Talk:Alisha/@comment-25021327-20140824031943

This isn't too bad a pasta. Pretty standard, classic ghost story fare, but executed relatively capably. The style, and format were pretty good, and pacing felt consistent. I personally feel that the first half of the story was a bit stronger than the second. Maybe the little girl character was more developed than he grow woman version.

This writing would benefit from some closer proofreading. Many words are spelled wrong, or replaced with homophones, or similarly sounding/spelled words.

Speaking as someone who isn't a huge fan of straight ghost stories, my opinion might be skewed. They have been done so often that originality can be tough to find. All that said, I feel that although this pasta may not necessarily be my cup of tea, I can see how others will quite like it :)