Thread:Urkelbot666/@comment-26268104-20150826235822/@comment-25021327-20150913001857

Well, I think (this is just me, personally) that it seems to move along a little quickly. There isn't much here, so I can't make too many comments about it. I felt it was a lottle odd to have the Father referred to as both Scott, and dad, but again, just a personal thing.

Also, I imagine this will be addressed at some point, but the whole 'oh yeah, and my brother is black" thing kind of came out of nowhere and felt a little funny in the context of the whole father dying thing.

So yeah I still like the concept, and I'm not sure how long a piece you are shooting for, so the pacing might be appropriate fr what you have in mind, but it's a little quick for me.