Talk:The Trumpets of Angels/@comment-5675310-20140325012428

The Trumpets of the Angels call for a review, and one shall be received.

Description: 6.3/10 - A lot of the words that were in the poem were placed against others well, meaning that a lot of your word choice was good and really sets the tone for the story. However, there were points where some small prepositions weren't exactly necessary. Like when it said, "For I am a king," you could have easily gotten rid of the 'a' and the sentence would have flowed off the tongue much easier. You still have the occassional typo, and every single line ends with a period when it should be ending with a comma.

Plot: 6.5/10 - It was decent, interesting, overdone, and a little too melodramatic for my liking. Still, I'll try to keep my biased opinions out of this review. As I said, it was interesting, but it's been done so many times in the same fashion that it really doesn't intrigue any longer.

Entertainment: 6.5/10 - It's a shorter poem from you; though not your best.

Pros and Cons:

+ Some great word choice

- Some unecessary words

- Overdone in the same fashion

- PUT COMMAS IN, NOT PERIODS

Overall: 6.4/10 - Okay

"Every now and then I'll see some real improvements out of you Scary, and other times I don't; this is unfortunately one of those times."

- Marcus