Talk:Legend of Zelda Ocarina of Darkness/@comment-29588684-20160430151209/@comment-28073721-20160430220759

You got a point. I should have left a sentance or two about the other kids on the bus. I'll probably edit the story and add something about the others. Also Jack Daniels is not a beer, it's liquor, but it's not important to me what the protagonist drinks, so long as he's a slight alcoholic and not a full blown drunk. I got the feeling this was better than Gorfest. That was just suppose to nothing more than just insanity and murder, not simply creepy on it's own and there was no better place I could think of than an asylum. It was inspired by the t.v. show American Horror Story Asylum season 2 so that was why I wrote it. In this stroy I kinda slacked of a bit when I had no more ideas and the only thing I could think of was adding Major's Mask and making Gannondorf looked like an anti-hero instead of the main villian. I am thinking of making a sequal in order to remove the idea that Major's Mask was ever there at all. It was cliche and it's been done before and I shouldn't have done it, but I'm not sure I will and just let be just a stand alone story and move on from there. I don't really care about Gorefest so if you want it you can have it. Rewrite the story if you like or just use it as an example of how bad a story can really be to teach other writters of how a pasta should not be written. Anyway I'm glad you liked the story and I could tell this one had promise to it. Thanks a lot.