Talk:Just Run/@comment-8470110-20131016041955

7/10

This was an interesting read. The concept of a dating simulator going evil is original as far as I've seen and it was very refreshing. However, even with that, I feel as though this story could have been improved. I wish there was more detail in the story as a whole. While I could see the world to were depicting, there were some details missing that brought the story down. I feel that was because of how short the pasta is. If it were longer and there were more backstory to Hikari, this could've been a 9. This was still a good read and I'd recommend it to people I meet. Good job!

-Sshakenbakee (Cameron S.)