Talk:Majestic's Game/@comment-7706473-20130721085241/@comment-5245439-20130721211733

Thank you for your review :)

Yes, I must admit I only brought some of the set pieces a couple of times... I was hoping for the relationship between Felix and Vincent to be more noticeable, but hey, can't get everything! Although I hope the broken down pickup truck was used to effect ;)

The raps I did include weren't meant to be battle raps, which is why there was lack of insults. Think of a Ill Mind of Hopsin 5 or 6 kind of deal where the rappers try to convey a message. As for my raps, I always try to focus on the lyricism, although I am an amateur myself.

I'm glad at least one character stood out here! Many times I thought of revealing the AHM as some sort of demon or Satan-like character, but I let the story go in its own direction, and it ended in him being ambigious.

My biggest concern with this pasta was the length. I was afraid it was going to be too long, and that's why the writing is a bit dull at times (lack of poetic language/metaphors, etc.). Some set pieces I probably did think of using at one point, but I wrote this in Microsoft Word over the span of 3 days. I probably forgot of some of the directions I wanted to go with some of them (regrettably).

To be honest, this is my first pasta. I've never really delved into the horror genre since I get scared at the tiniest jump scares. But I really like Amnesia for its psychological thriller sort of horror; those kinds of games I actually enjoy. If I make pastas in the future, it'll probably be of that sort. (The AHM was meant to be a psycholigcally scary kind of dude too)

Again, thanks for your review! I'll try to take your points and improve my pastas (if I make any more lol) in the future with them. See ya on the Twitch chat/around the wiki!