary to others. (Don't worry, I just don't scare easy!) That is, until I saw that it was copyright 2001. I don't know why but that sent a shiver down my spine! After that point, I was hooked, and sort-of scared! The only weak part was the twitter post, in my opinion. I think you could have ended it with Ben saying that nobody should have EVER found that, and having him never respond to her again. Also, I know you tried to leave an implied ending with the brother, but you could have at least given us some closure!

Right now I am wondering if the person who killed the hated guy's son, was actually the narrator's father. That was what I got from it at least!

Anyways, that was a great pasta. I love your word choice and pacing in the story. There were a few cliches, but all pastas have them. I'd give it an 8.5/10 Incorrect3 03:32, July 22, 2014 (UTC) A Great Pasta