Talk:Crystal Caverns/@comment-24082398-20150412214620

Ooh boy! A review! It's been a while!

What was good? Well, the story has good grammar and it isn't some WoT. The game itself, Crystal Caverns, was sold so well that I looked it up online to see if it was a real game (I didn't get any matches). The graphic you added along to the story made it seem even more believable, so props to you for that. I also found the protagonist a lot more sensible than most, and I even related to them on some aspects.

Now, onto what was bad. To be honest (this is why you'll hate me) I didn't enjoy the mindfuck as much as I bet I should have. The ending was almost completely the same as the Candle Cove concept, and since I had already read that, it didn't really help seeing a duplicate of it. Sometimes, the grammar was off, such as the point where it said, "I tried to escape, but my miner was ripped apart by the teeth, and I don’t mean he just died when he came into contact with them, I saw him die." The sentence is a big run on and it doesn't make sense. Wouldn't you see him die if he just came into contact with them too?

My final verdict would be a 7/10. Very good story hampered by an ending I've seen before many times. Good job! It's gonna be great getting to compete against you!