Talk:You Failed (Dark Cloud/Chronicle 2)/@comment-25021327-20140713030855

Although this creepypasta followed a fairly tried and true story arc, it was written well enough that can't complain about it. Aside from the fact that I wish we got to know the protagonist more personally, I'd say thing is a very, very good Pasta.

There were a few tense issues I saw. But, that being said, writing in first person present is quite trickey. i liked that narrative style, and the author's statements felt pretty real.

The pacing is pretty fast, but not more so that a lot of other pastas which are not up to this caiber, So I won't say anything about that.

In closing, This was a good Creepypasta. Thanks for writing Lindebree :) I'd like to see more of your work on here!