Talk:Shantae Passion/@comment-6794436-20150203183038

Eh... it's alright.. I guess..

Good: This story was much better than I expected after reading the first line, as starting stories off the way you started this one normally leads to a shittypasta. The grammar is alright, as is the build up. On a final note, this story isn't particularly creepy, but it isn't laughably uncreepy either.

Bad: This story is rather bland. It honestly doesn't really excel in anything. There are numerous cliches and it really is nearly identical to many other forgettable gaming pastas. Another huge problem with the story is that it is confusing. I have never played "Shantae", so half the time I had no idea what was going on. When you're using a game like this that not everyone has played, it is upon your shoulders to explain to the reader what the game is, how it works, etc., as without it the story really can't be creepy as the reader will have no idea what is going on.

Verdict: 5/10- This is just mediocre at best. It doesn't excel at anything and it is a bit confusing to someone who isn't a fan of the series. You should definitely check out the New Writer Guidelines, as this is your first pasta.

-Incorrect3