Talk:The Nazi Experiment/@comment-25400723-20150913234111

Well that got heavy quick.

This was a short read, and not that bad of one at that. The idea seems sort of interesting, but in the limited space this story has I feel like the idea had not been fleshed out more than it could have. Some re-writing (and maybe a format fix :P) could easily turn this story from a number 3 to a number 6.

What I would really like to see is some new light shed upon the idea. Right now it seems kind of cliched and over-used. You've got the experiments, the weird chemicals, the subject acting strange, the sp00ky words and the main character who eventually ends up offing himself. I feel like if you took this story back to the drawing board and added in some more detail and maybe a dew twists here and there, it would look and sound ten times better than it does now.

Verdict? N/A

I would love to see some improvements before I give a definitive score :3

~King