Thread:Zion Coleman/@comment-6418997-20160828160039/@comment-6418997-20160828221209

I just got back from reading it, it does need improvements. It is pretty cliched unfortunately, which kinda makes it predictable. I recommend taking the mail man out of the story. And doing a more psychological fear instead of trying to gross the reader out in order to get scares. The pasta I think would benefit from being longer as well.