Talk:GymNine/@comment-25021327-20150527230228

I've never been too into Pokémon, so Im not the best person to critique a Poképasta, but since they're around, I got's ta do it. I think that this story was pretty good, it treads some familiar ground in the forms of a Pokémon game with a secret or hidden, darker story, but it does so fairly well.

I'm well enough acquainted with the series that I was able to follow along pretty easily, and the descriptions were good. The Spelling, grammar, format, clarity and all that was in good order, which is always a plus :)

I enjoyed this more than the majority of Poképastas I've read. The story, and the catalyst to the evens that occurred felt feasible which I like. And in game story was better than the typical "Professor Oak gave me a pokeeman and it was DEAD and it said HOW COULD YOU" story that comes along with Pokémon pastas that take place in reality.

The "hidden" story seemed kind of standard to me, but I admittedly cannot appreciate it as much as a person who follows the games and lore. The formula of the character being dead, and clues being scattered through the game until the final reveal is a little tired, but can still work. I think it pretty much does here.

I think that someone who is more into the series than I am would appreciate this more. This story feels competantly written, and although perhaps not the most original of stories, it feels solid to me. I think that Pokémon fans will get some enjoyment out of it :)