Talk:New World/@comment-25021327-20150125192525

This is a pretty short and sparse piece. I'm not sure exactly what the goal is, as this reads pretty much like a description of what happens in any game of Minecraft. I was waiting for some kind of hook, but the story just went a few paragraphs and then ended.

I think maybe with some work this could turn into something, more interesting. If there were some intrigue added, or maybe some more character given to the narrator.

The spelling and grammar are in pretty good shape, the descriptions are standard. I guess I just don't quite get this. I don't mind when stories aren't creepypastas, or even when they aren't really supposed to be that unnerving. It's not bad for what it is, but I guess what it is isn't something I found very interesting.