Talk:Honey/@comment-1810325-20131019230430

Huh...very intersting.

I'll admit, at first I wasn't really on board with this one. The writing style didn't seem to mesh well with the actual story, and I was just waiting for the narrator to explain how he was going to torture the girl or something.

But as I kept reading, it started to warm up to me. Especially when entering the duel emotions of the narrator. To me, the second half is much stronger than the first.

But overall, I enjoyed it. Keep exploring psychies in your characters, you handled it well.