Talk:Art/@comment-4332975-20140516022031

The story seemed a little contrived and rushed, and suffers a bit from sometimes stilted wording. In spite of that, I think that the concept behind it is good, and with a bit more polish it could really work. However, one thing that I would pick out about this is that it seems to have the start of a good build-up, and then just fall off. The hooded figure isn't really given any reason to be there, nor did you do anything with the character of the therapist, other than to have them be a tacked-on afterthought at the end, mentioned in passing and largely irrelevant, other than to change a "You're next!" ending into an "I'm next (then maybe you)!" ending. Overall, I'd say this is a good start to a story, but could do with some revisions, and the addition of a second, and possibly even a third act, to really bring all the loose ends together.