Talk:Decap Attack/@comment-25400723-20141231085446

This was a fairly good pasta. Not really all that creppy, but still a pretty good story. The idea is solid and executed well, and the pacing is consistent (Which is something you won't find in many pastas posted now).

The only thing sbout this story that REALLY bugs me is the excessive use of commas. In this story, you can find at least 5 commas in one sentence. Maybe one or two of those commas actually need to be used in that sentence, but the rest don't belong in it. For example...

"From what I could tell, you were this headless body, wrapped in gauze, and your eyes seem to be on your chest, this is Chuck D Head"

That sentence should be changed to..

"From what I could tell, you were this headless body wrapped in gauze, and your eyes seem to be on your chest. This is Chuck D Head"

 Besides the "comma overdose", there really isn't much spelling or grammar issues.

My final verdict? 8/10

Keep up the good work!

~King