Talk:Amber/@comment-25021327-20141206175342

I mostly agree with Sif. This one isn't really bad, but it feels very familiar and formulaic to me. It has a lot of the often used plot points (although not quite as random as some other pastas) the yard sale, the weird game that communicates with the owner, the strange dream, and the news report. None of these are dealbreakers, but they make the story feel sort of cliche.

I understand how the yard sale/woman selling the game fit in to the story. I got the impression that there was some history between the woman, and who/whatever "Amber" is. I read this as Amber being maybe a spirit put into the game who wants revenge, but then why would the woman sell the game in the first place? Arrogance?

There may be some more avenues to be explored here, but as it is, this one feels kind of familiar. Maybe another pass at proofreading too. Though I'm not sure what exactly MewTwo would look like normally (it's described as having green as opposed to red) I feel that the image was a nice touch. It's not bad, and there may be some more potential here, but as it is, it feels pretty average.