Talk:Disassociation/@comment-25021327-20141129150111

This was a pretty enjoyable little read. I enjoyed the style, and the content is something I find appealing. It's that kind of Batman, or Watchmen-esue take on superheroes.

The pacing was pretty good and consistent throughout, although the hero's turn to murder toward the end seeemed a little too abrupt to me. Throughout the story you can tell he has this darkness in him that, if released, could turn him to a murderous vigilante. And I think we as readers could all tell that is what was coming, but as I said the change seemed a bit sudden. However, I understand that in the format of a short story, there isn;t always time to develop the plot in the detail allowed by novel, or series.

This, at times reads like an Iron-Man fanfiction, sometimes a bit moreso than I would have liked. The character's real life job and lifestyle seem ripped directly from the Iron Man movies (I never read much of the comics). He is primarity a disinterested arms dealer, and we don't know much else about his work. The assistant being Ms. Salt, felt a little cheesey to me (Petter Potts) but that's a nitpick.

Although at times it seemed a  bit too derivative, for the most part I did enjoy this short, and quick story. Like I said the style was appealing, and as far as spelling, grammar, and clarity, everything was in fine order. Not terribly original, but nonetheless, not a bad tale.