Talk:Grin/@comment-17737991-20141205112240/@comment-17737991-20141207164513

Alright, it's actually much better! Though, now in the second paragraph it says "The photo previously mentioned is taken at this stage" though at that point, no photo had been mentioned yet.

There's still some grammatical problems too, like misused contractions, double spaces, tense inconsistencies, and run on sentences. I can fix these for you if you'd like.