Talk:Warcraft III: Army of Darkness/@comment-25021327-20141114144421

The main issue I have with this story is with some of the spelling, and the ways certain things are worded. I found those factors to be smewhat distracting. In the beginning you mention the "new faction I was talking about" but you haven't really told us abbout it yet. I assume this factin is the Army of Darkness, but that isn't quite clarified at that point. Also, we aren't really told anything about the Army of Darkness regarding what they look or sound like.

As for the story, it's pretty standard. The modded game that acts strange and overly-violent. However, I did like that this story pretty much keeps things in the realm of possibility. The game never addressed the player by name, It doesn't do anything too drastic to the well-being of the player or their computer. Also the mod doesn't mysteriously vanish from the website when the narrator goes back there. I thought that as a whole the plot was pretty believable.

The story isn't revolutionary, but it's not awful. The execution could use a little cleaning up though, some proofreading and spell-checking. Maye slow the pace down a bit and add more descriptions.