Talk:Robbie/@comment-6794436-20150318214751

Well, this is better than the norm, but is it good.... meh...

Good: This is written fairly well, with great flow and vocabulary which makes this a pleasure to read. There aren't many typos, but the few that do show up don't take away from the story in any way. Also, of course, this doesn't break any of the wiki's rules, so that's good.

Bad: For this pasta, there aren't too many bad things about it, but the few things that I have to say ruin the pasta for me. For one thing, this isn't creepy at all, and yes, I know it isn't really supposed to be, but there always should be at least an attempt. Also, this is really an obvious twist that I at least, saw coming from a mile away. Surprisingly, cats on catnip is a topic that is used a lot. The real ticker was when you mention the narrator's "rooommate" breaking a vase, of which really just is a dead giveaway.

Verdict: 4.5/10- This was a fairly written pasta, but it is a terrible mindfuck and it isn't really very creepy. You should definitely check out the New Writer Guidelines, and that's really solely because of the fact that you are new. Based off of your writing skills, you don't really need it, but I'd recommend you do as it will aid you in all of your future writing endeavors!

-Incorrect3