Talk:Ami/@comment-8198649-20140211233923

To be honest, your constant linking to this kind of turned me away from this, but i kept my word and read it.

Its pretty well written, but the pace seems a little fast. You set up a lot just for a very quick ending. It needs more to it; his inner conflict, which you put so much build up on, was solved in practically a few minutes. I suggest you add some more to your next piece (and perhaps not link so much to the chat, its kind of spam.)

I'd give it a 7/10