Talk:My Dream Diary (Yume Nikki Creepypasta)/@comment-26480939-20170530201301

I guess I'll say that this is... interesting? It's the basic 'game drives someone insane' cliché that makes up the basis for this story. And while Yume Nikki is a disturbing game (and also a tad depressing when you figure out some more things about Madotsuki), I HIGHLY doubt that it would be capable of giving someone nightmares so bad that they would end up committing suicide over them. I would know from experience, I have the game myself and have seen LPs of it as well. What I've seen in the game is hardly worthy of getting nightmares from (but then, I'm not nightmare-prone in the slightest. Only had minor ones as a kid and most of my dreams were weird but not scary.) The real scare factor in the game is stuff you only find through implication breadcrumbs (or the wiki) and hints of info about Madotsuki's personal life with some of the effects (like her being prone to violence from the Knife effect for an example.)

On the other hand, the 'diary' style of narration works very well for a pasta based off of a game about dreams.

In the end, I give this a 6/10 Good but nothing earth-shatteringly so. There's no glaring spelling or grammar issues, so just work on not using clichés as well-worn as 'Game driving someone insane' and you can have a good future in writing stories.