Talk:A Christmas I'll Never Forget/@comment-5025667-20131223150903

And you're the author of Broken Memory and Horizon among others? This is a huge step up, and I knew something as great as this was bound to pop up from you.

Our homicidal manic was quite interesting to read. Joyously insane in his own right, and pretty entertaining as well with his fixed fascination of Christmas. The one problem I have with him, and the few I have with the story, was that his side of the story never quite resolves. I understand that you don't want to over-explain everything and leave a lot up to the reader, but there were some features that should be. Our protagonist never questions things any rational human would: If the attraction was so close to him how could he never have heard of it? Who is this man and how does he know where I live, and know who I am by name? Our narrator really irked me, he felt too plastic and unfeeling above all else.

In a way, our jollier-than-thou fellow reminds me a lot of the Mickey Mouse from Abandoned By Disney in a lot of aspects in the sense that in the original story the thing at the end was never quite explained, but A Few Suggestions answers or gives clues to that without ruining the original (which I never liked to be honest). A prequel for this story, perhaps?

Being taken out of the immersion does knock this back a bit, but the detail is what really stood out to me and is the highlight of this. Everything is decribed in a way where it would be hard not to see this world created before you. I would go as far to say that it was beautiful even. Maybe a little repetitive and maybe others would point this out, but please, don't change this. 8.5/10