Talk:Dream Eater/@comment-14341590-20140529200225

The description for the friend with the problems. You made it feel unbelieavle. Parts that are cliche and not needed: "He was dropped on his head when he was 4 years old." It just doesn't sound right... As for the rest of your pasta, it isn't written in the way I imaigned it. At the start, you make it interesting, kind of. Your middle part made me fascinated, and I really wanted to read-on. The problems in the pasta held me back...

6.5/10