Talk:Sonic and Sega All Stars Racing: A Strange Update/@comment-28056358-20160510053624

Cliches and grammar aside, this isn't a half bad creepypasta, as far as Sonic ones go. Though, the police report seems a bit...jarring. It feels as if it throws the pacing of the story off. It's almost as if the style is just a bit too different to properly flow with the story.

I'm going to assume you meant "an antennae with a red gem", though I'm honestly not sure how any autocorrect "fixed" that to Athena. Eh. Maybe I'm just too used to ignoring my spellchecker when I write anything other than basic English.

All in all, I'd give this a 6.5/10. It's not terrible, but not that good either. The idea's there, and I like the concept (as much as I can like anything that draws so heavily from other stories), but the execution needs a bit of work.