Talk:The Mountain Man/@comment-24082398-20150102233533

I'd have to agree with those below me, it was a goof mindfuck. However, I found it to be on the short side and in dire need of more detail and exposition. If it had a bit more meat to it, it would be more enjoyable. Seconding Incorrect3, the writing style doesn't really hook me in or anything. It seems like the writing in a 4th grader's books--very, very simple. It also didn't scare me much. Maybe this was due to the length--I find it harder to see things as scary if I'm just shoved into a supposedly scary scenario and left to my own devices. Also, those headers... 5/10: If you add more to the story and beef up the vocab, it would be very good. However, a good mindfuck alone isn't going to be enough to save this story.