Talk:Thank You For Playing Rayman/@comment-25021327-20151123234933

Well, this was an interesting gaming pasta! This one has a lot going for it as far as I'm concerned. The pacing is even and consistent, and moves at a pace that I enjoyed. It takes its time unfolding the story, giving ample time for descriptions, and player reactions.

I liked the writing style here, not overly dramatic like a lot of gaming pastas get, and generally having a conversational feel to it. Yet it doesn;t seem to force the issue that the narrator isn't acting like the typical creepypasta protagonist, which is a backlash that sometimes happens when people try to write more original characters. It felt natural to me.

The descriptions were well done here, and I was able to follow along very easily. The story presents itself in a way that anyone can pick it up. For instance, I have never played a Rayman game, yet I didn;t feel lost, or like anything was skipped over here. There were ample descriptions and context clues to allow me to follow along with no prior knowledge.

I, myself am a huge fan of screenshots and visual aids for pastas, and the ones here were great (in my opinion). Nice usage and editing of sprites that still looked pretty natural. The same goes for the tonal shifts in the levels, the dank and muddy colors didn't look as out of place as they could have, they looked like something that could actually have been used in the game. I appreciate the extra effort and I think it really pays off for the reader.

Of course, this one is going to get comparisons to the Godzilla Creepypasta, and I don't think that's a bad thing. I wrote a fairly long Metroid pasta with tons of "screenshots" myself, and personally, I really like the Godzilla pasta, so for me, that's a compliment. When I wrote my Godzilla-esque creepypasta, I was trying to take everything I liked about that story, and give it my own spin. I wanted to take elements of it, and ground them more in reality instead of having it go off the deep end like the Godzilla story does. I'd be interested to know if you had similar intentions :)

So in any case, I quite liked reading this one and checking out the pictures. There are a few typos in there, but nothing too distracting. THis one may be too wordy for some, and not action-packed enough for others, but I dig it :)