Talk:Corpses/@comment-25021327-20150421130433

I spaced out the text into paragraphs, and fixed one or two typos. When posting again, please take a look and akes sure your piece isn't a big block of text, it's much easier for folks to read if it's in more manageable paragraphs :)

I didn't think this one was bad, it's quite short, but that can work sometimes. The premise feels a little tired, but that might just be the fact that I am personally zombie-ed out at this point. The descriptions here were good enough that I could pretty much imagine what was going on, but I would have liked to see a bit more description, and maybe a slower pace.

As this is now, It's kinda quick and forgettable, with some effort, it may be something a little more unique :)