Talk:Tubby Bye Bye/@comment-25021327-20160329023924

Hmmm, I'm not sure how I feel about this one. I had some trouble while reading it, as I felt there were some run-on sentences, or spots where thngs felt like thye were worded strangely a sentence like

'' "I’ve tried on all the names I can remember the company having looking it up on the way back machine and on google, but I never did." ''

Just reads oddly to me, and feels like it's missing a verb. Toward the end, there were also spots where it was switching back and forth between past and present tense.

In any case, it still felt pretty competantly written. The plot itself felt relatively standard to me, normal haunted game type stuff, and that's not always a bad thing. I liked the descriptions of the gameplay, though a little more detail of what the graphics looked like would have helped me envision it a bit better.

One thing that came across silly to me was the ending where the narrator leaves the room to come back and find that a mysterious black car is speeding away, its passengers having stolen the games. t just seemed pretty out-there to me in a story that felt like it was trying to stay fairly plausible.

Anyhow, a Teletubbies game pasta is pretty neat and there were some things I liked here, but, just personally, I think it could have used a little finesse.