Talk:Forever Alone/@comment-6418997-20140104050020

for your first pasta this is pretty good. I think you could have made this a good plot twist but with what you did it was great. I think you could have added more personailty to the character also make this longer. I would like to see him express more emotions such as denial, hate, love, saddness. I did like how the character started losing hope though. I dont like the food reference for some reason. overall 7/10 pretty descent espically for your first pasta :D