Talk:Don't Leave Me Behind/@comment-5675310-20140705023525

Don't Leave Me Behind to read this.

Description: 5.0/10 - Writing for the most part here is fairly mediocre with a few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that really detracts too much from the story. Nothing's described all that well, and some sentences are just plain comical the more you go over it. The sentence strucure here all seems the same, making it an oddly bland read throughout, while when you try to describe whatever happens to be occuring at that point in time, you use words that are a little too simple for something that's supposed to be so different and odd in a way. The writing here is nothing special, and makes its mistakes. It's just plain mediocre, and that's it.

Plot: 4.0/10 - Everything here seems messy. Sure, there's some originality here, but it just feels so rushed and half baked. You need to take a little more time to flesh out the events that occur here and give the bear bones a little meat. And don't get me started on the ending.

Entertainment: 4.0/10 - Meh.

Pros and Cons:

+ Few grammatical errors

+ Originality

- Feels Rushed/Half Baked

- Writing is boring

Overall: 4.3/10 - Bad.

"There's some originality here, shame it all went to waste."

- Marcus