Thread:Lazycaper/@comment-22439-20130303022624/@comment-6470295-20130303214855

I'll be deleting that from your page. Create a new page if you really want people to see your story.

Now, as to be read by Mutahar, i won't lie, your story is pretty bad. You might want to consider dropping the Italic, and working with paragraphs, and for the love of god, STOP THE FUCKING RED-PUPILS-ON-BLACK-EYES AND BLOOD. There are so many clichés in that bundle of words i can't even fathom it.