Talk:Eric/@comment-11139677-20140428023855

I'm sorry but..I fail to see why this was Creepypasta of the month. First of all, it's hard to read because it's almost entirely written in wall of text. Seriously, there's almost no spacing.

Second, the character "Eric" is FAR too similar to Funnymouth, in the concept of saying creepy things with bad grammar and making nonsensical actions. If he was given a more original personality, it would be a lot better.

Now, the premis of some weird guy coming into the animal crossing town is..well, pretty good. The ending, I must say, was...well, amazing. I didn't see it coming and really..it wasn't eerie or gorey, it was just sad, but in a good way. That's really where the pasta shines, the general plot.

But. You need to fix the wall of text and thin out the details at the beginning. Or, well, you should. But this does have potential to be a great pasta; but it's formatting makes it rather hard to read and could be a big turnoff. (In fact, to be honest, I left at first when I saw the walls of text, but came back to read it again..and really, I'm glad I did.

Now, let's go back to thinning out the details at the beginning. There's so much wihtout anything related to what makes it a pasta that..it just gets boring. I'm glad I read past that part,but..that part of the pasta, if anything, needs improvement. It's just kinda..boring as it is now. It's good that it doesn't start with "I'm a big fan of Animal Crossing and I had tons of nostalgia" or something like that, though.

7/10 Needs work, but pretty dang good.