Talk:January 7th, 2013/@comment-5675310-20140208202822

January 7th, 2013, huh? Guess I'm a little too late... Woops.

Description: 7.0/10 - There are a few problems with this aspect of the story. While things were vaguely described and felt it was written in a rushed manner, which I applaud you for, considering the person writing it is supposedly running low on time; there are still a few missteps along the way. There are multiple grammatical errors, but nothing that detracts too much from the story, and you don't need to add thing after whatever you're trying to say. If you don't know the exact words, then look them up, it is the internet. One more thing I would like to talk about is the ending. While most stories can't do the cliffhanger ending where everything just suddenly stops and the final word is never finished, you've done an excellent job making it feel rather believable. I think that a lot of pastas can learn from this in that sense.

Plot: 5.5/10 - It's less of a story than a vague explanation of the past. Sometimes this can be good, and at others, not so much. When it comes to this pasta, it's not bad, but it feels a little too cryptic. A pasta that did this quite well, where not everything isn't explained, is one call "The Disappearance of Ashley, Kansas", a personal favorite. I suggest you go read or listen to the pasta, because I think that it could really help you out here.

Entertainment: 6.0/10 - Short and sweet.

Pros and Cons:

+ Good execution of ending

+ Pacing matches story perfectly

- Very vague story

Overall: 6.1/10 - Okay.

"It's interesting and a great prototype, but it misses so much potential."

- Marcus