Talk:World of Warcraft Endofallthings.mod/@comment-6794436-20150113022007

Hmm... Another boring gaming pasta, how fun....

Good: The grammar in this pasta was in pretty good shape, not too many grammar errors or clarity problems, say for the occasional typo here or there. This isn't horribly written either. It isn't written incredibly, but it is good enough to be readable. The buildup was okay, nothing really suspensful, but it was still decent.

Bad: This pasta suffers from numerous cliches, including the epilogue which was chock full of them! It's also somewhat out of place mentioning Sonic.Exe, as that crappypasta should have had no place in this story, and mentioning the eyes was a bad move too. The one main problem about this story is how bland it is, as I feel as though I've read stories identical to this multiple times, making this story not really accel at anything. One final thing I should note, at the end of the page, don't mention how you can't wait to see this on YouTube, as most pastas don't make it there, and saying that makes you seem overconfident. Also, this pasta honestly isn't good enough to be read by Mutahar.

Verdict: 5/10- Clarity and writing wise, this pasta was alright, but the numerous amounts of gamingpasta cliches leave this pasta to be just another non excelling story lost in the sea of other pastas. You should take a look at the New Writer Guidelines as they should help you with all of your future writings.