Talk:Newly Single - A HuniePop Creepypasta/@comment-6794436-20150601190209

Damn, this was twisted...

Good: There was a lot of good here. For starters, the images were all great and seemed quite believable, with the exception of the ones with Erryn in the black shirt, as they seemed a bit less realistic. This was writen great, with only a few minor typos here or there, but nothing too serious. I really enjoyed the way the pasta was written, with the bulk of the story being the game, but emails in between that slowly unwraveled the true story. I also loved how none of the characters were really the bad guys, but nobody was really good either. Jeff was a drunk who got his wife killed in an accident, Erryn allowed her husband to drive when he was obviously intoxicated, and Kevin... well, Kevin was just a sick fuck. I actually ended up saying, "Kevin, you dickbag" out loud while reading it, as it almost seems like he was mocking Jeff in his emails. Another great thing about this pasta is that the majority of the accident is left vague, leaving the reader with the option to envision how gruesome the accident was on their own instead of just being outright told what happened. The plot was also very unique, and you did a great job with describing the game, because prior to reading this, I had no idea what the game was. Overall, this was just masterfully written as a whole, and another great pasta by you that deals with topics many people would consider as taboo.

Bad: There weren't too many bad things about this pasta that I could see, but there were a few. The gameplay segments of the pasta, although near the end always containing key elements to the pasta, were quite boring, and led to me at one point skipping some of the gameplay and just getting straight to the emails, which were the best part of the pasta in my opinion. However, do not fret, I did return and read the part that I originally skipped so that I wasn't missing anything upon reviewing. I also feel as though the questions brought up could've gotten a bit unnerving sooner, and also that they could've been a bit more creative and creepy in general. The only other complaint I have with this pasta is at the point with the glitching out screen. That part could've had a lot of potential, had it been moved to a further point in the story and maybe had some type of odd image embedded within it. Then again, that's just what I think couldv'e been done with it.

Verdict: 8.5/10- This was another great pasta by you that deals with taboo subjects yet still delivers an overall engaging story. There were a few minor flaws here and there, but I still feel as thought this was a greatly executed and enjoyable pasta. (Also, sorry it took me so long to review this!)

-Incorrect4