Talk:Insensitive/@comment-6418997-20131209035438

Another good story!

Details- even though it was quite short there were a lot of details in this story that just chilled me to the bone. There are times when the story is confusing. But I think its because its too short. If it had been longer i think it would had more details. Also the plot twist at the end while surprising. Didnt have much build up as to, a possiblity it could be that. 8.5/10

story- the story is mostly run on details which isnt bad. I liked how you connected it to one of your past pastas which is pretty unique considering this not a sequel. I do feel like it is a bit of self advertisment. Also this being a christmas pasta it wasnt very obivious of that maybe you should make more hints besides snow and a gift. I was woundering why you choose a ( h, blank) as the mindf**k doesnt seem very christmasy. 8.0/10

overall- a pretty good story with lots of detail an ending I never saw coming. Plus its christmas. :P i quite enjoyed this read even though there are some flaws. However if you overlook those its actually a pretty good read that I personally quite enjoyed. 8.2/10 good