Talk:The Rustling in The Trees/@comment-24540056-20141023211957

It's fast paced, jarring, and in your face....

Not good for a horror story. The tone changes were a bit too sudden, and the story literally began with no opening. It just cut to the chase. The whole thing has pacing problems throughout the story. During the beginning, it lazily hammered out some exposition, and even during the scare scenes it was a bit fast. Then it dramatically takes a slower approach, as if you wrote the first part on adderall, took a break, then wrote the second part. The whole thing comes off as jarring, although I will admit that it *tried* avoiding cliches.

4/10