Talk:Buried Alive Wins/@comment-26480939-20170513175318

This is basically a re-telling of the "Buried Alive/BURYMAN Script" Poképasta, so I knew how this would end just by looking at the title.

This is actually a much better version of the original 'pasta, and actually written in the in-universe context, which I like. It actually goes into detail about White Hand's BRUTAL attack does to its target, which is nice, as the original 'pasta didnt' really elaborate on that.

So, with my comments done, time to rate:

Spelling/Grammar: This could be done a tad bit better. I noticed some misspellings and slight grammar mistakes, such as not capitalizing words correctly. 8/10, as it's perfectly readable as it is but needs slight improvement.

Scare/Shock Factor: Almost nil for both, as I've read the original 'pasta this is based on and knew what to expect. 1/10

Meat: I'm VERY familiar with Pokémon Gen 1, so this gets a great score here. 9/10

Overall, this gets a 9/10 Needs a small amount of improvement, but still enjoyable to read.