Talk:LMESKD/@comment-25021327-20150828011454

I thought that this was a very intriguing and well executed creepy story. I like the theme here (seemingly one of many) of insatiable curiosity, and I think that it is something that a lot of folks relate to. Whether it's something innocent like a child trying to count the stars, a guilty desire like reading a lover's diary, or the fascination with watching a VHS tape with six seemingly random letters on it, I think even the most humble of us has a little bit of that need to explore the unknown when it is laid out beore them. Regardless of what the outcomes may be.

The descriptions here, along with the vocabulary used were well thought out. I was never really at a loss when reading this to imagine what something looked like, or what a certain sound would have been, and I could tell that a lot of effort went into the process of creatively explaining surroundings, both concrete and surreal. If I had one complaint, it would be that sometimes it felt almost too much so, like some of the deescriptions felt a little wordier, and more far reaching than was necessary for the scene. But if anything, that's better than not having enough detail.

The pacing here felt god to me, it was the way I enjoy stories to be. That's a personal thing, too. I like when a story is a little longer than the usual Creepypasta length, but doesn't feel too bloated (some thing I feel I struggle with sometimes in my writing). Though, as I mentioned, some of the descriptions could have been cut down, I didn't think they really interfered with the flow of the story.

There were a few typos and grammatical errors throughout, but As I went through to read this a second time, I did a little proofreading, so they should be in better shape. If there is anything I changed that you don;t like, please do change it back.

I'm certain that there were a lot of themes, and subtexts in this story that have been lost on me. Sometimes I have trouble with identifying deeper meanings to things, though I can tell that they are there. And perhaps some of the subtext to this tale is meant to be open for interpretation. Even as a literal tale, it works well, and has some good dreamlike qualities. I especially liked when the dream-nurse explained that the doctor looked like the man from the store due to their "limited cast" of available actors.

In any case, I'll stop rambling now. I liked this story quite a bit. I've just read it twice to write this review, and I imagine I'll read it again at some point to see what else pops out to me. Nice work :)