Talk:April 12th Mind Story/@comment-7706473-20140711094412

Haha, you know - this is going to sound so silly, but I had started to assume that our narrator, Martin, was the hallucination and Helena was the... Hallucinator? I'm not quite sure what the word for that'd be. Regardless, my only nitpicks were the minor; someone truly schizophrenic will rarely, if ever, accept the diagnosis of someone else. Indeed, many such individuals have some doubts about the classification as a reactive symptom/mental illness in the first place - though, then again, it's never shown what Martin's reaction is, and it seems like he was mentally 'bracing' himself throughout the story. The only other complaint? I wish *wikia* had better formatting options then simply one story/one page. Longer pasta deserve to have flippable pages, darnit!

Everything else is simply excellent. Well put together, well planned, and simply captivating. And unlike some, I mark UP for longer stories. Literary pasta is the best pasta, and I write because I like reading and like words; is it such a shock that people like that enjoy a good long read, too? Hahahaha - but truly, excellent work; one that could be read as tragic and hopeful at the same time, depending on the view of the reader, while playing with their emotions and building up to a gut-punchingly good finisher, even if you were following the clues (er, even a little off-the-chart, as I was) beforehand.