Talk:The Viral Game/@comment-26480939-20160814171449

I'm impressed with this 'first work'. As this is based on a fictional game, and not one that exists in our world, some of my usual CP rating criteria can't be used.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling: This is certainly readable enough. That's good. A few minor spelling errors ('lowing', which I presumed was meant to be 'glowing') and a misspelling of GODDESS's name at one part, but that doesn't affect this score too badly. 9.5/10

Scare Factor: This is tough to call. Nothing jumped out as particularly scary to me, but the side-effects of losing to the various opponents being based on actual computer problems gets this a pretty respectable score of 8/10.

Shock Factor: No usage of any of my pet peeves in this category at all. Wonderful. 1/10 here for again using actual computer problems as side-effects of losing to the various opponents.

Cliché usage: The only real cliché I noticed was the whole 'protagonist continues playing despite odd circumstances' one, which is pretty mild for a cliché IMO. 1/10

Meat: This is another one that's hard to call, as this is a fictional game. And I'm not terribly familiar with the UT/Quake style of FPS games. So, in the interest of being fair, I'll give this a N/A/10.

Overall, this is very good. I certainly enjoyed reading this pasta, and I feel as this kind of story has great potential. Just be sure to use Spell Check and proofread, and you'll do fine in my book.

Rating: I give this a 9.5/10 Very excellent, only very minor improvements needed.