Talk:RUN.exe/@comment-25021327-20141105154820

I liked this pasta, I think it was a nice use of a "supernatural video game" in a horror tale. More and more often, I find myself not enjoying or connecting with the haunted game pastas, but I think I realize why. I am more inclined to enjoy a story when it is based more upon a character, and his or her reaction to a weird gaming experience, than I am to enjoy a story where the game is the central character. I feel that this one did a god job of being more character-centric than some other gaming pastas.

The spelling, gramar, format, and clarity are all up to par (not surprising, but still a welcome change from some of the stories I've read lately.) The pacing was pretty consistent throughout, pretty much jumping around only when the story called for it. The descriptions were pretty well done, and I was able to imagine most of the sights, sounds, smell, etc. being described.

I would have liked a bit more information about the game being played by the protagonist. We get a nice general idea of gameplay and graphics, and I liked the thought of the game building a gameplay map based on available info on your current GPS location. That works better than just "omg, teh game is takeing place in MY town!" The narrator states that he completes the game after some trial and error, as well as luck. I would have liked to know if the game had any type of ending, or further details regardless of whether or not it would give clues or info about the story's conclusion.

I realize the necessity of the wife in the story, as she becomes the narrator's hallucination and the apparent antagonist for part of the tale. But throughout my reading, I found myself wondering if we were going to learn anything else about her. She is only mentioned in passing, and we do not learn her thoughts or reactions to her husband getting out in the middle of the night and returning covered in blood with mutilated animals, which I imagine she would pick up on eventually, no matter how stealthy the narrator is. I guess I just felt a little underdeveloped to me.

A pretty solid story that I'm pleased to have read. I'm not always a fan of Mindfuck pastas, and the 'twist' in this one was fairly apparent throughout, for me at least. But It didn;t feel as much like a Mindfuck as it did just a logical, if unsettling conclusion to a story. I liked this one :)