Talk:Lost Reality/@comment-25400723-20141226065835

You know what? I actually did enjoy this. It was just a little too short for my likings, and the premise was a little too simple, but this was executed fairly well. There was a few cliches, but none really altered the story. The spelling and grammar is good (which is a breath of fresh air since all of the pastas I've read lately seem to have been written by Kindergartners).

Overall, not much to review, executed fairly well. But you might want to conisder giving the story some more length.

Overall rating: 7/10

Good Job!

~King