Talk:An American Tail: F.M.M/@comment-11366536-20150726061602

Hoo boy, another absymal creepypasta. Days like these just keep getting better and better.

For starters, the Introduction is very confusing and weird in some places. Not to mention that it brings up some rather obvious cliche's (I loved cartoons as a kid, but then I lost interest) Also, the lack of explanation for the stories events immediately are present. How did the DVD get onto the Stick without the Grandpa knowing? Unexplained events are just everywhere in this story.

But oh no, as if the story couldn't get any more worse, the middle portion had to kill any hope of the story being good. The cliche's are everywhere, and they are extremely prominent. The Grammar begins to take a downfall for some reason, which makes the plot and story feel rushed. The Ending is just, oh-god quality, and the 4th-Wall Break in the ending just doesn't work or make any sense.

Verdict - 2/10 (Horrifying)

I'd like to suggest reading the New Writer Guidelines as I hope it will aid you in all future creepypasta attempts.