Talk:The Magnificent Seven...Game/@comment-25021327-20160129040019

I've read this through a couple times now, and I thnk I can make a fair assessment. Let's see. I really like the concept quite a bit. It's so simple, and yet holds so much potential. I like the use of a simple website game as the catalyst for the events.

The tone here felt a little odd to me at times, as it felt like it switched back and forth between being semi realistic and plausible, and having a surreal feel to it. I guess that the fact that certain elements go unexplained does lend it some more surrealism, Things like hacking the website game, and the way this one ends give it a certain plausibiity, whereas having a kid mysteriously develop autism go pretty deep into the unexplained and supernatural.

The pace here was pretty swift, which keeps the reader going. That was good for me, personally, as I'm not sure I would have wanted to read a very long story about all these terrible things happening to a person. Which brings me to another point I wanted to make, and this is totally a personal preference, and I can fully see why others wouldn;t agree with me here, but overall, this one comes across very mean-spirited, and regardless of how well it is done, that can ake me enjoy a piece less depending on my mood at the time of reading. I imagine that you indeed wanted a brutal and gritty, somewhat detached feel for this one, and if so, then it certainly worked, but for whatever reason it didn't sit well with me. So again, that's not really a valid criticism, more of an opinion.

There were a few parts here that I found a bit confusing, like the house suddenly having seven TVs, or seven additions, that aren't physically possible(?). It goes back a little to the surreal tone I mentioned. There were one or two typos, but nothing very distracting.

So this one s a pretty brutal and unforgiving piece that I think will appeal to a lot of readers. The concept is great and ripe for exploration. The story was short and kept me reading through, which I also think people will like about this one. My main issue was that it felt a little unfocussed at times. I hope I didn;t come across dickish or harsh in this comment. I'm glad I read this one :)