Talk:Soul Sand/@comment-24082398-20150809224301

Hey there, another Minecraft pasta!

The good: The whole read was pretty enjoyable and it didn't overstay its welcome at all. Pacing was nice, near the end was really, really fast though. This was really cool to read from my standpoint because I really love Minecraft and I've always wondered about the faces in the soul sand. Great job portraying it here! Descriptions were a bit lacking, to an outsider it might be a bit bare-bones but to anyone familiar with Minecraft it all made sense. Not too shabby!

The bad: Okay, one of the only bad things about this was that it just wasn't scary or creepy or eerie, at least not me. I didn't feel scared reading it, it felt more like reading a particularly engrossing fanfiction rather than a creepypasta. I made the same mistake in my pasta, too. The other thing is that rushed ending. Those things really, really hurt stories. Maybe if you fleshed it out a bit more, gave some more dialogue and interaction, that sort of thing instead of it being so abrupt. Aside from that, a few typos were present, but nothing too bad.

Overall this gains a 6.5/10 from me. A nice, neat story hampered by that lack of creepiness and the rushed ending. If it gets revised, tell me and I'll give it another review. Thanks for recommending this to me, I really enjoyed it nonetheless!