Thread:HopelessNightOwl/@comment-24517450-20140410224638/@comment-32602006-20140410231046

I could go on but first I think it might be more helpful to explain some of the things you did wrong with your last pasta.

First of all, if your pasta's main idea and storyline can fit into a whole bunch of different games, chances are you are doing something wrong. This mysterious potion plotline could have just as easily fit for the Dragonbourne and Skyrim, or a Sims character, or the Fable series, or Assasin's Creed, or any of countless other games. That alone shows the idea to be rather generic.

Also, the ending was way too random and over-the-top. First the player character apparently blacks out and kills a bunch of monsters that were in the minecraft world for.....some reason, then it just jumps right to the narrator doing the same thing but with people. Sorry man but few readers are going to take that remotely seriously and many would probably assume you were trolling.