Talk:South Park: The Spanish Inquisition/@comment-24082398-20150609231129

My first Lost Episode critique. Let's see how this one fared, hmm?

What was good? The idea was very believable, and that helped to sell the pasta a bit more than if it were any other show. A big concern I have with LE pastas is that they choose shows that are too mundane for the events that happen in them. However, South Park fits very well for this since most of the episodes are shocking in their content and imagery. I also enjoy how, although it did include some, this pasta deviated from the standard LE pasta format by not using buckets of gore or dismembered heads and such from the main characters. It also had decent length, so there's that.

Now, onto the bad. First and foremost, the events of the story are too mundane for a LE pasta, and especially so for one that was based around South Park. I expected more to happen in the 'disturbing' bit than just a man being torched. I don't think that would be very creepy at all--in fact, I believe it's commonplace in most adult shows to have obscene acts of violence such as that. Therefore the pasta wasn't very creepy, at least not in my eyes. On one hand, I'm very proud that you made a LE pasta and didn't use the tropes that pervade the genre like maggots on a corpse, but on the other, it just wasn't scary enough. There were also some grammatical errors and such, but other than that, I didn't find anything that really took away from the story.

I would give this a solid 5/10. An interesting premise that the execution doesn't capitalize on, and therefore makes it wholly less enjoyable than it would be. Don't let this discourage you. Keep on writing, I'm sure you can make something great.