Talk:Casual Mode/@comment-25021327-20150903182224

3-September-2015- Adding a Needs Work tag here. This story feels a little bit uninspired to me, with the elements of having the game randoly do a perma-death followed by the in game characters being upset with the player. I feel like this is something that has been explored many times already. It's in a game that isn;t written about often though, so that's kind of original.

The other main issue I had here was that this page (At least on my machine) is formatted really screwy. It's like it has narrow margins, and unnecessary double spacing between every line. It made it kind of hard for me to read, harder than if it were in the standard, paragraphed format. There were a few spelling and wording issues here which could be taken care of, and I noted many uncapitalized letters I in this. I as a pronoun ought to always be capitalized.

As this is now a Needs Work page, it will face deletion in about 9 days if it has not been deemed adequately improved pending another review. Please take some of this time to work on some of the issues explained to give your story a better chance of not being deleted :)