Talk:Shantae Passion/@comment-16328098-20150203164129

Well, i was somewhat pleasently surprised with this story. Far from the best i ever read, but its passable. The intro made me instantly worry it would be 100% awful and unreadable, a poor excuse for a story, but instead what i got was a pretty okay story. The part where you mentioned it not being a haunted game felt a bit akward, though. I do like how its just someone's messed up fan game, and theres no "HYPER REALISTIC BLOOD AND SONIC.EXE RIPPING THROUGH SCREEN TEARING OUT MY GUTS". However, it still feels.. cliche. The  Crucifixion felt random and forced, and connecting it to the calibration felt forced as well. It never actually manages to be creepy, its idea is a bit too short and it doesnt have time to develop. Plus, not being familiar with the game series(Shante), just saying it was all made in the 'artstyle' didn't really describe much.

Overall, it comes out to a 6/10. Im assuming this is your first creepypasta judging by the content, and for what it is, it's alright.

(PS, remember to sign your name, so we know who posted it. Can't give credit to a nameless author)