Talk:Beyond the Field/@comment-7706473-20130409033552

Hmrn... I'm somewhat mixed on what to think of this. It's very well written, the main character is believable and the situation is believable. Glitch City is strange enough as it is, and very little needs to be done to make it a place where scary things occur - things that stay with the player long after the fact.

But. On the other hands - I feel this could either benefit from being a bit longer, or perhaps maybe breaking out of the Glitch City and seeing offer strange permutations to PkMn Blau. The horror that happens to the narrator feels a bit too much like the game is effecting them as opposed to a 'I'm scared and having scary dreams' for my tastes. On the other hand, I actually liked the ending. Scary, perhaps glitched or haunted game? Screw that, I'll just go play something else. Heh.

The last line is pretty good, too. We don't always WANT to push the boundary of whatever is out there, and it's nice to see a story where people avoid looking for comfort and some peace of mind. I'll give it an Elm - it reads well for what it is, and avoids falling to convenient pitfalls - instead remaining true to it's vision, and yours.