Talk:A God/@comment-32602006-20140216055027

First off, I cannot say for sure how good of a backstory I think this is, given that I have only played the official demo for Amnesia rather than the full game.

That said, I found this fanfic/creepypasta to be more than alright, but it's kind of hard to add onto the creepyness that the actual game gives off. It's pretty creepy by itself, though I could think of a couple ways they could have made it creepier.

Another thing is that the protagonist directly confronting the source of the evil kind of takes away from the creepyness. But then again as I understand Daniel (spoiler alert!) does that anyway at the end of the game.

So anyway:

Writing quality: 08.5/10  Can't get much better and also is consistent with the writing style of the actual character Daniel in the game

Actual Creepiness: 06/10 like I said hard to make it much creepier than the actual game, but if this was an actual level it would probably be quite creepy.

Realism: 7/10 Events in the game asside, the idea of something like this actually happening does stretch the limits of suspension of disbelief, but madness could certainly account for it.

Emotional Impact: 07.5/10 It adds emotion to a game that doesn't seem to have much. The reader can empathize with this Daniel in terms of both sadness and fear.

Entertainment Value: 08.5/10 For a game so vague on backstory this seems to do a good job, and it entertained me and held my attention despite the fact that I have not played the full game.

I would add an additional criteria of faithfulness to the canon for this pasta, but like I said, I havne't played it.

Final verdict: 07.5/10 Pretty good but liek I have said numerous times it's a little hard to judge without having played the full game.

One final note: you may want to put a spoiler alert at the top of this pasta.