Talk:Porcelain House/@comment-6794436-20150404185339

I was really hoping that this would be something excellent...

Good: This was written quite well, as it used a lot of great vocabulary and it had some decent length. The descriptions were also great, and I could really picture what was going on in my head. The story also had some great buildup, and it left me wondering what would happen next which made the story engaging.

Bad: There were a few grammar errors that I saw, such as the word "adorned" being used when the proper usage is just, "adorn". There were also a few redundant sentences and some missing quotation marks at the end. My biggest gripe with this story, however, is the climax when the narrator gets into the house. It feels so rushed and uncreepy. It was sort of like this: Narrator walks into weird house, sees weird man, breaks vase, man gets a bit distraught and shoots a gun. This scene wasn't creepy at all, and I would've liked to see a better description of the man. The story was building up to be quite good, but the climax itself felt rushed, uncreepy, and horribly executed.

Verdict: 5.5/10- This was written quite well, but there were a few grammar errors and most importantly, the climax was terrible. This really could've been something special if it was executed a bit better, but as of now, it stands at a 5.5/10. I'd recommend you read the New Writer Guidelines, as they will aid you in all of your future writing endeavors.

-Incorrect3