Talk:Joy/@comment-6794436-20150524235409

Hmm... a Skyrim pasta... I haven't seen one of those since Blood Knight's Retreat...

Good: This pasta had a unique plot, as there really aren't that many ES pastas out there. This pasta also was pretty realistic for a gaming pasta, which is a refreshing change from the norm. Also, as I said before, there were indents after each paragraph, so great job on that. There was the occasional typo here or there, but nothing too serious. Also, this pasta has decent size, not long enough so that it feels as though it drags on, or short enough that it feels rushed.

Bad: This pasta, in my opinion, really just wasn't all that creepy. Although it may have lowered the amount of realism, I feel as though some more creepy elements would've been added in. This pasta also wasn't written very well, as there weren't too many instances when advanced vocabulary was used, and the absence of that can actually somewhat ruin the flow of the story. The descriptions in the story were just good enough that I could imagine what was going on, but they definitely could've been better and certainly need improvement.

Verdict: 5.5/10- This pasta was alright. It was quite realistic, and there weren't too many flaws, but it could've benefitted from some better descriptions and a bit more creepiness.

-Incorrect3