Talk:The Truth of The End/@comment-11366536-20161124190503

Honestly, this story doesn't stand very well by itself.

The grammar and wording both get tenuous at times due to a majority of sentances being bastardized by Vietnamese-Translation-esque spelling errors. The pacing is very wavy, often starting with long sentances that drone on followed by a large series of "shocking" revelations. A large number of details are brought up in the story for seemingly no reason (Such as the Deep Web) which causes the plot to be incredibly confusing to understand. The ending was pretty much laughably stupid due to the unsurprising use of cliche's to close the story, and the scares were pretty much nonexistent due to the exact same reasons listed.

I'll give you this though, at least you were able to form some coherent form of a story unlike a majority of newbie writers on this wiki. Other than that though, this definitely needs a lot of work to polish it up.

Verdict : 3/10 (Bad)

Luckily though, judging by your ability to at least form a somewhat coherent form of a proper story, I'd say this creepypasta can be saved if edited and cleaned up enough. I'll wait a bit before adding the Pending Review tag to see if you can fix it up somewhat.