Talk:The Cold Lead Killer/@comment-24181739-20140701042157

Okay, this is just.... Ugh! I expected FAR better from you! D:

Okay, first thing - the pacing is terrible! I can't follow it because there is no introduction to the story, since it wasn't long enough to make one. Seriously, this pasta has the opposite problem the second chapter of And Hell Will Follow me has. This one is barebones, while that one is full of padding. Even the title pisses me off, making it look really cliche. The cliches, oh, god! They're so damn bad! Killers are cliche, Omegle is cliche, video diaries are cliche, everything! EVERYTHING in this pasta is a cliche that has been done SO many times before, and FAR better!

2.75 / 7.33, 37.5%, or an F.

This one makes me wanna kill someone!