Talk:Torture/@comment-4332975-20130414014128

Well that was...propagantastic. PETA would be proud.

Really though, the mindfuck aspect didn't do it for me. I had what was being referenced figured out after the middle of the first paragraph. Blame "Pokemon Black & Blue" for this, but it made the rest just come across as overly preachy and beating a dead horse, rather than truly creepy. Honestly, what would have made it work for me was to make the reveal that it was never meant to be a secret what it was. Instead, I personally would have ended it with. "I don't know why they think it...but they're right. I love them, love the blood. It's SUPER EFFECTIVE."