Talk:Super Mario Bros. 8 Pages edition/@comment-5358960-20130602163108

If you don't like CreepyPastas why are you writing one? Lolxd, anyway, you have a good draft here. Lots of ideas, a cast of characters, even some 8-bit slender pics. Plus you paid attention to personality which is good. All you need to do is revise it into a final publishable state, fixing only the nitpicky things like " No not a HYPER-REALISTIC Slenderman, an 8-bit Slenderman standing on the same row of blocks as Mario.". Just your senetnce format really. Good story, overall.