Talk:Her Final Wish/@comment-25021327-20141126235240

Okay, glad to see this reformatted into paragraphs. Sorry about adding the obnoxious "Walls of Textiness" category at first. Mostly when stories aren't formatted, it's because of user neglect, or laziness, but I can see that for this one, it was an honest mistake :)

So I found this story kind of interesting. The story feels somehow familiar to me, as if I have read something pretty similar to this, but that could just be my having read too many gaming pastas lately. It has a feel that is not quite scary, but more tense, or unnerving, and I liked that.

I'm not the type of person to automatically discount a story based on what I feel are cliché elements, but there were a few parts of this that will probably raise some red flags with readers. The strangely low price of the bundle, the seller who wants to get the console off his hands as quickly as possible, the weird cartridge with the crummy home-made sticker, all of those are elements that have been used to the point of feeling tired. But like I said, that doesn't necessarily mean it's automatically a bad pasta.

What I liked in this was the description of the gameplay. The quiet, grey and somehow inreasingly dismal ambiance of The Wishing Well appealed to me. And I enjoy the player's interest in the game as well, he/she seems to have a compulsion to play it, but isn't sure why.

I understand this is story is going to continue, so I can't give a full review. As it is now, it seems like the story is going into strange occurances in the player's home, either real, or imagined. I find myself more interested in what will happen next in the game. But either way, I pretty much enjoyed this, and will be interested to read the finished product.

Just a few notes; Works in progress are sometimes frowned upon here, so this might get a mark for deletion if it remains unfinished. And don't forget to sign your pasta, add categories, and update it to the listing (though, I already added categories)