Talk:South Park: The Spanish Inquisition/@comment-25400723-20150609234509

Y'know, for a fairly short LE pasta, this was actually pretty good.

So Selto pretty much pointed out all the positives and negatives already, but hey I'll drop my own review.. Because I feel like it.

So I'll start off with the positive:

The story was formatted correctly, paragraphs contained 4-5 sentences and were evenly spaced. As far as I could tell there were no noticeable spelling or grammar mistakes, which is nice. The content is somewhat interesting and I don't think I've seen many Creepypastas written on South Park (so extra points for somewhat-originality). The story flows smoothly and isn't rushed which is something that I always like to see in a Pasta. And last but not least, THERE WASN'T MANY CLICHES. I don't know how many cliche-ridden pastas I've had to review, but let me tell you it's no fun reviewing them.

Now onto the negatives:

First off, I think that this could've been made a little longer than it is. I mean, it's a pretty good length for a short story, but you could have added some more info in. Second, as Selto referenced, the "disturbing" part could have been made.. well more "disturbing". A guy being burned at the stake isnt so bad, especially if the show you're watching it on has basically no color. It's weird because Pastas I review usually have too much blood and gore in them, and here I am telling someone to add more XD. And there was a few grammar mistakes so naturally I'll have to call you out on that.

But besides the aformentioned points, this was pretty decent overall, but it didn't really do much in terms of "Groundbreaking Originality".

My rate? 7.5/10

Good Job!

~KingoftheUnderground669