Talk:April 12th Mind Story/@comment-24181739-20140703212234

Okay, this Pasta deserves quite a lot of praise.

Praise 1: The pacing is extremely well done, it feels like you're in the story.

Praise 2: That is a serious mindfuck. That just... It was all schizophrenia? Sweet twist!

Praise 3: The pasta was well written - the grammar was amazing, the sentence structure was good, and the feel was right.

There ARE a few drawbacks!

Drawback 1: This Pasta is this: Just. Too. Long. I didn't expect someone to make this long of a pasta, and when it does happen, I dash points off it. It's a CHORE to read, and I ended out with a headache, and my internal system crashed.

Drawback 2: The ending... The ending just fucks the whole plot up. Why does that happen? I love my mindfucks, but seriously, parents shouldn't test that!

9.95 / 11.59, 85.85%, or a B-.