Talk:As I Stand Here/@comment-5675310-20140112233550

As I Stand Here, I realize this isn't a bad pasta.

Description: 5.5/10 - Things were detailed and described alright. With this kind of writing I don't think you necessarily have to have a lot of detail about the setting, but when you're writing about an extreme anger and change of mind, you should really take the time to focus on describing how that anger and change felt. There were also quite a few grammatical errors, especially nearing the end. However, it still wasn't bad.

Plot: 4.5/10 - Overused, and cliched, along with a poor ending. It was extremely cheesy at many point, and the dialogue felt very fake.

Entertainment: 5.0/10 - Short, but a little sour.

Pros and Cons:

+ Average, but not bad

- Overused and cliched plot

- Needs better emotional description

- Ludicrous ending

- Odd quality drop

Overall: 5.0/10 - Mediocre.

"It doesn't do anything special, but it's not bad."

- Marcus