Talk:Deux: Soup For 2/@comment-5675310-20140101205756

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Description: 4.5/10 - This is where the story ultimately fails. Things are described alright, but had some odd pacing issues along with a lot of grammatical errors. Every paragraph is a run-on sentence, and a lot of the eyes aren't capitalized. Now, if we're talking about the pacing, you need to work on relaxing a bit and taking the time to detail everything and just slow down a little bit.

Plot: 5.5/10 - Although this is far from uninspired, there are some problems. In Sombrero Wearing Dinosaur it was interesting to see how the story just got more and more gruesome after each rewind, while leaving you with mystery. However, in this story, it feels like you left too much mystery to the point that I was questioning what the entire story was about.

Entertainment: 5.0/10 - Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat?

Pros and Cons:

+ Tries to build upon a good idea

- Odd pacing

- Too much mystery

- Grammatical errors

Overall: 5.2/10 - Mediocre.

"Although it falls extremely short compared to it's spiritual successor, doesn't mean you should just ignore it."

- Marcus