Talk:Left for Suffering/@comment-25021327-20150516175511

16-May-2015- Adding a Needs work tag here. This pasta feels pretty standard, even a little tired. The story of the weird player contacting the narrator with strange noises and static, the semi-stalking of the narrator, Saying "You are next!" all feel pretty cliché.

There were some other issues here, some dealing with spelling or grammar, which were kind of distracting. One thing that jumped out was the line ''"It was 12 PM then, I kept playing until 6 AM so it's 6 hours none stop of killing zombies." ''FIrst off, 12PM to 6AM is eighteen hours, 12AM to 6AM is six. In addition, I believe you wanted to type "non-stop" there.

In all, this one feels a little stale, and a little confused. Things seem to mostly happen arbitrarily, especially the eding with the narrator rather quickly becoming crazy (I guess). It isn't awful, but I think it could use a little work.

As this page is now tagged "Needs Work," it will face deletion in about 9 days if it has not been deemed adequately improved pending another review.