Talk:The Paralysis Hibernation/@comment-17737991-20131014142948

There's a few minor grammar issues but otherwise this is pretty good. The only suggestion I have, other than to fix the grammar I guess, is to explain why those friends said nighttime would be so awesome. It doesn't need to be detailed and long or anything, just a little explanation on why night is supposed to be oh-so-incredible.

It's pretty confusing what exactly was going on but, that is how sleep paralysis feels so I suppose it makes sense to have the story be a bit incoherent. But maybe I'm biased since I've dealt with this before. Well anyway, I think this is pretty decent ^^