Talk:Symphony of Life/@comment-28241499-20141201030508

I'm not too sure about this pasta. I like the idea - it's original - but it doesn't seem like you do too much with it or even make it very scary. You could definitely expand on it through more than just "happy" or "sad" songs and different effects on the day the protagonist has after playing a certain type. The days, even the ones that are jovial or bleak or dark, seem to blend together and nothing truly interesting really happens until the end. It's very well written, as yours usually are. Everything is described with a lot of detail and it helps you paint the picture very clearly. However, as mentioned, it's not very scary either. I'm open to lots of types of horror and terror, but nothing really seems to be frightening in this story besides the notion of suicide (which is something that's been overdone). I understand you write mostly mindfucks but this seems to be teetering on the line between mindfuck and creepypasta and not really doing much of either. The pacing seems to bounce about a bit too near the end.

Overall,  I kind of don't know what to advise. It's original, but it doesn't use that originality very well. It's not very scary, but it does at least paint a picture, a mood, an atmosphere that you could probably use to convey some sort of scare.