Talk:What you find in the attic/@comment-25021327-20150311215714

This reads like a standard Haunted Game pasta, nothing too original, but not necessarily bad. The premise is the same as a lot of the stories around here, but that doesn;t automatically mean it isn't good.

The pacing felt fairly consistent until the last paragraph where there seems to be a lot of informations crammed in. It seems almost like there are more details about the strangeness of the games in that one paragraph than there are in the rest of the story.

This was a lot more readable than many first pastas I've seen. The spelling, grammar, and clarity were in okay shape (Some errors, missing apostrophes, but nothing very distracting) And in all it isn't a bad story. It just feels a little tired due to the elements used. There are so many stories about games randomly showing upsetting imagery that it can be hard to make them stand out among the crowd. I feel like this story might get lost in the crowd of other gaming pastas.

So, It isn't bad, it's a quick read, and it is better than a lot of other "first pasta" attempts I've read