Talk:Time Step 2/@comment-4332975-20130318210713

There's a few minor hiccups in the writing, like some redundant phrasing in the beginning, but it's not too bad. It's a bit borderline feeling at times, but overall, I actually liked it. The descriptions weren't fully detailed, but they weren't so vague that it took me out of the story either. I thought I knew where the story was heading at times, but while bits of that showed up, it never fully got there...and I actually like that it doesn't end on anything conclusive or final. As a story about a mysterious menace of unknown origin (if I may alliterate a tad), it's quite interesting. If it had gone into the "people dying in real life" tangent, it would have cheapened it.