Talk:The Room of False Innocence/@comment-24240632-20130914175400

The room ends up being a little funny looking.

Description: 6.7/10 - Not bad, but it feels vague at many points where you don't really have an excuse for it to be vague, and you use many words over again. The next problem is that I found it a little hard to understand what was going on in some parts simply because it was messy, but I'll talk more about that in the "plot" section. You also have some grammatical errors left over from your original pasta dinner.

Plot: 7.5/10 - Not bad for a mindf*ck. In fact I didn't even know what was going on until the end, Which is both good and bad. It's good because I never would've guessed the ending, (Which by the way was a nice giggle) but it's a bad thing because I found it hard to understand everyhting you were saying! I know this has a lot to do with how you write the story, but it also messes with the plot.

Entertainment: 8.0/10 - If the ending wasn't so good this section probably would've gotten you a 7.0/10.

Overall: 7.5/10 - Good.

"It's not a bad read, and you'll get a little giggle out of the end."

- Marcus

Oh, yeah and I'm back in the reviewing business...