Talk:The Last Piece/@comment-5025667-20130712211623

Well, this was certainly something. The inclusions of those photos didn't really make much sense to me as far as adding to the story goes. It just doesn't really add much of anything.I will say though that the story itself is written very well, avoiding any sort of traps or cliches throughout and was pleasent to read, if the events didn't seem to come out of nowhere and the transformation could probably be slower and more detailed than just saying she "looks younger". It was delightfully well-executed otherwise and quite powerful and grim in its delivery, I like how she becomes a godlike enity and overseer at the end. I'd say a 8/19, feel very proud!