Talk:Nostalgia Crushed! (Sega Genesis Creepypasta)/@comment-25249478-20150122200545

I'm sorry, but...this was bad.

The grammar wasn't bad. I noticed few typos, not many, which is good, but that's the only quality I can find here, other than it not being FNaF...

All I need to say is this: Cliches. EVERYWHERE! Player gets nostalgia. I know he doesn't buy the console from a pawn shop (I'll get to that soon...), but he still gets nostalgia. Then, he goes to the Pawn Store, and the guy there who almost kills his friend warns him not to get the games (red flag...), but he gets them anyway. Then, the Man communicates with the player from the games, and the story just generally moves on from there. Also, he starts bleeding 'cause his character gets hurt in a game...and then he appears in the game...sigh.

2/10. Grammar saved this from being 1/10. I'm sure if you look at those New Writer Guidelines, like Incorrect3 recommended, you'll be sure to improve.

Oddest of them all! ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) 20:05, January 22, 2015 (UTC)