Talk:Bentley the Yeti/@comment-6794436-20150115234906

This isn't horrible I guess... I mean, it certainly isn't great, but it isn't terrible...

Good: Well, the pasta has decent grammar, as there were very few errors in that aspect. The story also has a decent premise, and isn't written horribly like most other pastas recently. The spacing is nice and you took it upon yourself to add categories, once again something most newer users don't do.

Bad: This pasta isn't really all that creepy, which is a shame because it truly has potential to be something genuinly creepy. This story also is a bit short for my taste, and it definitely could use some "meat" to it. Also, as a bit of an outsider to Spyro, this story is a bit confusing, although I'm sure if you are a Spyro fan this pasta would make sense. However, a truly good pasta should be clear to all who read it, instead of only the people familliar with the source material. Also, I feel as though I should add that the ending makes you sound a bit pretentious, as you proclaim that the reader will, "never look Bently in the same way again", which isn't really true to the majority of people.

Verdict: 5/10- This pasta is just pretty mediocre, with nothing too bad about it, but at the same time nothing too good. If you want to improve your writing, you may want to take a look at the New Writer Guidelines, as they should aid you in all of your future writing endeavors.

-Incorrect3