Talk:Halo 2:Oracle/@comment-25029585-20140619160035

Okay, this is not good, but not terrible. So, this is pretty short, which isn't necessarily bad. The journal entry content was pretty cliche, though. Just odd things happen in his old copy of Halo 2, except there's nothing creepy about those things.

"I noticed in "The Arbiter" Vel Vadam(Arbiters name)Was missing a mandible like the ship master in Halo 3.And his armor was gold,not silver."

See, that's not off-putting. Gold armor? Cool. The story also had a very abrupt ending because there was nothing creepy enough, for me, to think that he'd suicide over it.

Overall, 5/10, needs work, but I see effort.

P.S.- You forgot signature and categories.