Talk:Bedtime Stalker/@comment-24240632-20130729153229

First let me say that this was very interesting. With that said let's begin.

Description: 9.5/10 - Even though the detail wasn't anything amazing, but I feel as though it would be hard to detail much from the point of view which really does fit the story by the way. There were only a few grammar mistakes too.

Plot: 8/10 - I never actually read The Ombra by you, but it feels sort of like a creepier slenderman, which isn't bad, but the whole "stalker" kind of thing is getting old. What saves this however is the way you get into peoples heads by saying you know what there fears were and are by stating some common fears around the world.

Entertainment: 8.5/10 - I was legitametely creeped out by this pasta. There were times when it just seemed like you were stating facts and throwing out words over and over. It hurt the story, but also helped it a little.

Overall: 8.75/10 - Great. This story could be so much more if there was a little meat added to it, but as it stands it's a great pasta!

"Something to read alone in the dark"

- Marcus