Talk:'Happy Birthday' from Youtube/@comment-10611261-20131127194051

My problem with most pastas is how many of them end with "and then I jumped and died", etc. and it's funny how they didn't even TRY to explain as to how they're telling the story. And isn't that kind of a time paradox, telling yourself in the past to kill yourself? But, I decided to clean it up a bit anyway. I have to say, it's a good first attempt (well, if it IS a first attempt) and I just wish you luck for your future in story writing.