Talk:Fallout 3: The Man/@comment-24082398-20150604201800

Hey, a Fallout pasta.

What was good? The length seemed alright, and the concept was good. Although nothing too revolutionary, the concept of Fallout predicting a future war is a pretty eerie concept in and of itself, and if it were expanded upon, it could make for a very good pasta. The phenomena in the game was alright as well, but I felt it could've been added to to make it even more creepy and strange.

Now, onto the bad. I feel as if you were really, really trying with this one, but it just didn't pay off. The phenomena, as I said before, could be expanded upon, as only a shadow of a man doesn't make a game inherently creepy enough. The cliches that make me mad most are also present here. To name a few: The game from GameStop being hacked and mentioning other creepypastas in your work. There were also a few typos and such.

Overall, I give this a 5/10. Interesting concept and premise, but just not creepy enough to deliver. Keep writing, I'm sure you'll find an idea that you can really sink your teeth into.