Talk:The Home Run Killer : The Good Old Days/@comment-6794436-20150413191638

Finally, the sequel arrived! Is it as good as the first though? Well....

Good: This had some pretty decent pacing, and the story had great length. There was also some great vocabulary here too, and it was quite suspensful. The fighting scenes were also a great improvement over the original, and of course, this had the same, classic charm of the old Home Run Killer Story.

Bad: This story had a few flaws. There were numerous grammar errors here, and some parts didn't make a lot of sense. There were also a lot of tense changes that eventually became a nucence. There were also random names thrown in out of nowhere such as Aleixi (sorry if I spelled that wrong) who weren't given any context and just thrown in. Speaking of which, a lot of the characters like Mark should've gotten a lot more build up before the climax. Also, there should've been much more mention of Tulo's past, as it was marketed as somewhat of a prequel. This pasta also falls into the same trap as your previous one, as the narrator dies at the end, or it is at least implied. Also, th erFinally, this isn't as creepy as your previous pasta and is more centered around action scenes.

Verdict: 6.5/10- This was quite good, but it could've been better in a multitude of ways. However, this was quite good and was a great read. I can't wait to read the final installment!

-Incorrect3