Talk:Fairy Odd Parents: They're Gone/@comment-4332975-20140211171702/@comment-4332975-20140221213441

There's a bit of a "raw edge" around the new edits. The other lines in the story don't quite match up with the new stuff now. Things like the line still saying "despite what had happened" at the end of the day, though the new description of his day doesn't have anything bad really happening to him. Also, this line, "The episode ended immediately without any dialogue from the two fairy's." (and it should be "fairies", by the by), is written twice. What I tend to do after finishing a story is to go back and read it myself a few times, to see if I made any typos, or have any spots that don't read quite as well as they sounded in my head (and even then I still miss things), which is what I'd recommend you do here. The dialogue still comes across a little forced, but with the new angle on the story, that actually works.