Talk:Pocket Monsters Alpha/@comment-4332975-20150720191546

Currently, this story has no setup, and a "stinger" ending that makes no sense. It's missing that all-important Something to tie it all together, and reads more like a writing prompt than a finished story. There needs to be some build-up, some tension, and some foreshadowing. This feels like it just completely skips the middle, and jumps right into the ending, without any indication of how we got there.

Moving it to the "Needs Work" category to be improved upon.