Talk:The Journal of Neil/@comment-25021327-20150409221340

I ended up liking this more than I anticipated I would. The plot is a pretty standard ghost story, and sometimes I don;t much care for that kind of tale, but this one turned out a bit better than I thought it might.

There are some issues here. This story needs a pretty good proofreading, as some of the errors in punctuation, and capitalization, as well as a few parts that were walls of text distracted me from the writing. However, I felt compelled enough to read through.

I think that maybe what I like here is that this pasta is paced a little more slowly than a lot of others. I tend to like that when I'm reading, as long as the story doesn't drag too much and I didn;t feel like this one did. There were some parts that tested my suspension of disbelief, things involving aspects of the missing child case that the police hadn't picked up on, but they were dealt with relatively realistically in the tone of the story.

Some questions were left unanswered, which is okay with me. I would have liked if there were some reason that Gem sought out Neil, but as it is it's not terribly important I suppose. Maybe she picked someone who was likely to find her... even though she kinda almost drove him insane XD

Anyway, even though in terms of format and typographical errors, this piece is still in pretty rough shape, I wound up liking this more than I thought I would.