Talk:Can You Hear Them?/@comment-25021327-20140825020633

I have played very little Pokémon in my life, nor have seen much of the cartoon, and have read none of the manga or comic series. I feel that my lack of knowledge on the subject of pokeemans causes my not to appreciate this pasta as a long time fan would.

That said, I think this is an okay story that could benefit from some more information being given to the reader. (again, this could just be my lack of pokéknowledge) I was left wondering what the reasoning was behind the apparent punishment of the player, the scolding from the ghostly girl. Was there any abuse, or malicious intent aside from the defeating of the EEVEE, and the running ragged of the Umbreon?

Like I said, this story probably reads a lot better for a fan of the games, and series in general. I would have liked to read more about what the narrator was thinking and feeling as these bizarre events were transpiring. Not bad at all for a first creepypasta, as I tell anyone starting to write, keep on writing, and keep on reading :)