Talk:In a Dream/@comment-25021327-20150626213618

I liked this one quite a bit. I found it to be a lot of fun, and was enjoying being led along on this one, awaiting the conclusion which I thought was quite satisfying. I was reminded of the famous joke; "Last night I had a wonderful dream! I was eating the worlds biggest marchmallow! And when I woke up, my pillow was gone..."

I thought this flowed pretty well, and was a pretty easy and quick read with the simple structure and rhyme scheme. Some of the lines felt a little bit cluky, but that tends to happen when writing rhyming poetry, and nothing felt too forced. The descriptions here were good, and evoked feelings of eating a nice, sweet, pulpy fruit after the satsfying crack through the rind.

It's short, quick, dark and fun, and I'm glad I read it :)