User blog comment:Steelwingred/A Really Depressing Story About a Tennis Ball/@comment-5675310-20140803054614

A Really Depressing Story About a Tennis Ball, eh? I got nothin', really, I swear.

Description: 4.0/10 - I'll be completely straight with you here, nothing was described well, and the whole writing style just seemed very rushed. Though the beginning wasn't bad, and I even imagined a british narrator reading through the first two paragraphs. However, after this, things just went downhill. The writing grew poorer, and consisted mainly of extremely cheesy dialogue that in itself seemed to go by much too fast. There were a few grammatical errors, not and excessive amount by any means, but still a little too many for my liking.

Plot: 4.0/10 - Just as the writing felt. The first two paragraphs showed some great potential, but when it feels like it's rushed out the door like this, it fails to execute in my mind as a very emotional tale. The pacing was simply all wrong, and the story itself was bland (though I do agree that showing both sides of the abusive parents was great, and left the whole two dimensional charcter thing behind).

Entertainment: 4.5/10 - It goes by much too fast for what it's worth.

Pros and Cons:

+ Three dimensional charcacters

+ Shows potential

- Lackluster writing

- Cheesy dialogue

- Horrible pacing

- Bland story

Overall: 4.1/10 - Bad.

''"While this most certainly shows potential, it's going to need a lot of polishing before I could consider it to be a reccomended read." ''