Talk:Purple/@comment-25021327-20150523131315

This one was a strong competitor in the April 2015 Mindfuck contest! I thought that this was a well written piece, simultaneously fun, and lightly tragic. This one in kind of short, but that works here, the story doesn;t overstay its welcome, but is able to convey all the information needed to make it effective.

I like character based stories, and I enjoyed this one in that respect. We aren;t given much information about the narrator, but what we are paints a pretty sympathetic picture, I think that the reader feels some of the fear and confusion going through the narrator's mind which is engaging, and also humorous when all is said and done and the circumstances of the situation are revealed.

The descriptions here were pretty good, not too heavy on detail, just enough to keep the flow moving. I think that anyone familiar with the source material here would be able to put together what is going on from the mentions of torches, bricks and caverns, but that doesn't really spoil the potential mindfuck, which I find effective because it bridges the gap between the world of the narrator, and the world of the readers as game players.

I might have chosen some different wordings here and there in this piece, and occasionally some of the descriptions, trying to give details while retaining a sense of mystery, felt a bit... I guess forced might be the word. But as a whole, I think this is a very good little story, a nice Minecraft pasta (Bonus points for the omission of Herobrine :D) and I enjoyed reading it initially, and again for this review :)