Talk:In Love With a Killer/@comment-25029585-20141227235038

''"I flew out the room at the speed of light." Please, teach me how to run. ''

This story, by no means is bad, bet yet I feel I've seen this done before. And, honestly, you didn't change up the formula that much.

"The killer is someone close to you, someone you wouldn't expect. The info piles up that it must be her, but you believe she's innocent. You eventually come to realization she is the killer, but it's too late. And then you're dead." Well... not in this particular story.

One thing I found quite well was the grammar. There were a couple of minor errors here and there, but I can forgive it for its length. The story also kept me involved in what was to happen next and there was never a plot point that overstayed its welcome.

I just feel that this might be more effective as a story if you didn't know the identity of the killer until the very end, or at least late in the story.

But overall, this was a good read.

FINAL SCORE: 7.25/10

Steel, The Mark of Insanity  23:50, December 27, 2014 (UTC)