Talk:Pocket Monsters Alpha/@comment-25199611-20150720203644/@comment-4332975-20150721082910

Seems quite a bit better, though there's some plot holes (like how it's all in English), and I personally think that the expostion is a bit heavy-handed. In particular, the "Is this a dream?" "...and by the way, this isn't a dream." is too convenient. Still, it's a marked improvement over the original, and actually has some sense of progression now. I'm going to go ahead and mark this page "Fixed" unless someone else has reason to remove that tag.