Talk:South Park: The Spanish Inquisition/@comment-6794436-20150610193318

There was a lot of buildup to this by Creeper, but was it worth it? Well...

Good: There surprisingly was a lot of good here, which is not something I can say for many lost episode pastas. The grammar was in pretty good shape. The plot is very unique, and I really feel like it had a lot of potential. South Park creepypastas are seldom done, and you had the balls to attempt to pull it off. The pasta itself seemed plausible in most regards, and I wouldn't be surprised if this was actually true. There also weren't an excessive amount of cliches, such as copious amounts of gore, distorted music, etc. Oh yes, and dem indentations are sexy...

Bad: This pasta really just was not creepy at all. By South Park standards, this really isn't that bad of an episode, and it certainly wouldn't warrant it being banned from YouTube and hidden forever. When I said it was plausible, I meant the idea of an episode similar to this ocurring is plausible, not really what happened in it. The animation isn't really good enough for the burning scene to have had any real impact or establish any creepiness. I was just imagining the same art style as South Park being portrayed, and that ruined a lot of the attempts at creepiness. A lot of this pasta is left unsaid, making it a bit confusing, even if you know a great deal about the Spanish Inquisition. The episode also never attempts any jokes, which is kind of a double edged sword in a South Park pasta. If there weren't jokes, then the plausibility of an episode like this being made is ruined, but if there are jokes, the creepiness is ruined. It's one of the reasons South Park pastas are seldom done. The pasta felt quite rushed, and certainly needed more added onto it, as that also would have helped explaining more. The attempt at somewhat of a twist ending really fell very flat, and the last paragraph really didn't add much, and I think the pasta would've been better off without it. On a final note, I feel as though images or media of some sort could've helped this, along with really just more development of the story as a whole.

Verdict: 4.5/10- This pasta really isn't bad enough for needs work, but it certainly isn't very good. This was a great idea to make a pasta about, but I feel as though the execution was pretty lackluster. Creeper, I can see that you're improving as a writer. This was much better, in my opinion, than many of your previous works. Is this very good? Hell no, but it certainly does show that you are improving as a writer. I can't wait to read your future works, as you seem to just be getting better with time.

-Incorrect3