Talk:I'll Never Be the Same/@comment-24400536-20140113082234

For a first pasta, this is fairly good all things considered; the blood was used in a sparing fashion to signify pain along with the cast and the bruns and.....really most of the things acting up with the Umbreon in the story. It's a very unique concept that should be explored furture and in greater detail, but for a first job it does well to describe itself. The pacing was a bit too fast, there was no suspense, no fear, no buildups of emotion. You could hoesntly tell what was going to happen and all in all this is a sadpasta. It's heartbreaking and emotional which I will give it up points for that, it made me feel like punching the Sylveon. Apologies if my review is disjointed I'm a bit sleepy.

This has real potential and real emotion tied into it, it's a fine beginners pasta and a good read, if not a bit short. If redone on the principle and gone into more depth, it would make a great addition to the pokepasta library. But it'll still be a sadpasta overall.

6.7/10 ^_^