Talk:Super Mario 3D World: There may only be one/@comment-25625305-20150408000324

Hmm... As a first creepypasta, this wasn't too bad. I felt it took a little too much inspiration from creepypastas like Sonic.exe, but it wasn't unreadable. It had minimal errors, two of them I noticed and fixed for your convenience. (I replaced "than" in "But than he said..." to "then" and capitalized Luigi in the last paragraph) My advice is that next time, try to avoid some of those overused clichés such as characters dying in excessively gorey ways. Obviously there is room for improvement as no one gets things perfect on the first try (it took me ages to even write a slightly decent creepypasta XP), but it certainly wasn't awful. Nice work and keep improving!