Talk:Hanging Gardens/@comment-24240632-20130718065205

First let me say that this is extremely original and unique. With that said let's begin.

Description: 8/10 - It was great, but the overuse of certain words became obvious as I continued through the story. eg. "long black hair and some facial hair as well" If I were you I would've wrote something like "long black hair with some dark colored stubble leading down his chin" But maby I'm just over thinking it. You also had a few spelling mistakes. Overall considering your other stories I was a little dissapointed after reading some of your other stories.

Plot: 10/10 - Extremely original and executed basically flawlessly! Amazing job!

Entertainment: 9.75/10 - The tension always seemed to be seeping in and we all knew something was going to happen and I sure as hell know I couldn't wait to know what happened next! The problem once again though is that the words are overused at times and the description isn't quite as good as I thought it'd be.

Overall: 9.75/10 - Outstanding. Maby not the most descriptive and it has it's flaws, but other then that I see no reason not to give this a 10/10.

"This is the pasta that I've rated the highest for a reason. It's extremely original and the best pasta I've read in probably a month or two."

- Marcus