Talk:Top Dog/@comment-25021327-20140922140305

I think maybe this story could use some work. It feels quite rushed, and leaves a lot of unanswered questions. The narrator is a 'scientist', but what kind of scientist? He/she mixes chemicals, but why? Why did they neglect their orders to mix carbon and sucrose, were they just curious? And after creating a hazardous gas, and running away, why was the boss just cool with you coming back to work?

These are just a few of the things that I was wondering as I read through this. Maybe go back through this after a bit and expand on the story. As I said it feels rushed and a bit lacking as it is now.