Talk:The Age of Seasons/@comment-24240632-20131116084009

The age of half-decent pastas.

Description: 5.0/10 - Everyhting was described okay, but there were way too many grammatical errors here. You especially seem to have a problem with past and present tenses and figuring out when and where they should be put. You also need to split up your paragraphs quite a bit more. Run on sentences, too many ellipses in one place, sentences that don't make sense, etc. Other than that things were described alright, but you could still use some work in this area. Try and describe what everything looks like, how the player felt and so on next time.

Plot: 6.0/10 - It was alright. There were times when it seemed like you were trying too hard to avoid cliches, and there were other moments where it seemed as thought you weren't even trying at all. The overall story is pretty common, but this one was rather confusing and a little thought provoking, which I kind of liked. I think you could've dragged out a lot more with the boss fights and the intense moments, because just saying they happened doesn't really add much effect.

Entertainment: 5.0/10 - To be honest, I was pretty bored reading this. Even though it would be better if you dragged some things out more, I think the overall concept would be much more interesting if there was something new added to it.

Overall: 5.3/10 - Mediocre.

"Although it doesn't do much in the way of originality, it's not bad."

- Marcus