Talk:SIN/@comment-11386456-20140118041833

Not bad. It was pretty well-written and clever what you did with the first letters of each paragraph. I would say that Lucifer's crafty evil-doing is decently represented here. My criticism would be that the idea itself doesn't seem very original, and is probably considered horror cliche by this point. Yes, it can be disturbing to hear the whispers of the devil in your ear and you did justice to the lord of darkness in his persuasiveness. But I prefer somewhat more modern ideas about good and evil, personally. For example, the idea that Satan isn't a supernatural being, but the personification of human selfishness. Don't get me wrong, I dig a good monster story from time to time, but I always like to include a human element to show that perhaps true evil comes from within. Just something to think about. Overall, I thought it was alright. 7/10