Talk:Fool's Gold/@comment-5675310-20131221222327

This pasta is a Fool's Gold.

Description: 8.0/10 - Things were described well and there were few to no grammatcial errors. You did a good job taking the time to describe things without stretching it out to the point where it gets boring.

Plot: 6.0/10 - This is possibly the story's lowest point. It started out looking quite promising and in the end it wasn't bad and the whole idea that the guy poisoned the store worker was interesting. However, there were a couple of cliches here and there that could easily be fixed.

Entertainment: 6.5/10 - A fairly entertaining story.

Pros and Cons:

+ Described well

+ Potenetial

- Cliches

Overall: 6.7/10 - Okay.

"A story with potential and a sheen outter layer, but the more you look into it, the worse it becomes."

- Marcus