Talk:3 Colors/@comment-5675310-20140111222736

3 Colors define this pasta; black, grey, and rainbow.

Description: 7.0/10 - As I look over the pasta a second time, just to make sure I don't miss anything while reviewing it, I feel like the way you described things were very "I Love Scary Sories-ish". You did well using poetic language in an interesting way, making your story more enjoyable as a whole than your other pastas. This is because instead of using simple and plain words to try and make things interesting, you actually used some interesting vocabulary throughout the story. The way you used the words were very odd, but in a good way, only making it more asthetically pleasing. Unfortunately there were a few hiccups here and there. There were a few sentences where you mixed and mashed words improperly, making the sentence make little to no sense, and you used some words two or three more times then maybe you should have, making it feel slightly repetitive. Still, this is a large improvement from your old, dull, and lackluster writing technique.

Plot: 5.0/10 - You have something rooting for you here, but not much else. While I can see the potential, it feels so wasted. Once again, I like this new writing format you've brought with the pasta, but the story itself feels almost non-existant. While I could dig really deep into the pasta to try and find some sort of forced story, I personally don't really feel like it right now. This feels more like a very deep diary entry in which the person expresses his/her feeling about the world and the people around him/her. I'd say, it's a good prototype for a story that could really be great if the bare bones were actually there.

Entertainment: 6.0/10 - Pleasing to the eyes, with a few bumps, but it's short and sweet for what it is.

Pros and Cons:

+ Good poetic word choice

+ Good display of emotions

- Story feels very lucid

- Wasted potential

Overall: 6.0/10 - Okay.

"3 colors focuses on a persons emotions about the world, without really doing much more. The writing is pleasing to the eyes, and the emotions feel real, however which makes it a short and sweet read. This is a huge step up for Viper, and I hope to see more inprovements in the future."

- Marcus