Talk:Don't Stop Playing (creepypasta)/@comment-25600374-20141030162015

Right. Time for some criticism. First off, the grammar was appalling. It was all over the place. There aren't full stops when there should be, sentences flow awkwardly. The whole thing is a mess. And that ending was bullshit. You can't just say "I DELETED THE SPOOKY AND THAT'S THAT". You need to have an ending that leaves the reader feeling something. Scared, Worried, Upset, ANYTHING BUT DISAPPOINTMENT... Good god. And don't get me started on the plot. LOL I GOT AN IPOD BUT OH NO IT'S HAUNTED SPOOKY. Bottom line: It was Shit 0/10