Talk:Paper Mario 64: Cease to Be/@comment-68.118.40.203-20140103120032

This is actually in all honesty. A poor creepypasta. The use of slang is absoloutely just, it does nothing for the story. It actually made me chuckle. The lack of goings on was odd. And the fact he seemed to freak out at this was just, I dunno, there wasn't much build up.

So once he threw the controller and said that it was hell it just kinda sealed this as a just. Poorly done pasta. The ending feels rushed and boring. It's very very generic. I'm sorry but I hope you can imrpove.