Talk:Camera Man Investigation/@comment-71.237.155.3-20150728000405/@comment-6794436-20150728000632

Bro, hit the reply button don't make a new comment each time you think of something.

First of all, your story cannot be taken seriously with the awful grammar you have here. Second, get rid of the laughable crap like the random gore. There really is no buildup and with such hilarious lines as "can I be your camera man", with the intention of being creepy, it just doesn't work. I know this may sound strange, but just adding in creepy elements with no tension or buildup doesn't make a creepy story. I've seen pastas like this done before, and actually done decently, this was made terribly.