Talk:One/@comment-9847798-20131101144553

I'd like to say that this pasta has a lot of room for improvement, but I also think that you had a lot of guts of modernizing a classic tale. However, I do think that it was a little bloated and in need of some cutting. Other than that, I gotta give you credit for trying something like this!

I don't give number ratings, but I'll give this an Pfft Its Alright with the possibility of being a Goood!