Talk:Bury the Revolver/@comment-7706473-20140611114324

Fantastic work! I'm glad I missed this because finding a gem that I missed in my absence is kind of like getting a present when it isn't even my birthday. I absolutely love Westerns, too, so this is the best thing. Since you asked for constructive criticism and you know that I love to ramble, let's get this started!

The use of music to accentuate the story was wonderful. I love adding music to my larger pieces, and I've always felt that even though I haven't recieved too much criticism or praise for the mechanic, it makes them more vivid. Given that this was a classic ghost story as well as a western, it only made the eerily desolate feel grow stronger; great stuff.

Given that the story is broken up into several chunks, I felt that the pacing was pretty good, too. I kind of wish it was easier to customize headers; if I was feeling more artistic, no, if I were more artistically inclined then occasionay slapping things together in paint.net and calling it a day, I might try to make something more thematic. This story feels as if it should have opening and closing credits, ha.

This is also one of the few stories that works so well with the ending twist, which I'm going to leave unspoiled for people who jump to the credits, but... Nice. Rosemary and recollection for a haunting tale along the road.