Talk:Umbreon/@comment-26480939-20161101031003

Most of my issues with this story were covered with BlazingOrichalcum's post, so I'll just give concrit:

'''Fix. The. Spelling. And. Grammar. Mistakes!'''

Proper nouns are ALWAYS capitalized in English. This includes Pokémon.

Eeveelution is misspelled multiple times.

Far too much overusage of ellipsises (ellipsi?)

"Umbr-" does NOT mean "Blacky". It refers to the umbra, the innermost part of a shadow.

No comment on the 'black being a lucky color in Japanese culture" part, as I don't really know much about that.

Many misspellings in the part where how to get the various Eeveelutions, including a nonsensical "glathe ice rock" part on how to obtain Glaceon.

Flameon? Dafuq is that? Oh, you mean FLAREon. Don't go using nonsensical names for Pokémon. Also, the Fire Stone is used for Flareon, not the Thunder Stone, which gets you a Jolteon.

This is just a few of the MANY mistakes I saw in this story. Fix those problems, pronto.

I docked a good amount of points (5) for the many spelling and grammar mistakes. Spelling errors REALLY piss me off. So even if a story is likable otherwise, if it has excessive spelling mistakes and isn't a trollpasta, I'll dock it a lot for that.

Also, I spotted the 'game events affect real-life' cliché in there, and it wasn't even used well. So a point was docked for that as well.

DAE Rating: 4/10 Needs improvement.

NOTE: I may sound angry in my crit, but I'm not, in all seriousness. I'm just easily irritated over spelling mistakes, as I am a major stickler for good spelling. So, please don't take this as a personal attack or anything. I truly am trying to help here.