Talk:Majestic's Game/@comment-7706473-20130721085241/@comment-7706473-20130722045239

You're extremely welcome - I like seeing pieces where it's obvious the author put in a lot of effort, and though I listed a bunch of things that *I* might have done differently or changed, I'm just one of many; and I can still say with certainty that this was a good piece, and you should differently write more; whether exploring the fate of others caught inside the web of the game, or something completely new!

A big example is that though I do feel I'd try to add a few more character-centric moments, I don't know where. The 'flow' of the story is really good, and it would feel out of place to remove or add too much. And actually, Felix's reaction was completely tragic and relatable; I just forgot to mention it because I am a cold heartless monster. :P

More seriously, you gain a *HUGE* amount of respect for me for not letting this being your first pasta hold you back. I think that by exploring uncharted territory like this is a great step, or maybe more of a running dive into the realm of psychological horror. And lastly - thanks for giving me an example! I really need to have a beat/structure going in my head to get music sometimes, and also Ill Mind 5 was an absolute masterpiece, I feel. :)

Thanks for listening to my ramblings; more than any critique or comment, take that you successfully did what most don't do, and released a first pasta with polish, a solid story, and an interesting setting - that you should definitely keep writing, and I'll be lurking in the wings as I'm prone to doing!