Talk:The Blind Man Ritual/@comment-24082398-20160815223435

Ooh, this is a welcome change in the lineup!

What was good? Word choice, grammar, and punctuation were all excellent. I couldn't find a single typo or place where a comma was necessary. This is an incredible, incredible point because not too many stories on the wiki these days have proper grammar! Kudos to you on this one! The ritual was also well thought-out and made sense. Everything was explained in due time, and that made me believe in it just that little bit more. The idea of the Blind Man was also pretty fresh. I've never heard of a ghost that communicates via feeling, and I definitely haven't heard of one that, when communicating, plunges the other party into darkness. Nice work!

The only bad thing I could find was that it had the tiny, tiny cliche of hearing screams forever afterwards. I've seen this used in plenty of other ritualpastas, so seeing it here put a tiny damper on the creativity of it all. Also, I'm not sure if ritualpastas are supposed to be creepy, but this didn't really creep me out; it more so intrigued me.

All in all, I'd give this story a 7.25. A very fresh idea that's only brought down by a lack of creepiness and that one cliche. Really nice work!