Talk:My life is Hell/@comment-29502200-20160823221053

OH BOY CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM TIME

Title: My Life is Hell is too generic and edgy. I'd recommned changing it to something more original. Even using the phrase "I Told You So" would be a better title.

Intro: " In life, we are afraid of death. But I tell you this, immortality is not worth the pain and suffering on which I had gone through. I was a young lad in the late 1340s..." Yes, yes, you have my attention!

Body: Short, sweet, and to the point. A few grammar and spelling erros, but that's about it.

Ending: Interesting and original, keep it.

Overall review: 6.5/10 - I like the short story, I like the idea; however, It's a short story that feels rushed when I read it.