Talk:The Fine Line/@comment-25400723-20141023222357

I thought that this was pretty good. I mean, it didn't really do too much in terms of groundbreaking originality, but I thought that it was pretty good for a gaming pasta.

It's very well written, no grammar or spelling mistakes.

And there really isn't any cliches in this, which I like. Most gaming pastas are riddled with countless numbers of cliches, and this one isn't. Another factor of this story that I like, is that there are no supernatural happenings. There's no "Omg this game is haunted!" or "The devil possesed my video game!".

I have to say, how does the character not realize that he is no longer in a video game at the end? Did the game brain wash him or something?

Overall, I'd give this a 7.5/10  Good job!