Talk:Don't Get Lost/@comment-25021327-20150117173220

This was definitely an interesting one. Well written, with a distinct style. I'd be lying if I said I had no trouble following this story. While reading, I tend to think very visually, and the visual descriptions here were very good! However, as I read through this, I was trying to almost visualize the layers on consciousness represented here, the real world, the virtual world, and the actual memories, and this is where I got myself confused XD Though I imagine these lines were intentionally blurred to keep readers on their toes, and in that respect, it worked.

This felt pretty well paced to me, consistent throughout, aside from when it was appropriately adjusted to for the current action. There were a few parts early on when I wasn;t sure where things were going, but toward the end, I was zipping through! I can see how some readers may think that some sections may be slow, or overly descriptive, but personally I kind of like that.

The plot is a thinker, and I feel like it can be interpretted in several ways, though many or all of them are pretty much tragic. There are implications of a history of violence here, as well as some things that could be interpretted as the narrator possibly having a mental breakdown, not knowing what is real or imagined, and what memories are true. Lots to ponder :)

I didn't feel like I connected incredibly well with the Jackson character, maybe because he becomes somewhat muti-layered, but I felt at times like I was being told things about his personality, rather than interpretting them myself.

As far as the mindfuck goes, I'm not typically a huge fan of the genre, and here, I don't feel like it was fully realized for me. Reading through this, I imagine most folks pick up on the fact that there are a few different lines woven in the narrative, so I felt like any reveal or plot point at the end of this was more or less open to interpretation.

In all, I think this is a well constructed story that displays both a talent, and love for writing. A genuine effort for vocabulary and prose seems apparent here. I'm glad I gave this one a read through :)