Talk:Pokemon 666/@comment-6727300-20131216203459

Hm. This was an odd story, it was definitely unique. I think that it needs work in showing the deterioration of the mental state of the protagonist; it needed to be more gradual. It would have made the impact of the ending greater, instead of it seeming almost random for the main character to suddenly stab the trainer with a pitchfork. Also, the dialogue was lacking emotion in my opinion, I think that is also why I did not feel the terror this story was supposed to create. 5/10