Talk:Superbia/@comment-26480939-20160812013101

Well, as the saying goes: "Pride goeth before a fall." ;)

Sorry, just had to say that. *laughs*

That being said, I did enjoy this, even if I know zilch about TES or Oblivion. But the fact that the narrator was so willing to save his in-game character of Superbia proves that he actually surmounted the Deadly Sin of Pride. Because if you're too proud, you wouldn't want to save anyone besides yourself.

Now, as I know nothing about the series in question, this didn't have as much of an impact on me as if I did.

And as others have said, this is pretty long for a 'pasta. I don't really mind the length of stories, so I won't count that against you.

I can't really point out any significant flaws, so this gets a 9/10 Very good, little to no improvements needed.