Talk:Weird disc of GTA SA/@comment-11366536-20170510151619

It's very bold of the author to try to tackle a creepypasta about a game of this kind of nature, given that San Andreas is already meant to be a violent game as it is. Unfortunately, as much as it tries to make it creepy, this story just didn't really make the cut. Old cliche's such as the exaggerated use of blood, hyper-realism, the game being brought at a garage sale, and the author saying he's "ALWAYS BEEN A SUPER HUGE FAN OF GTA" cause the story to tire out really fast. Not to mention that the grammar is subpar for the most part, causing the story to be somewhat difficult to read.

The other thing that really irked me is the weird bits of unnecessary information, such as a part where he goes on about being a "CEO for a company named Ubisoft." Not a simple low-earning employee or not even just some random gamer dude, just literally the CEO above all else. Not only does this matter, but given this, why would this person even be buying stuff from a garage sale in the first place? It doesn't make any sense in a meaningful way, and it seems like it was placed there just because, I guess. This is a recurring trend in a few places throughout the story.

If there was anything I liked about this story, it was the concept of it being a foreign game. I haven't seen or heard of many gaming pastas where the main character finds the foreign version of a game, and I thought it was cool and creative and could've lead up to some more mystery had this story been more thought-about and written better in general. Perhaps the game could've been an unreleased foreign version of San Andreas, or something along those lines. Either way, it's a nice concept, and one that I really liked and wish that you'd tied into the plot better.

tl;dr Version - Too many cliche's, meh grammar, redundant plot, and needless information. However, I did appreciate the "Foreign Game" idea, the fact that the plot is at least somewhat interesting, and the fact that there's at least some effort going on here to make something. Overall, I'd say this story is at the very least decent.

Final Verdict - 5/10 (Decent)