Talk:Nostalgia Crushed! (Sega Genesis Creepypasta)/@comment-6794436-20150122194357

This is an improvement from the original... but it still isn't very good...

Good: There are categories, which is nice, and the pasta isn't a wall of text .The spelling and grammar is quite good, with only a few flaws. This pasta isn't horribly written, it uses some good vocabulary words and it isn't so choppy that it appears to have been written by a 7 year old.

Bad: This pasta is incredibly cliched. Like, holy crap, there are cliches everywhere! Old men giving out games, nostalgia rush, you name it, this pasta has it. Also, a few sentences are worded strangely which can be a bit confusing at times. The story is also not very creepy at all, and I'm sorry, but "Nostalgia Crushed" just sounds, for lack of a better word, stupid. This pasta is also just pretty dull, and sounds identical to a lot of other gaming pastas, and the copious amounts of cliches don't help...

Verdict: 3/10- This pasta is just filled to the brim with cliches and it is dull, repetitive, and all around not very creepy. If you want to write more pastas and you are learning how to write better pastas as your comments say, you should read the New Writer Guidelines (Regulars Edit as You Please), which are guidelines created by me with help from a few other users. It' already Mutahar approved, so if you want to get better, I'd reccomend you read it!