Talk:Cursed Key/@comment-8470110-20150307155121

There's something about this story that doesn't seem right. It seems...rushed or unfinished. I'm not an expert on ritualpastas but I'll try my best for you.

The ritual steps seem to run on the best possible scenario, with the spirit called being very cooperative. The ritual also seems pretty low risk - high reward, with the caster in little danger to cause someone to die. Maybe if there were a section talking of possible risks or warning signs of the curse backfiring, that'd add more to this ritual (like maybe there has to be a very legit reason for you to want to curse an individual. If it's something as irrelevant like someone made fun of you that day at class, the spirit will curse you instead, along with a few people you care about).

I can see potential in this story, however it's missing (no pun intended) key factors of a ritualpasta. It seemed boring, to say the least. The states need to be raised, the rewards more tempting and the risk much more dangerous to make this really take off. Best of luck to you, my friend

Rating: 5/10

-Sshakenbakee