Talk:Collect for Christ/@comment-25021327-20150829235446

I think that this is a fun little creepypasta. It's very short, but makes good use of that aspect. I tend to write verrrrry long and drawn out stories so I can appreciate when one comes along that is fast paced and short. This one feels like it has that kind of energy about it.

As I mentioned, the pacing here is quick, but I didn't feel like too many things were glossed over, all the main elements need for the story to work were included, and it has a fairly satisfying feel to it. It's kind of silly and campy, but that seems to me as if it was fully intended, so again, I can appreciate that :)

I'd recommend readers to read this one twice, to get the full effect. There are little clues and details that add to the story, which are easy to miss on the first readthrough, when the tale is likely stringing the reader along at its own pace.

I had a few issues with the story, that are more like nitpicks than real complaints. Now, reading this, I felt that the protagnist was dealing with a vampire, due to the ways the protagonist harms her, and the way she looks, is tired in the morning etc. (could have been anothe kind of creature or demon too, I suppose) I felt that it was strange that such a creature would agree to go to a home littered with religious artiafacts, even in the face of keeping up appearances or feeding. Why would she bother going someplace that would at best make her uncomfortable, and at worse, harm her? Also, should have told the narrator not to do italian... what with the whole garlic issue x3

But again, if one is willing to take the leap of faith to go along with anything in this story, it's tough to fault it for what could be perceived as plot holes. This isn't one to be overly analyzed, it's one to read through a few times, and have a chuckle. And I think it succeeds  in that respect :)