Talk:The Stone Man/@comment-25021327-20160116235532

This is an interesting concept to play around with, and definitely one with a lot of dark potential. Being buried alive, or otherwise immobilized with no hope of escape is definitely something I think people try not to think about, but occasionally do.

The tool of refering to the protagonist as a statue was kind of clever, and refering to the statue as it rather than he or she is also sobering, though it does drop a He or a they every once in a while, which I'm not sure by design or unintentional.

Reading this, I did feel that at times it felt a little over-written or favored trying to use clever wording rather than going for clarity A sentence like "''It watched as with every slightest bit of movement became strained with difficulty in flicking its fingers, then their arms, then its legs - until even that gave way to nothing at all." ''although I know exactly what is being said, feels like it puts style over substance to a point that it could hurt the way it reads. There were some other spots where the writing felt a little under or over done, with fragments or sentences running a little long. But I won't harp too much on that.

Like I said, the idea is good and is thought provoking as well as creepy. It reminds me a litte of Johnny Got His Gun in its inspiration. I felt like I had some trouble connecting with the protagonist in a meaningful way, and that might have weakened the impact of the horro of the situation here. It's a pretty short piece about something that many people probably would rather not think about, and I think that might strike a nerve with some readers. In all I'm glad to have given it a read.