Talk:The Ritual of Rebirth/@comment-24841964-20151128203811

Well, it isn't plagiarized, so here's my review.

What this is a Destiny CP, a really...not creepy one at all. I heard you do Science Fiction stories, in which case, Destiny would have made a lot of sense. But all the creepiness I got from this pasta was the atmosphere. Don't get me wrong, it's a good story. Stick to the writing business. Your word choice is amazing. I am honestly amazed by all your word choicing (new people tend to have terrible word choicing with bad grammar).

Now, as far as creepiness goes, you have your atmosphere. It's a nice little atmosphere, but with no scariness to behold and use it. I really wish you wouldn't have picked a game. Honestly, gaming pastas are just getting harder to write anymore, and they are few and far in between for the good ones.

You have a good mark of talent, just use it very wisely, and you shall see yourself on CPotM.

Link is a Master (talk) 20:38, November 28, 2015 (UTC)