Talk:ZK/@comment-7706473-20130419054401

Interesting... It wasn't particularly frightening, for me, but I won't criticize it - I don't believe in 'constructive' criticism. I only criticise people when I want to hurt them, and I wish others were more honest. ;) More seriously, I'll give you *feedback*: feedback that hopefully will help and encourage you, as I think this and you have a lot of potential.

The first segment is pretty good. You introduce the core cast, and the sense of fear is almost immediate. When you know and care for someone, it makes a story much more personal. We get to care for the narrator and Sam, which makes the very creepy game all the more creepy. For me, the low-key small town horror sort of grew less frightening with the reveal at the end - but it reminded me of Deadly Premonition, so that's absolutely fine. ;)

Holly, both for ironic humor the fact that this looks set to reveal soe interesting writing from you. It's a matter of taste - but to me, small-town horror, unexplained creepiness, and a feeling of regret go far. I enjoyed it, even if the ending wasn't quite what I expected. Looking forward to more.