Talk:Elder Scrolls V: Skyrim - Isabel My Love/@comment-5025667-20130705193540

Alright, now that I had much more time for reading and writing, I read this, as you could probably tell and well...I liked it for a first attempt. It isn't exactly perfect, but it was well writtena dn avoided a lot of cliches that it could of had for a story like this. The save files being deleted might be a bit overused but I can let it slide.

The main problem I had however was the lack of detail. It never explains what or perhaps even WHO Isabel is, and it irked me a lot. There needed to be some sort of explanation of some kind to her existence, or it sucks some of the creepiness away. There's a line between vauge and subtley to not explaining it at all, because as it stands, the ending felt really inconclusive to me. This is probably my only gripe, as the rest of it is personal nitpicking at smaller details.

In conclusion, not bad at all for a first attempt, and I do wonder what your next pasta is going to be. 7/10