Thread:Refreshing Demise/@comment-6418997-20140403041623

The characters: seem very interesting and I would like to learn more about them. I think their speech though sounds a little off. I am hoping you create characters with deep motives and reasons.

Setting: it is very well explained and described. Being in the dessert addsmany details that can explain harsh conditions. It also explains what the characters themselves are going through.

Word choice: I don't know if this is in the future but it seems like it is. The talking sometimes seems out of place you may want to work on putting more meaning and emotion behind words.

Details: were fantastic, you can really see your effort highlighted, and I hope you add only more details. I could really picture the setting and characters.

One side note: I feel so special ;( one of the characters has me name ^.^ specialness overload  