Talk:Sonic the Hedgehog: The Craving of Death/@comment-6794436-20141231162828

Hey, a decent creepypasta... it's a Sonic pasta too?!?! It's a miracle!

First, the good. I was surprised upon reading this, as I expected a whole lot of grammar errors coming from a new user like yourself, but you proved me wrong and you didn't have too many typos. Another reason why you pleasantly surprised me, is because this pasta isn't riddled with cliches like many other Sonic pastas are. I also must applaud you for actually adding categories, something many users never do.

Now, for the bad. Well, the pasta could use a bit more spacing inside paragraphs, as it is somewhat harder to read like it is now. Another thing, you should probably put your signature below the pasta, not right next to it. One last gripe I have with the story, is the fact that it isn't very creepy.

Verdict: 6/10- It's a decent pasta, but it could use a fix in formatting and it could be a bit creepier. Also, if you want to improve your writing a bit, and since you're a new user, you might want to take a look at the New Writer Guidelines, as they can definitely help with any problems you have with writing.

-Incorrect3