Talk:I Never Played Metroid Before.../@comment-11079349-20140313041630

what do I think of this? well, what am I supposed to think of this. not to sound mean, but nothing happened worthy of calling this a creepypasta.

Ok, so one thing worth noting is that nothing even remotely creepy happened. all that happened was "OMG got a modded game." so calling this a creepypasta is kind of a waste.

Now, I'm going to adress the title. The only reason I read this was because the title was, to put it lightly, boring. That may have been intended, but when the title is boring, people expect the story to be boring. Try to liven it up a little. Then again, the title seems to show what's in the story. that is; not much. (just a short joke, dont take that seriously.)

Ok, praise time. I liked two things here. the build up was pretty well made, though it kinda flat-lined near the point where the ghost/demon/scary protagonist was supposed to show up. next was the spelling and grammar. you used both extremely well exept for one thing. that one thing is that you were writing in the past tense for most of the pasta, but then sorta forgot as you explained things and started writing in the present tense.

Finally, the plot. what is there to say of it? it was short, unexciting, and almost good, but lacks the punch it requires. I will say, however, that you did well in descibing what you wanted to. I could see everything as clearly as if I were there, yet had enough space to imagine my own scenery.

So, this, to me, ends as a 6/10 because it was good, just not creepypasta material.