Talk:Belief in Oneself/@comment-7706473-20130409051303

Part of me wanted not to like this, for reasons completely unrelated to you, your writing, or your writing style.

Yeah, that part of me lost.

This is really, really good. I'd give you an ashen twig, but I feel the excellence of this deserves more in-depth analysis. I love human stories, about human flaws and faults - and find them far more interesting and far more disturbing than any other kind of literature. The worst things we create are just reflections of ourselves - and nothing more

The dialogue in :colon's threw me a bit, but though I'd normally mark down for it - it added a weird feeling that this was all (or could be) all in Mark's mind. The narrator is unreliable, just as unreliable as the audience is. There is no simple solution at the end, which makes it better because people can beleive whatever they read into it.

I'm not sure how I feel about Mark trying to do what he does at the end. It felt too easy, too handed to him (My 'ditzy mom' left the car keys? Convenient...) - but then again, people who are hallucinatory often believe the world is convenient for them in this manner. I'd be interested in reading a story without any references to videogames in it by you, at some point.