Talk:The blind eyed killer/@comment-25021327-20150609211955

9-June-2015- Adding the "Needs Work" tag here. This story is pretty short, and feels generally rushed. I get a definite "Jeff the Killer" vibe fro this one, only executed withless care. We're introduced to Max, who has an admittedly bad run of luck. However it is no worse than what happens to a lot of people, and seems a bit tame to drive someone to be a killer.

If someone tries to commit suicide, and fails due to interference, I find it more likely that the person would just try again more carefully instead of trying to kill the person who helped them. There are some more things in this piece that seems to happen at random (Max keeps a gun in his backpack, Peter defends himself by stabbing his best friend twice... each time exactly in the eye. Also, the line " he could not see but he could see shadows"   is really not very well thought out. Either the guy can see or he can't ... more likely the latter since the doctor said he has  no eyes.   ಠ_ಠ

Anyway, there are spelling and grammar errors throughout this, misused homophones and stuff like that. As this is a Needs Work story, if it is not deemed adequately improved it will face deletion after about 9 days pending another review. Please take some time and work on this one