Talk:The Magnificent Seven...Game/@comment-25021327-20160129040019/@comment-9281274-20160129134345

Trust me, you didn't come off as a dick. :)  In defense of my pasta I will say that the mix of surreality/reality was meant to be jarring. You see stuff like the additional TVs and extentions of the mansion and you're like "Oh, this is supernatural" and you read the final misfortune and think "Oh, Johnny's magically losing his fingers while the kid is supernaturally getting those bumps" you're meant to think this way. But then the ending line comes and you're like "Holy shit! That last misfortune wasn't magical at all, they just went full on London Gangster on his ass!

I will say that the idea to have the narrator be a form of mob enforcer came a little late in the process which probably didn't help the tone. I will say though that I did intend for ther supernatural thing to be incosistent.

Reason 1: For the jarring effect as I explained earlier.

Reason 2: This is probably the second time I've actually gone outright surreal and supernatural (the first was Collect for Christ). Yes, there were hints of it in Odd Occurence and The Maze but both could've easily been explained with a realistic explanation. Here it's outright mentioned that spooky shit is going down.

Reason 3: I was going for a more Grimms Fairy Tale Creepypasta mix. If you think about it, this pasta fits the criteria of an old Grimms Fairy Tale morality story.

I'll admit that the mean spirited aspect of it (AKA what happened when I decided the motivations of the Narrator) was a bit odd but then again I just like to write dickish characters sometimes. This is probably the second time I've written an outright mean spirited character (My Average Day is the first).

So there, hopefully this lengthy comment explained everything. :)