Talk:Six Children/@comment-25021327-20150816234957

I felt like the setup for this one had some promise, the mysterious and secretive father figure was a little creepy too. Some parts read a little strangely to me, like the narrator saying he hasn't seen his father for a long time, but then saying that he had seen him briefly or in passing. I couldn;t exactly tell how absent the father really was.

The pacing for the first several entries felt pretty good and consistent. And although there were some typos and grammar errors, they weren't too distracting from the story. The descriptions were pretty good, and I felt pretty able to follow along to a lot of this. Though I'm not sure the scientific applications of finding children to  " genetically mutate to look like Extra Terrestrials" 

The story kind of takes a wild turn toward the end. We have a mysterious set of circumstances, and some basic information about the Project Children, and suddenly we're given ALIEN DEMONS! That felt like a bit of a jump to me ._.' From that point I had more trouble following exactly what had been happening.

One of the main things that threw me was the mention of "Hallucinagen." from that point I wasn;t sure what was meant to have actually happened, and what was just a dream or hallucination happening to the narrator while he was strapped to the bed. Then it gets kind of Evil-Mad-Scientist-y which isn;t necessarily a bad thing, I guess it just felt abrupt to me.

I did like the Leather Man, and I think that this story has a lot going on, which can be interesting. I guess for me it just felt like it was a little lacking in focus. Hope this review wasn;t too harsh or discouraging.