Talk:ROBLOX: Never/@comment-5763024-20130217211021

Quality beats quantity, but there just isn't enough. I understood what you were going for, but it was just too blunt. Maybe if it was a bit more descriptivee it would've flowed much nicer and then I'd be able to rate this. It has a good backstory to it, but no flow, no suspense, no mystery. You want to put the reader at the edge of their seat yelling aloud "NO DON'T GO IN". Well you get the picture. The cliche that was used was abit noticable, but otherwise it was a good first attempt.