Talk:The Curse of a Hero/@comment-11079349-20140316160923

Good job on this. No I'm not just saying this because it was kirby, I didnt figure out it was kirby until "the king" joined him in his quest. There are a few notes I would like to make, though.

First, there are a lot of details that could have helped make this feel more interesting, not to say it wasnt interesting. They also might have made it more obvious, so I'm not going to say whether or not you should still add them

Second, when you started with what I'm going to call the "knight section" it became fairly obvious what you were talking about unless the person reading hasn't played Kirby Superstar. I must say, however, I'm surprised you made that nod towards superstar ultra with the knight going off to train.

Third, you had a few grammar mistakes like using "ought" instead of "out" and one spelling mistake, writing "the" instead of "they", which is actually understandable, unlike some mistakes I've seen.

So my rating for this is around 7.5/10? I'm not exactly sure. For people who've only played certain games or later games, this will be quite the pasta, but for people like me who've played most of the series, the answer comes fairly quickly. So, depending entirely on the crowd, it could seem like a perfect score or a complete failure.

My only question is this: I've never played the first few games, and so I have no clue as to who this first bully is supposed to be. Please verify.