Talk:First Kraid/@comment-7735322-20130402194239

Well, I don't mean to offend, but this story was not very good. You have a lot of detail that is just unnecessary first of all. This could have been about 20% as long as it was. For example the entire thing about the paper and homework, the enemies having been absent when you reloaded the ROM, both completely irrelevent. Most importantly, there is absolutely no point in doing a step by step walkthrough of your fight with Kraid.

All in all, it's important to have lots of detail in a story, but at the same time, there is such a thing as having too much detail.