Talk:What You Deserve/@comment-26268104-20150525211341

This creepypasta is ok. The ending was creepy, but at the same time, a little unbelivable. Not just because of Ash coming out and teleporting the narrator into the game, but that the narrator still found the time to wite this. And how? Did he escape the world or was there a computer in the game? Also, the parents were a little unrealisticly abusive. Maybe if they had another son who was dead or had something tragic happen to them in the past, this would have been a bit more realistic.

In summary, it's creepy, but unrealistic. I rate it 6.4 out 10 stars.