Talk:Olaf/@comment-25021327-20150906225242/@comment-1196539-20150907035126

Appreciate the feedback as always. I'm in a writing workshop this time of year, so hopefully I'll be getting a couple of new stories/pastas out of it. I've been tossing around the idea for this one after an eerie incident I had at an old retail job, so I guess you could say it's very loosely based off a true story (also why it's less original than some of my other work).

It was a bit of a rush job, particularly the ending, and I agree that it was a bit abrupt/cliché. The other feedback I received about the story, though, everyone seemed to like the ending but felt that more could be added to the beginning, so I don't quite know what I'll do to tweak it yet, if I do.