Talk:Mauvais Appetit/@comment-28348041-20160503181855

I think with a small re-wording of the last line, it could be great. At first I thought it was about birth, but it's a nice interesting concept that is decently written, and doesn't outstay it's welcome. However, I didn't feel shocked or scared, it was more like a "oh cool" moment rather than a shiver up my spine moment.

6.5/10 from me, intersesting concept, but not scary, which is the intent of a creepypasta. Good effort.