Talk:Dover Demon/@comment-7234175-20141215004844

Like Urke, grammer and spelling, but I belive you fixed most the issues with that and it wasn't enough to really kill the flow here. I had never even heard of the Dover Demon until I read this, but I quite enjoyed the story despite that it all takes place in the span of two days. Even though it was spotted near Luke's house, I think if they where searching the woods it would have taken longer than a few hours to find it. My bigest beef with the story is, for me personally, the government is shooting people to cover up the incident. I feel like if the government would cover something up they would be a bit more tactful, but than again Lucas had posted to the internet and forcing their hand can be understood. I can understand that a coverup would mean all the characters would be killed and it can be assumed that Joseph could realize that everyone that truely knows about  about what they found is dying and he's trying to stay quiet about it so he can live, though this is speculation since Joseph really isn't all that important later on sicne he is fine and well. The only other "issue" I had was that at the end of one of the paragraphs with the son talking made it seem that the Dover Demon was actually Lucas after he went insane and killed Terry, and he is the one in the mental asylum. Kind of twisty vide I got before finishing it, but I do love the concept of a couple friends going "Monster Hunting" for a big End of School celibration and end up biteing off more than they can chew. I give it an 8/10 because of how entertaing it was through in through and feel like it's solid as is and some of what I talk about would more likely be edits I would have made if it was one I wrote.