Thread:Urkelbot666/@comment-5078598-20160104020620

I need help. I'm almost done with my next Creepypasta, but I need a read through of it so I can get some tips on how I can edit it to be better because I'm kind of doubting if what I have is suffice or not. Can you help me please? I also have some pictures I can show to help be a little more understanding, but I have to include them with the story. 