Talk:Star World/@comment-25021327-20150323040705

Yeah, this has some clichés, and the bit about the pocket knife makes no sense. The ending would benefit from some more detail, maybe some re-working. Up until the end, this is pretty much just a standard gaming pasta. It's been in "Needs Work" for a while, but I don't think it's that awful. I'm gonna mark this one "Fixed"