Talk:Worst Page on the Wiki/@comment-5358960-20130529131739

You should focus less on describing your environments. I love how it tied into the psychological breakdown of Anna, though. The vivid imagery worked perfectly for that; however, describing every crack in the floor before something significant happens is a little overdone. I also love the eerie feeling the ending gives off. "Exactly what IS the yellow?". It leads me to believe the pasta may be true. Overall a fantastic job. I give it a 10/5