Talk:Online/@comment-6794436-20150119161027

Jesus Christ this is pitiful...

Good: It isn't a wall of text... yeah, that's about it...

Bad: This pasta is littered with numerous grammar errors in all aspects such as spelling and even capitalization! The pasta is a bit cliched with the whole news story thing, and the ending is just terrible. The pasta is also incredibly confusing in a few ways, such as the numerous grammar errors, the way you worded things, and how everyone is named in a code of letters and numbers. Albeit, the letters and numbers are short, I still have to scroll up the page every few seconds to see who is saying what. Also, there needs to be more categories.

Verdict: 2/10- This is just complete trash, and the only thing holding it up is the mere fact that it isn't a wall of text. How old are you? Because the large amount of errors in this pasta leads me to believe you are underaged for this site. If you truly want to make your pastas better, you definitely should read this convineintly placed link right here, as it will show you how to fix this pasta's many flaws.

-Incorrect3