Talk:The House/@comment-7706473-20130930120256/@comment-7706473-20131001031703

Hrmn, I think the story - as is - is pretty solid, actually. I would add more, but I'm not sure what, exactly. The segment where whatever lurks in the house/the house itself begins it's rampage is pretty much perfect, though - if you add anything, I'd go over the first sections and see if you can create more character moments, perhaps? Adding too much'd detract from the crispness of the events, which flow really smoothly - the 'action' of the story never lets up.

Good job, especially for - if I read you write - your first pasta; proof reading is always less important then making a solid piece, I feel. You can catch errors like that after you've got the core finished, and sometimes errors can even turn out to be somewhat useful!