Talk:The Diary of Max Netherban/@comment-24181739-20150713171930

Well, this pasta is... terrible. Absolutely terrible on all merits.

Problem 1: GRAMMAR IS KEY

First of all... "Max Netherban was strangled by AN barnacle."

Sums it up, really.

Problem 2: PLOT IS KEY

There is none I can see. Then again, I dash Pastas 60% for their characters doing horrible shit.

Problem 3: CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT IS KEY

Where are the characters? This is also by far the shortest diary EVER.

 Final 'Ver'dict: 0.09 / 3.0, 3%, FAILURE.

"Please tell me this wasn't cooked."

-After