Talk:Crack'd/@comment-25021327-20140927233950

This was definitely an interesting read. The writing style reminded me quite a bit of King in The Shining,

The narrator was a pretty relateable, not overly-sympathetic character, The pacing seemed fairly consistent (toward the end it seemed to lose or maybe just change focus) spelling, grammar, clarity, and format are in pretty good order, and I already mentioned the style.

Although I can't say that I entirely get the underlying themes, the metaphors of the ticket and the cracks, I enjoyed the on and off surrealism of the tale. I think it works either as a supernatural story, or a story of a confused man simply coming undone. I feel like all the answers are given at the end, but I think I missed some, and sometimes Iprefer to not know.

Like I said, I felt like the tone shifted quite a bit in the final 2 sections. I'm sure this was intentional, but it still threw me a bit, and sometimes happens in the short story format. One thing that has been bugging me, and if I'm missing something, I'd appreciate if you could clear it up; The photo is described as being taken a week before the dog died. We're then told that the dog died a month ago, so the photo is only 5 weeks old? Like I said, I could be missing something.

Oh, also this isn't a complaint, but more of an observation; The news outlets in this story are dicks! So is that group house father, just spilling all the beans about Geoffry's personaly mental problems to some slimy reporter.

I'll now end these ramblings. All in all, it was a nicely written story, and I'm glad to have read it. Hope you keep on writing :)