Talk:What Happened?/@comment-25021327-20150101224145

Not too shabby, I wouldn't consider this creepy as mcuh as just dark and kind of sad. That is in no way a criticism.

I noticed the mindfuck category has been added (not sure if it was there on my frst reading a couple hours ago). While reading I knew what was going on almost from the second paragraph, again, that is in no way a bad thing. I like that the story didn't hinge upon some sort of big reveal, but instead kind of let the reader pick up on things at their own pace.

There are some spelling and grammar flubs, but nothing really distracting, and nothing that another proofreading couldn't take care of. There were also some wording choices I found a bit odd (... So, to solve my remedy of my irritation... although I know what this means, it feels a bit redundant and peculiarly worded.)

I was a little curious about what the narrator noticed about himself in the coffin. He mentions the sewn up wound on the neck of the boy in the casket as if he expects it to he there. But afterward, he still doesn't realize how he was killed until he reads in on the paper scrap. I was wondering if this was written this way by design, and if I am maybe missing something.

In all I liked reading this one. It is a pretty quick and easy read, the pacing feels pretty consistent, and it has a nice, somber tone to it. Not quite hopeless, but definitely a little darker than a lot of the stories around.