Talk:Jenny's Game/@comment-4332975-20130325012640

It could be much worse. A little too clichéd to really work for me, but you kept it out of the absolutely horrible, at least. I would have liked to see something with a bit more description, though the pacing was alright. As I said, some bits like the distorted music and the empty eyes were overdone, but this wasn't used to the point that it overshadows the rest. I do think it suffers a bit, though, in that there's no rhyme or reason to it. The imagery is disturbing, yes, at least slightly so, but there doesn't seem to be any reason or purpose to it, especially since it just appears once, without provocation, does nothing, and then vanishes again without resolution. The whole thing basically just gives a sense of, "Well, that happened..." and nothing more.