Talk:Amazing World of Gumball : The E-mail, The/@comment-24082398-20170308162817

3/8/2017

Adding Needs Work here. This story has alright grammar and sentence structure, and the story itself was easy to read. As far as the writing goes, it was pretty good. My issue, though, is with the content. The content was like a cut-and-paste version of Squidward's Suicide, except Spongebob was replaced with Gumball. The story's contents didn't make much sense... why would there be a picture of the daughter at the end? After 10 years, why bring it up now? Why would you go back and rewatch it and pause it and pause it and pause it just to see this one frame? Why was the video so cryptic and vague? Why was there a narrator? Why would Gumball and Darwin have recorded dialogue that wouldn't work in the show? There's a lot of loose ends and not enough believability here. I would suggest cleaning this up and making it more coherent.

This has a week to be brought up to snuff, and if it isn't I will have to put a 48 Hours to Deletion tag on this! Please clean it up before then.