Talk:The Cold Lead Killer/@comment-5675310-20140525024547

The Cold Lead Killer. No, no, I really don't have a fuggin' witty comment for this one. I REALLY DON- LARRY SCREW OFF MANG. I KNOW YOU'RE MY WRITER, BUT I CAN LIVE HOW I WANT DAMMIT!

Description: 3.5/10 - So, this is how it goes now, huh? I hate to say this Mad, because I like you mang, but the writing in this is pretty bad. Tons upon tons of grammatical errors, screwed up lightning fast pacing that makes little to know sense, and narrative that's about as creepy as Pikachu wearing Ash Ketchum's hat. I'm sorry man, but most of this was just so poorly written that it would be difficult for me to give you anything past a three. However, I've seen many pastas worse, find comfort in that fact.

Plot: 4.5/10 - You know what, this could have been something, but it just ends up being another story with the barebones and nothing else. There's plenty of potential here, even if it is a bit cliche. It just wasn't executed right and goes by too quickly with basically no explanation as to what's going on. It feels like you're trying to achieve so much in such a small piece of writing that it's almost impossible.

Entertainment: 4.0/10 - Still don't know...

Pros and Cons:

- Grammatical errors

- Horrible pacing

- Barebones story

- Too short

Overall: 4.0/10 - Bad.

"I can see the potential here, and there's quite a bit of it. I just wish that potential could have been realized by the author in a different light."

- Marcus