Talk:Pokemon Aurora/@comment-25021327-20160731025708

This one wasn;t too bad. Nothing too jaw dropping for me, but I think it mostly worked for what it was. The tone had a pretty consistent feel to me, not going for super spookiness, but just a sort of dark and somber feel. I also liked how nothing really supernatural happened here, that's always nice in a Pokémon pasta x3

The plot here worked for the length and pace of this one. It might have had more of an impact if the reader got to know the characters a bit better, That said, everyone seems to act rather naturally, in a manner that makes sense.

The main thing here while I was reading was grammar. Mostly the issue of uncapitalized I pronouns. It may seem like a silly thing to complain about, but seeing sentences like "i'm going to see what i can do" just really irks me. It makes me judge more harshly a story that might be good. I went through while I was reading and capitalized stuff, so it looks a little better now, but in the future I'd suggest paying a bit more mind to that shift key :)

In all, I thought that this one did a pretty good job at what it did, it's short enough to be a quick read, and it might tug on some readers' heartstrings.