Talk:Inevitable/@comment-8470110-20130917011605

4/10

Mindf*cks are a delicate kind of stories. They need to have deep detail, good pacing and a release at the end that allows the reader to soak everything in. In this pasta, the detail is okay, the pacing followed a straight path but leaned off course from time to time and the release was lacking. For your future mindf*cks, make things more cryptic, add more detail and have more suspense.

-Sshakenbakee