Talk:Mr. White/@comment-25021327-20160213235136

I found this one hard to follow. It's a quick read, and it has some interesting concepts in it. I quite enjoyed reading the part about Mr. White's cells morphing into a mouse and then into a black hole type entity. From that point it kind of feels like it loses some focus in an attempt to go for a "meta" tone.

It's strange to me that the "author" acknowledges that one of the paragraphs that was typed was not done so by him, or with his knowledge, but I imagine that's maybe hinting at what happens at the end? In any case, aside from a few bits of information (which the reader may or may not be meant to take at face value) there isn;t much meat to this one. Just a little description about what Mr. White is, and his association with The Illuminati. There wasn't much here to get me very spooked.

That said, I don't think this one was necessarily bad, it was just a little confusing to me, and Im not sure I entirely get it. The writing feels fairly competant, and the spelling and grammar are in pretty good shape, maybe a flub here or there but nothing too distracting.