Talk:Goldeneye's Final Mission/@comment-6794436-20140709235437

Alright, so, I'm going to go out on a limb here and say that this is your first pasta, am I right? Well, I'm going to try to be nice when reviewing this pasta. To start, there is a few cliches, but all stories have them. Another problem, is the formatting. It is a wall of text and incredibly hard to read. Try spacing it out and making shorter paragraphs.

Sometimes, a short pasta can be good, but not this one. There is no build up just, "I found a gun, a bloody cutscene happened and then torture." It is just sort of out of place and unexpected.

Another thing, is that the word choices are for the most part bland and sort of boring to read. One final problem, is that the story is just bloody, not creepy. Blood and gore almost never make a story creepy, unless used in moderation. This is just blood showing up where it isn't supposed to and torture. All around, sorry to break it to you, but this is not a very good pasta, but if it's your first, then believe me, we've all been there and started out on a somewhat bad first pasta.

3/10. Also like what RepublicofE said, sign your pastas and add categories.