Talk:I Won't Leave You/@comment-4332975-20130601042409

It's an interesting story, but definitely shows its origins in the flow of the narrative. Not saying that it's a bad pasta at all, but being taken from a freeform RP, it shows a great deal of character focus, rapid development of attachment, and lack of supporting plot threads that are typical of that form of writing. In a lot of ways, it feels more like a tragic love story, than proper horror, as the frightful elements are largely tangential, serving more to fuel the character interactions and otherwise not given consideration. That said, it is relatively well written, and I don't regret reading it. However, there are a lot of tense inconsistencies, which I found rather distracting at times.