Talk:Lobby 126/@comment-24082398-20160715223924

This was definitely an interesting read. From the start I already liked it because I have a soft spot for stories that are told through chatroom messages and comment chains. I think they're a really underrated way to tell a story because it leads to more humanity and raw storytelling than having some uptight narrator. The grammar and such was alright as well, and word choice was pretty good. The actual story intruiged me a bit; how did these people know one another? Why did they continue to talk to one another if their relationships, from what we've seen, were fairly antagonistic to one another? Furthermore, what happened to Sam and Bit? We're left on a sort of cliffhanger with no solid, conclusive evidence on what happened to them. Chris seems like an eery figure but we don't have any leads that he might be doing all this. The premise is very interesting but I feel it's squandered on an ending that's too open-ended for us to figure out. I could be wrong, I'm not terribly great at making inferences...

Overall, I'd give this a 6/10. It has a very interesting concept, very alarming story, but flat ending that drags it all down. Nice work, nevertheless!