Talk:For the Lost Ones/@comment-25021327-20141123022105

I pretty much enjoyed this story. It's a little different than the typical "my game shot blood out of the screen" pastas. It's a bit more thoughtful, and a little less dark than a lot of others. The story doesn't really do anything groundbreakingly original, but I thought it was kind of a nice repreive fro the blood and guts stuff I happen to be finding lately.

The writing was done fairly well, without too much in the way of spelling or grammar flubs. Nothing distracting anyway. I found some of the word choices odd, but again, not distracting.

The Suicide thing does kind of come out of nowhere, and was honestly really jarring to me as a reader. There was no buildup to that kind of plot device at all beforehand, then, Bam! suicide in yo face. But I did feel that it was handled fairly maturely as far as writing about what happened and going to the psych hospital (I also liked the more realistic depiction of the psych ward. They aren't all like the one's in movies!)

The in game stuff was okay. Like I said, nothing too surprising, but noting bad either. I guess this one caught me while I was in the right mood.