Talk:Sonic's Mind/@comment-5025667-20130513031750

The number one problem with the creepypasta that detatches from the whole experience is the fact that there is a significant lack of detail put it, which also hinders the build-up and atmosphere of the story as well. The original Sonic.exe pasta focused a lot of its attention on trying to make the viewer disgusted with gory details of the scene you described in the story: the bodies of the dead animals in Hill Act 1. The most describtive you ever got was the killing of the squirrel, but you then just started to simply say that Sonic killed them all without descriving his methods or how long he took to do so.

Also, Kyle giving the disc to Tom seemed like an asshole thing to do, considering that he doesn't seem to have any care towards who he describes to be his friend or even thinking whether or not Sonic could perhaps even be lying and might kill him anyway (judging by the original pasta, this might be the case as Kyle is described to be missing or dead or as good as).

Score: 3/10