Talk:Join Me/@comment-25021327-20151128024700

I don't exactly think that this one was bad, but it feels very forgettable to me. I didn;t really see anything too unique, or anything that made it stand out among other pastas. It's a fairly standard gaming/ghost story, which again, isn't a bad premise, but it's hard to make it feel fresh. I know that there was the other angle about the narrator possibly imagining all these events, but that feels a little uninspired to me as well.

The pacing here felt a little jumpy at times, but wasn't too bad. There were a few typos here and there, and I had to reread a couple of words to get what was being implied, but it wasn't to hard to follow. There were a few things that did feel odd to me, the way the story reads makes it seem like Herman was diagnosed with cancer and died only three days later, I'm not sure if that is what was meant to be implied, but it makes it feel a bit rushed to me. Also, the dialogue in which Herman's spirit and Daniel are arguing and which ends with "Okay, then go make a sandwich" felt bizarre.

So this one, for me, was nothing too special. It feels kind of forgettable, and I didn;t feel too pulled in my the events or characters. There might be something worth exploring and expanding upon with this, but as it is, it just feels average and unmemorable to me. Sorry if this comes off harsh or discouraging