Talk:Facade/@comment-24747574-20140827075337

Actually not bad. Not the type i enjoy, but its a good story. Well written, structurized, no clichès and a clean ending with any "I will never play PC games again" bullshit.

You need to get it into paragraphs though. Maybe flesh out the middle part, where you play the game normally for a while, but then it escalates.

Good idea, good execution, bad formatting.