Thread:Urkelbot666/@comment-26268104-20150826235822/@comment-25021327-20150922234957

Well, so far the pacing seems fairly good to me. The writing style also feels pretty competant as far as describing events. One thing I might say, and this is something that I imagine you may describe in flashbacks as the story progresses, is that you may want to at some point explain what has happened in the 10 years since the diagnosis.

A lot of times, with lung cancer, treatment is administered fairly early on in the diagnosis, and from there it's a matter of what damage has been done to the body, how much of the cancer was removed, and if the cancer has gone into remission. Usually if there is someone who survives ten years with lung cancer, it is because it has gone into remission for a little while and come back.

Anyhow, these are just details about the disease that you may not feel the need to explain, in order to keep your pace, and not get into to much detail. Just something I thought of while reading. Adding flashbacks periodically is probably a good way to explain things throughout the story, as opposed to starting off with a huge backstory or lots of exposition.

i think the characterisation is coming along alright so far, though it is early on.