Talk:Elemental Wars/@comment-6470295-20130216045228/@comment-6470295-20130216183421

So, this is pretty good as with all of your work. It is, however..A bit more random and quite a  bit more gorey. Before i begin..I  just want to say that the part where his gamecube is broken because a CAT PUSHED IT OFF is complete bullshit. xD Gamecubes are solid as fuck, from my experience with a very evil cat. Also, the "It sounded like..it was giving birth..".......HOW DO YOU KNOW WHAT A DRAGON GIVING BIRTH SOUNDS LIKE?! D:

Those two things out of the way, I'll go with the same reviewing thing as with Wii are Twisted.

That is, evaluating Cliché-avoiding, General Storyline, Creepiness, and Build-up.

As with last time, we'll start off with what i believe is the most important; Build-Up:

Now, while there's a good bit of text before the creeps begin, i kinda wish the game was normal for a little while before going apeshit. That being said, the build-up is still there, and it worked pretty well.

8.5/10.

Now for General Storyline.

In the three pastas you have posted so far, i have learned that you're a genius in this departement. The story progresses smoothly, and is pretty neat.

9/10.

LET US GET OUR CREEPINESS ON

This..I don't have much to say. It was creepy, it progressed smoothly, the build-up was there, and that ending was rather great. I'm sure Aaron enjoys insanity.. But yeah. The I've said everything i have to say in the previous points.

8.5/10  here.

And then finally, we arrive to Cliché-avoiding, the second most important thing.

Now, i won't lie--The hyper-realism-o-meter is tingling. And the gore-o-meter too. That being said, the story is long enough to where some blood and one or two "It looked realistic." lines don't matter that much. But still, clichés are clichés, and for this, you earn a modest  7.75 in this category.

This all adds up to an excellent 8.4375 out of 10. I really like your stories, but you'll still have to work harder if you want to ever beat Funnyface in my heart. :3