Talk:The Mountain Man/@comment-6794436-20150102163920

Well, at least it's a good mindfuck...

First I'll start with the good. The mindfuck is developed very well, and I truly wasn't expecting this to be a Portal pasta. Another good thing about this pasta is that you actually attempted a Portal pasta, something that very few people dare to do.

Now, for the bad: The story itself isn't  very creepy, but that isn't too bad as I expect that from most gaming Mindfuck pastas. Another problem this pasta has is the bland writing style. You sort of just tell the story and don't use any extravagant adjectives to do so, if that makes any sense. There are a few questionable adjectives such as "skulking" which I have no idea what that means, although I think you may have meant 'sulking'.

Verdict: 6.5/10- This had an amazing Mindfuck, but the rest of the story was a bit meh.

-Incorrect3