Talk:Dead Man's Wishes/@comment-24082398-20160815224027

Another cool ritualpasta!

What was good? I think the idea of playing chess with yourself--or a figure of yourself--is very interesting. It's really eerie to think of myself in a cold, dark void facing myself playing a game of chess! It's got that special kind of creepiness to it, a feeling that gives me a sense of unease in my gut. The story was formatted well and grammar/punctuation was very good as well! I didn't notice anything amiss here. Word choice was also fluid and slick, like a greaser's hair. Everything meshed together nicely.

Now, onto the bad. There were a couple of things that stuck out to me. The exact reasons for some of the ritual didn't make too much sense. Why do you need a revolver with three bullets in it? Why can't it be a glock, or a rifle? Why does it need to be three bullets? Also, how come this only works at the turn of the hour? I was hoping these would be answered later on, but I didn't get anything. This made it feel watered down in my opinion. Why would I do this if I don't understand the significance of it?

All in all, I'd give this story a 6.75. It had a good execution and setup, but certain elements of it fell flat. This was still a good read, though, and I'd recommend it to any ritualpasta enthusiasts!