Talk:Our Childhood/@comment-24240632-20130812045112

First let me say that I think that the idea here was good. With that said let's begin.

Description: 7/10 - It was good, but nothing special really. Sometimes it felt vague and sometimes it was written rather well. You had some (being very careful with my words this time) grammatical errors, but nothing really noticable unless you analyze it thouroughly.

Plot: 6.75/10 - It was good, but was it something new to me? No. There was the little cliche of some old man giving the kid a game, but you managed to make it interesting. The thing I didn't like about this was the way the mindf*ck was executed. I personally saw it coming, but that's just me. I also didn't like the pacing because for me it felt too rushed. One last thing... I'm pretty sure my parents wouldn't rush me to a mental facility after something like that, but I think that's part of it feeling rushed.

Entertainment: 8.5/10 - I was actually really entertained while reading this! It was gripping and intense in moments, but once I figured out the mindf*ck I could just see it all coming which sort of ruined it for me.

Overall: 7.5/10 - Good. This was a good pasta with a good idea that just wasn't executed perfectly.

"Nothing new, but if you're looking for a good quick read then this is it."

- Marcus