Talk:What Made Him This Way (Sonic.EXE Prequel)/@comment-25860700-20150824204355

In the shitty Sonic.exe canon, this story makes no sense, as you got the game around the time the Xox 360 and PS3 were released (2005-2006), which means that Kyle wouldn't have gotten the game at the timeframe you put the story in. As, Sonic Unleashed was out in 2008, and Tom is playing it in the godawful first story.

Another problem is the fact that you call Kyle, well... Kyle. In the original story, that was a made-up name for some reason (privacy I guess).

Other problems are that some paragraphs are actually walls of text that contain multiple paragraphs, grammar mistakes such as forgetting commas, I think there were a couple tense swaps, and just minor mistakes.

But, for all the problems your story had, I would still give it a 6/10, as it is the best Sonic creepypasta I have read, the best spin-off OC creepypasta I have read (not many good ones), and while I didn't find it that creepy, I still enjoyed it.

Take everything you've learned from this story, and build your own original story. And it doesn't have to be creepy, there are other sites to post original content. But, if you want to make a scary story, you have to put heart into it. I mean, that's what Team Silent did for all four original Silent Hill games.