Talk:It's Cold/@comment-7706473-20131031060603/@comment-23784670-20141029210000

Actually, yeah, I check back up on this page once in a while, though it's been a bit more than a year since this story, and I haven't really been inspired to make any other horror stories, at least not a gaming one. So this is all I've got.

Though, looking over it again, I can definitely see the parts where you might start to raise an eyebrow. I think the reason Vince seems to stick out like he did was because he was who I put the east though into. I guess "normal, and maybe just a little bit creepy" is what I had in mind with Vince. He sees right through the "disguise" (and I do use that term loosely) that Mia wears, forces her to lower her defenses a little by ditching her hat, and leaves the story on an ominous note. But he does seem to pull her out what whatever was going on with the game, and feels bad letting a kid walk home that late at night, so he helps her out.

But I don't think I did enough to set who he is in place, it's all pretty vague, and there are definitely places where the wording could've been better. I think part of him was also supposed to find it weird since this was about the time when the whole "Gamer girls?! OMG" was becoming a thing, but I don't think that one came across basically at all, and to be honest, it seems kind of unneeded now.