Talk:Crystal Onix Glitch/@comment-26480939-20171211013833

What the Gehennom did I just read? This is a confusing mess of a story. And there's a lot of clichés in here as well. Full rating time:

Meat: I'm very knowledgable about Pokémon, especially the earlier games. Whoever is narrating this apparently has some knowledge but not very much. 5.5/10 here.

Scare Factor: Almost nil. It seems like this relies mostly upon GRIMDARK for its scare factor. 2/10 here.

Spelling/Grammar: Absolutely horrible. This needs a major run through SpellCheck. Uncapitalized nouns, misspellings, wonky and uneccessary pluralizations are the major offenders here. 1/10, and that's being generous at best. This only gets that 1 point because it's somewhat readable.

Cliché Usage: Off the charts here. The whole story revolving around a glitch. Nonexistent moves. Altered sprites. Threatening messages. Player overreacts and says they'll never mess around with this kind of stuff again. Technically speaking, this would be an 11/10, but since I prefer not to give scores that exceed the limit, this gets a 10/10 here. Not good.

Final Rating: 4/10 Needs a great deal of work and improvements to be done for this to be good.

My advice for improving this? First off, do some proofreading and SpellCheck on this. Proper nouns should always be capitalized. Many nouns are not capitalized at all. Work on spacing. Cut down on the cliché usage a bit. For starters, all the stuff I mentioned in my Cliché Usage section of my review are huge clichés in Poképastas, especially nonexistent moves and altered sprites/models. On the plus side, you didn't use the '666 Number of the Beast' and 'HYPERREALISTIC BLOOD!' clichés that tend to infest creepypastas. That is commendable.