Talk:Latrodectus/@comment-25021327-20141201005913

I liked this story quite a bit. I enjoyed the back and forth chapter format. I must admit that when I realized the way the format was developing, I felt a pang of... anxiety? Literally two days ago, I was planning a story in my head told from the viewpoints of two interacting characters. Not that I can't still do it, I just thought I was being oh, so original, haha!

Anyway, Yes, I enjoyed this tale of two *ahem* "well-intentioned" semi-sociopaths. I enjoyed getting inside the heads of the characters who probably could have a genuine relationship on some level, if they weren't doomed to never be capable of any healthy relationships. Reading Jacob's version of the meeting, I was very excited to see how the ruthless Tanya would view his actions and intentions.

And therein lies some of the really pleasing comedy of this story. These people are so flawed that to see them put up their facades and interact makes for some great exchanges, with the reader knowing that each character's story is only half of a whole, and things will most likely not end well for either, or both.

I felt the style and pacing were pretty much dead on for this story. The pacing works well with the length, and doesn't drag, or leave too may unanswered questions (none that really need answering anyway). We get to know these characters well enough in a brief period, and then we get a consice tale of their meeting which pretty much wraps things up in a way that makes the story feel entirely self contained.

So, I'm glad that I saw thins and took the time to give it a read :)