Talk:Easy Assembly/@comment-25021327-20160509230213

Sorry it took me so long to get around to reading this! I've been busy and my internet has been crummy. Anyhow, I thought this one was pretty enjoyable. The descriptions were well done, helped to give the reader some insight into the thoughts of the protagonist.

I liked the overall vagueness of the story, although I felt like the end was somewhat abrupt. That could have been done by design though, and it doesn't necessarily detract from the impact of the story. The implications of a much larger tale are apparent here, but we get the juciest bit here on its own, short and sweet.

There were a few word choices I thought were odd, the one that jumped out to me was the line "He became palpable," as I'm not sure exactly what meanings you're going for with that. One or two minor grammatical errors, but certainly nothing that distracted from the story. I think the short length of this one really helps it. Like I said, it feels like a part of a much larger narrative, but that doesn't mean it feels incomplete or arbitrary. It gives the reader plenty to think about, but doesn't overstay its welcome. Nothing revolutionary in terms of content, but the style and execution made for a pretty nice little read :)