Talk:Deep in Kanto's Waters/@comment-25029585-20150103021745

I thought this was an okay story. The first paragraphs are a basic retelling of the story of Pokemon Red/Blue/FR/LG. While that may seem bad, I think it provides much needed background for someone who hasn't played Pokémon before, not that I think there's many people like that. There is one major thing that has to be fixed. The Missingno. event. It's not very eventful or detailed, which brings down any type of creep factor I could've had. And I didn't hate the ending that much, it was just, okay.

Though the fact that you made something new and fresh out a myth/creepypasta considered cliché most of the time, that does deserve credit.

Overall I think this gets a 7.4/10 from me, it's okay, but could be even better if it was more fleshed out.

Steel, The Mark of Insanity  02:17, January 3, 2015 (UTC)