Talk:Brothers/@comment-32602006-20140512005743/@comment-11329482-20140512015639

I'm still experementing with what works and what doesn't. I mainly hoped the ending to be emotionally effective and errie. I kinda looked back and noticed that as well. I think a better ending could have just been Jeff dying due to lack of sleep and food and have the father and Alex morn over their loss. I was thinking of trying many endings. This mainly just was a let's do improve video game creepypasta and see where this goes. In the future I will be more warry of how to end my story.