Thread:Urkelbot666/@comment-26268104-20150826235822/@comment-25021327-20150915213054

Well, I still think that the rest of the plot works at least on the basis of it beng an idea with potential. As long as it is done with time and care given to make the reader feel the emotions and struggles that the narrator is going through, and what drives him to do what he does. The homemade lab in the garage, and the deep-web stuff seems pretty interesting, and feasible.

I understand that you likely want to have Denis experiment with animals/people/things that have the kind of cancer that his father has. But he could also do his work with cell samples to start with, then when he has something that seems to work, he could start trying to do his proceedure on any kinds of animals, working up to humans (whether they have cancer or not) just to see if the body can withstand the treatment. If this was the case, and he didn't absolutely need animal subject with cancer, then it would be easier for him to get animals by ust stealing them, using strays, etc.

Of course, the animal parts aren;t entirely necessary, I just thought that it would make sense for him to work up to experimenting on humans instead of just starting out that way.