Talk:Shifting Memories/@comment-25021327-20141119045658

I liked this one :) I thought it nicely told the tragic story of a man reaching the end of his rope, though I didn't feel that it became heavy handed at any point, which I enjoyed. Our empathy (or perhaps sympathy) for this character grew organically, without the author bashing the reader over the head with how terribly we are supposed to feel for the guy.

This is sadly a story that I feel many could relate to. By the time I hade gotten to the end, I had known what the "key" was going to be revealed as, and it made the pasta have a more sincere feel to it than having anything overtly supernatural happen.

The only complaints I have relate to the wording of some parts. A few phrases just didn't feel quite right, not that I didn't understand the meaning, just that the way they were presented didn't eel natural. The only example I can think of off the top of my head is ''"clawing for oxygen." '' As I said, I know what the term is referring to, but It is just an odd word choice.

But On the whole, I did quite like this. It was short-ish and mored along at a steady pace. While the creepyness is definitely here, for me this was more like a darkly tragic tale.