Talk:The Stalking Mimic/@comment-6794436-20150709163104

Meh...

Good: This pasta obviously had a lot of effort put into it, as it does have at least an engaging story and a cohesive plot. The pasta wasn't too long, and it wasn't too short either, so it felt like it was written at the perfect length for a pasta like this. Also, this appears to have been written quite well.

Bad: There were numerous grammatical errors in this piece, such as unwarranted tense changes and the wrong "there" being used. The plot felt pretty cliched, as it essentially just felt like the majority of other haunted doll pastas that I've read. The ending was god awful, and incredibly abrupt. That part of the pasta ruined whatever semblence of creepiness was there, as it just really made no sense and was laughable. Voodoo? Really? That's pretty much Child's Play, and also, that part of the story ruined any realism that was present in the story. I know I shouldn't be expecting a story about a haunted doll to be realistic, but still, I'm 90% sure that voodoo can't make you grow claws and turn you into a demon. Surprisingly, the thing that bugged me the most about that whole segment is the very last paragraph where the narrator just brushes off the "loon" going hysteric in his own house. It just didn't fit at all. Overall, this just felt like a run of the mill haunted doll pasta, except this was arguably a bit worse than your average haunted doll pasta...

Verdict: 5/10- The pasta itself really wasn't groundbreaking or all that great for that matter. Haunted Dolls normally tend to be incredibly cliched, but this pasta, although still cliched, wasn't as cliched as many others in the genre. I would link you the New Writer Guidelines, but I already linked those to you in the chat, so there's really no purpose for it. Still, I see promise in you as a writer in the future, (hell, you remind me a lot of myself back when I wrote my first pasta) and I can't wait to read more from you.

-Incorrect3