Talk:Your big bro Mr. Spaceman/@comment-25021327-20151203235829

So.. I wrote a big long review of this one, but Wikia was all "lol I'mm a sign you out to prevent "Account Hijacking" I hope you saved your comment before you posted it, cuz I'mma just delete it!"

So I'll leave another review here, probably not as good as the first. Here goes. I thought that this one had some potential to be interesting, but the execution felt flawed to me. The maine thing that will probably stand out to readers is the shock value of the content. I was not a big fan of the rape content, not because I find it inherently offensive or inappropriate, but because it felt gratuitous here.

I like the thought of a character slowly losing his grip on reality while programming a game, losing sight of the amorality of his actions, but it didn't work for me here. I think that was in part due to the fact that the perpetrator was dressed as an astronaut while he comited his crimes. That just seemed kind of silly to me, personally.

I had many unanswered questions while reading this. Why an antique vaginal speculum? How did the serial rapist sneak around while dressed as an astronaut? Why did he kill the sister? Does he kill all his victims? If so, how? I don't imagine just using a speculum would make someone die. Sometimes I prefer when things are left vague, but this just felt kind of rushed.

There were some issues with typos and strange wordings. Things like "There has been numerous reports of a man wearing an astronaut costume wandering around nighttime. By now he made around 20 victims" just read oddly to me. It should be there "have" been, and also, I'm not sure if "making" victims is really the best way to word that.

Anyhow, I do think that there could be some potential here, but this one feels flawed. I hope that this review wasn't too harsh or discouraging