Talk:Diary Of A Body Removal Expert/@comment-6794436-20150327192208

This was alright...

Good: This was written quite well, and had great flow to it. There were little to no grammatical errors, and there typos seldom appeared, save for a few instances, albeit  those small typos didn't detract from the story at all. The scene with the man who fell to his death was quite unnerving, as just imagining a seemingly dead body jerk about at free will can be quite creepy in its own right, and the way you executed it here was really great.

Bad: This pasta wasn't particularly very creepy, other than that one part I mentioned before, and it really was a bit of a letdown to me. There was so much potential in this pasta, but it really as a whole was executed wrong. That ending was also quite anti-climactic, and I feel as though with a bit more buildup and insight, you could've even made this into a decent mindfuck! The repeated breaks in between the story including the main character really just got annoying over time and sort of drew away from the small semblence of creepiness that was here in the story. All that this really was, for the most part, was a retelling of deaths that people had to take care of, and really they were more intriguing than something that could be made into creepypasta material unless they were modified more drastically.

Verdict: 5.5/10- This wasn't really that creepy,  but it certainly wasn't bad by any stretch of the word. Perhaps if you modified the events that took place and developed the story a bit more, this could've been something really good, but as it stands, this is merely an alright pasta, nothing bad, but nothing that great.

-Incorrect3