Talk:Undertale - No Mercy (Revised)/@comment-25021327-20160907031336

I enjoyed reading this one. I'm surprised that there haven;t been more Undertale pastas around here. The way the fanbase has exploded, I anticipated dozens of UT related creepypastas of... "Varying" quality. But anyway on to this one.

I thought that the story here was pretty good, somewhat standard as far as haunted game pastas go, but it did a good job of setting itself up in its established reality and keepng itself there, if that makes any sense. The cliche of having a game with missing monsters and enemy encounters doesn't feel liek a cliche here, as the nature of the genocide route of Undertale lends itself to that environment. The same goes for the way that the characters speak to the narrator. We know what they are upset about, it isn't just this random "You are gonna pay for what you did to us!" that is seen is so many other pastas.

The element about the download link being hidden inside the game's code felt a little convenient, but it still worked. And I was pretty much willing to suspend disbelief that no one else had found it yet.

I felt like the writing was pretty good here, clear and concise. Though someone who hasn;t played, or isn;t familiar with Undertale might find it difficult to follow along here with some of the references to graphics, characters and text. But this one is written for those who have played through or seen all the enndings of the game, so that's not a big issue. (I was a little confused at the end though, I don;t really understand the significance of the e-mail addresses listed in the message) There were a few spots where I thought I saw a grammar or spelling error, but it didn;t distract me at all, and I can;t even remember for sure, so it mustn't have been that big an issue x3

In all, I think that this one does a pretty good job at what it intends. It's a solid gaming pasta about a good game that isn;t overdone yet (Somehow!). It doesn;t break a whole lot of new ground, but the fact that it effectively uses creepypasta elements in a game like Undertale without getting cringy or silly is pleasant. I'm glad I gave this one a read :)