Talk:The Sad & Strange Fate of Vincent/@comment-5245439-20130724090403

I really like this pasta :)

It definitely has an Alan Wake sort of feel, towards the second half anyways, when the author's constructs come alive. Of course this is a different plot from Alan Wake with the best friend and all, but I must wonder if that game was an inspiration for this pasta.

I was actually fearing for the protagonist's life at one point, right after the dream and when they first talk about Ronove. He seems likeable, especially since he's helping his best buddy out through all these tough times. But nothing else really happens except the inhuman voice and Vincent's dead body. Granted, the story is called The Sad and Strange Fate of Vincent, but I'd like to see if that monster stalked the protagonist any more. Personal preference.

Also, a quick word of advice, delete the Section headings if you're not using them, try to remove the black text as soon as possible, and add some categories! You can get a 3-day ban from the wiki because of no categories, and I wouldn't want such a strange and sad fate to befall a talented pasta baker.

Overall, I really enjoyed this creepypasta. The buildup between the character's relationship was perfect, the climax and ending were good, it was just some nitpicky stuff that threw this pasta a bit off for me.

I'm giving this pasta an 8/10.

I look forward to your next pasta :)